Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and use correct article and grammar. Begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), and explain briefly why with a specific reason. Use linking words for coherence.

예시: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and helps me relax. For example, upbeat songs with a fast tempo make me feel energetic and more positive.

제안: Give a short direct answer followed by one or two supporting details using linking words (because/so). This adds depth and meets the maximum-sentence rule.

예시: Yes, it does because the fast rhythm and cheerful melody boost my energy, so I often feel more excited and motivated to do things.

제안: Answer directly and correct verb forms (use past tense for experience). Avoid repetition and fillers. State your situation and give a clear reason or hypothetical consequence with linking words.

예시: No, I haven't taken any music classes, but I would be very happy to join one because I love music and think learning theory and instruments would deepen my appreciation.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence, remove fillers, and give specific reasons with linking words. Explain what you do instead and give a brief example of when you prefer to listen.

예시: No, I usually don't listen to music while working because it distracts me and reduces my concentration. Instead, I prefer to sit quietly and enjoy music in the evening when I want to relax.

× I prefer a happy music because uh, the sad music, uh, make me feel, uh, noisy.

✓ I prefer happy music because sad music makes me feel noisy.

Use of the article 'a' before 'music' is incorrect because 'music' is an uncountable noun and does not take 'a'. Also 'the' before 'sad music' is unnecessary in general statements. Additionally, subject-verb agreement: 'sad music' (singular concept) requires the verb 'makes' rather than 'make'. Suggestions: treat 'music' as uncountable (no 'a'), remove unnecessary 'the', and use 'makes' for third person singular subjects.

× Does happy music make you feel more excited?

✓ Does happy music make you feel more excited?

This sentence is already correct. The auxiliary 'does' is used correctly with the base verb 'make' to form a question in the present simple for third person singular. No change needed.

× Yes it does.

✓ Yes, it does.

The sentence is correct in tense and subject-verb agreement. Add a comma after 'Yes' for natural punctuation. No grammatical tense change required.

× Uh, no, uh, I don't take a, a music classes, but it, if I, if I take, I will be very happy be because I love music very much.

✓ No, I haven't taken any music classes, but if I did, I would be very happy because I love music very much.

Several issues: 'take' is wrong tense for past experience—use present perfect 'haven't taken' to ask about experience up to now. 'a music classes' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'any music classes'. The conditional sentence should match: use second conditional 'if I did, I would be' for hypothetical present situations. Remove extra words like 'be'. Suggestions: use 'haven't taken any music classes' and 'if I did, I would be' to express hypothetical.

× Uh, it's, it's magical, it's feel, it's make, make people feel feel happy.

✓ It's magical; it makes people feel happy.

Pronoun and verb forms: 'it's feel' is incorrect—use 'it makes' to describe what 'it' does. Repetition 'feel feel' is redundant. Use singular verb 'makes' for third person singular subject 'it'. Suggestions: simplify to 'It makes people feel happy.'

× Do you listen to music while doing other things?

✓ Do you listen to music while doing other things?

This question is correct as written; 'listen to music' uses the correct preposition 'to' and the structure 'while doing other things' is appropriate. No change needed.

× Uh, well, uh, no, I don't like to listen, uh, listen music and do uh, thing because I don't focus, focus and uh, mostly stacking.

✓ Well, no, I don't like to listen to music and do other things at the same time because I can't focus and I mostly get distracted.

Errors: 'listen music' needs preposition 'to' ('listen to music'). 'do uh, thing' should be 'do other things'. 'I don't focus' is unnatural; use 'I can't focus'. 'mostly stacking' is unclear—likely 'get distracted'. Suggestions: use 'listen to music', 'do other things', 'can't focus', and 'get distracted' for clarity.

× Uh, I feel, uh, I feel cheerful when uh, I listen music without doing anything, Just uh, just enjoy listening, listening it.

✓ I feel cheerful when I listen to music without doing anything; I just enjoy listening to it.

Errors: 'listen music' needs 'to' ('listen to music'). Capitalization not needed mid-sentence. Repetition 'listening, listening' is redundant. Use 'listen to it' to refer to music. Suggestions: use 'listen to music' and 'enjoy listening to it' for grammatical and natural phrasing.