Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and sentence structure, make responses more concise and natural, and add specific details. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundant words (e.g., 'dreadful stressful').

예시: I prefer happy music because it helps me relax and lifts my mood. For example, after work I often listen to Michael Jackson to unwind; his upbeat songs make me feel more positive and energetic.

제안: Correct subject-verb agreement and use clearer vocabulary. Give a direct answer, then support with a specific, relevant example and linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like 'improve my route.'

예시: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited. For example, at birthday parties I play upbeat songs as background music because they create a festive atmosphere and encourage people to dance.

제안: Use past tense consistently and correct article usage. Start with a clear statement, then provide specific details about what you learned, using linking words like 'for example' or 'in particular.' Remove repetition.

예시: I only took basic music lessons when I was in primary school. For example, my teacher taught us basic concepts such as melody and rhythm, and introduced some well-known songs to help us practice singing.

제안: Improve grammar (verb forms, articles) and clarity. Give a concise topic sentence, then add one or two specific activities where you listen to music and explain the effect using linking words.

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other activities. For instance, I listen to energetic playlists when I exercise at the gym because they help me stay motivated, and I play soft instrumental music while studying to improve concentration.

× I prefer happy music because listen to it can help me relax and reduce the dreadful stressful.

✓ I prefer happy music because listening to it can help me relax and reduce dreadful stress.

The verb 'listen' needs the -ing form after 'because' when functioning as a gerund explaining a reason. Also 'the dreadful stressful' is incorrect word choice and form; use the noun 'stress' with an adjective 'dreadful' or simply 'dreadful stress'. Suggestion: use gerund after prepositions or as noun phrases and choose correct noun forms. Grammar problem type ID:8

× For example, after work I would like to have a time to listen Michael Jackson song help me to relax, make me positive.

✓ For example, after work I would like to have some time to listen to a Michael Jackson song to help me relax and make me feel positive.

'Have a time' is awkward; 'have some time' is natural. 'Listen' requires the preposition 'to' before the object. 'Michael Jackson song' needs an article 'a' when singular and countable. The clause structure also needs 'to' before the verbs 'help' and 'make' and 'make me feel' for natural phrasing. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Definitely happy music make me feel more exciting.

✓ Definitely, happy music makes me feel more excited.

Subject 'happy music' is singular, so the verb requires third person singular form 'makes'. Also 'exciting' describes something that causes excitement; to describe the feeling use the adjective 'excited'. Grammar problem type ID:2

× For example, when I am in the birthday, I would like to pay some happy birthday song for the background music and I think this can help me to improve my route.

✓ For example, at a birthday, I would like to play some 'Happy Birthday' songs as background music, and I think this can help me improve my mood.

Use 'at a birthday' instead of 'in the birthday'. 'Pay' is incorrect; the verb 'play' is used for music. 'For the background music' is better as 'as background music'. 'Improve my route' is unclear; likely intended 'improve my mood' or 'improve the atmosphere'. Choose vocabulary that fits context. Grammar problem type ID:11

× And it's a celebration.

✓ It's a celebration.

Starting a short sentence with 'And' is informal and unnecessary in this context. Removing 'And' gives a cleaner sentence. Also ensure previous sentence connects smoothly if desired. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I only have basic music lesson.

✓ I only have basic music lessons.

'Lesson' is countable and when speaking generally use the plural 'lessons' or add an article: 'a basic music lesson'. Choose plural to indicate general experience. Grammar problem type ID:22

× When I was in the primary school, I remember that the teacher teach me some foundation concepts, for example the the melody and introduce some well known famous famous song.

✓ When I was in primary school, I remember that the teacher taught me some basic concepts, for example melody, and introduced some well-known songs.

The context is past, so verbs 'teach' and 'introduce' must be past tense 'taught' and 'introduced'. 'Primary school' doesn't need 'the'. 'Foundation concepts' is better as 'basic concepts'. Avoid repeating words ('the the', 'famous famous'). Use hyphen in 'well-known' and plural 'songs' for general reference. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Do you listen to music while doing other things?

✓ Do you listen to music while doing other things?

The question sentence is grammatically correct as written; no correction needed. No error matching the provided list. Grammar problem type ID:2

× Definitely yes, I usually listen to the music when I am exercise in the gyms and which is help me to focus and stay relaxed.

✓ Definitely yes, I usually listen to music when I exercise at the gym, which helps me focus and stay relaxed.

Use the base noun 'music' without 'the' in general statements. 'Exercise' is a verb here and does not need 'am'; use 'when I exercise'. 'In the gyms' should be 'at the gym' or 'in the gym' (singular) for typical activity. 'Which is help' is incorrect; relative clause requires 'which helps' with third person singular verb to agree with 'listening to music'/'it'. Grammar problem type ID:8

× Also I will pay some soft background music when I am study and because it can help me to concentrate better.

✓ Also I will play some soft background music when I study because it can help me concentrate better.

'Pay' is wrong verb; use 'play' for music. 'When I am study' is incorrect; use the verb 'study' or 'am studying' (present simple fits general habit: 'when I study'). Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'help'. Grammar problem type ID:8