Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason and a brief example. Avoid repetition and incorrect tense/form. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

예시: I prefer happy music because it helps me relax and improves my mood. For example, after a stressful day at work I listen to upbeat songs to unwind, which makes me feel more positive and energetic.

제안: Give a direct answer, then explain briefly with a specific reason. Use correct verb forms and remove fillers ('like', 'umm'). Use linking words such as 'because' or 'so' and provide one concise example.

예시: Yes, it does make me feel more excited because energetic melodies and cheerful lyrics remind me of fun experiences. For instance, hearing a lively chorus can make me imagine being at a celebration, which lifts my spirits.

제안: Answer directly and use correct past participle and verb forms. Give a brief additional reason and, if possible, a short contrast or future possibility. Keep it to two sentences max.

예시: No, I haven't taken any music classes because I'm not very interested and I don't feel talented in that area. However, I might try a basic class in the future to learn more about music appreciation.

제안: Be specific about which activities and use clear reasons. Avoid unclear phrases ('stay for coach and dad'). Use linking words to contrast (e.g., 'however', 'but') and correct grammar (tenses, articles).

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while studying or cooking because it helps me concentrate and relax. However, I avoid music during intensive exercise because it distracts me and affects my focus on training.

× I prefer happy music because it helped me to stay tuned and relax after listen to that music and give me some new experience about happy life.

✓ I prefer happy music because it helps me stay focused and relaxed after listening to it and gives me new experiences of a happy life.

Mixed tenses and verb forms: 'prefer' is present, so following verbs should be present (helps, gives). 'helped' is past and incorrect. Use gerund after 'after' (listening). 'stay tuned' is informal; 'stay focused' fits better. Also use 'listening to it' rather than 'listen to that music' for fluency and correct verb pattern. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Happy life, Yes, of course, and not experience a bad life, you know?

✓ I prefer a happy life, of course; I don't want to experience a bad life, you know?

Fragment and unclear structure: the original is a fragment with missing subject and auxiliary. Add subject 'I' and auxiliary 'do' for negative 'don't want to experience'. Use punctuation to separate ideas. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yes, it does give me feel excited because some happy music have like mention about something that have like exciting experience that I haven't never, that I had never learn and never face it.

✓ Yes, it does make me feel excited because some happy songs mention exciting experiences that I have never learned about or faced.

Wrong verb patterns and tense errors: use 'make me feel' rather than 'give me feel'. 'Have like mention' is ungrammatical; use 'mention'. Double negatives 'haven't never' incorrect; use 'have never'. Use present perfect 'have never learned' and 'faced' to match 'have never'. Also 'songs' is more natural than 'music' here. Grammar problem type ID:6

× So it's like also give me excited.

✓ So it also makes me excited.

Incorrect verb form: 'give me excited' is ungrammatical; use 'make me excited' or 'makes me excited' with third-person singular 'it'. Avoid filler 'like'. Grammar problem type ID:8

× Actually I haven't take any music classes because I'm not interested in in it and also I think that I didn't have any talent on this music art.

✓ Actually I haven't taken any music classes because I'm not interested in it, and I also think that I don't have any talent for music.

Use present perfect 'haven't taken' (past participle needed). Remove duplicated 'in'. For ability/opinion use present 'don't have'. Use 'talent for music' rather than 'talent on this music art'. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Yes, I do listen to music while doing anything because it's helped me to stay for coach and dad.

✓ Yes, I listen to music while doing various things because it helps me to stay calm and focused.

Tense and word choice: 'do listen' is emphatic but unnecessary; 'listen' is fine. 'it's helped' mixes present perfect with general habit; use present 'it helps'. 'stay for coach and dad' is unclear; likely meant 'stay calm and focused'. Replace 'anything' with 'various things' for naturalness. Grammar problem type ID:6

× But sometime when I'm doing an exercise, I never listen to the music while doing that because at some time it's lack of my umm, attention to pay for my exercise.

✓ But sometimes when I'm exercising, I don't listen to music because sometimes it distracts me and I can't pay attention to my exercise.

Use plural 'sometimes'. 'Doing an exercise' -> 'exercising'. 'I never listen' is too absolute; use 'I don't listen' or 'I usually don't listen'. 'It's lack of my attention to pay for my exercise' is ungrammatical; express as 'it distracts me and I can't pay attention to my exercise'. Grammar problem type ID:6