Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (use gerunds and articles correctly).

예시: I prefer happy music to sad music. For example, upbeat pop songs lift my mood and give me energy, so I often play them when I need to concentrate or relax.

제안: Reduce fillers and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement). Give one clear reason and a brief example of when it excites you. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: Yes, happy music makes me feel excited because the rhythm and melody energize me. For instance, I listen to fast songs before exercising to stay motivated.

제안: Use correct tense and avoid repeating the same idea. Start with a direct answer, then add one specific reason and a future plan. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, I haven't taken any music classes, but I would like to in the future because learning theory and an instrument would improve my singing. If I get the chance, I'll enroll in a local community class next year.

제안: Be more organized and specific. Use linking words (for example, 'when', 'while') and give one or two specific activities and genres. Avoid vague phrases like 'and all and all'.

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while cooking or cleaning. I usually choose upbeat pop songs because they make chores more enjoyable, and sometimes I sing along to lift my spirits.

× I prefer listening happy music rather than listening sad music.

✓ I prefer listening to happy music rather than listening to sad music.

The verb 'prefer' followed by another verb requires 'to' before the gerund phrase when the gerund takes an object (listen to music). The correct structure is 'listen to music' or 'listening to music'. Add 'to' after 'listening' to indicate the object of the action. Suggestion: Use 'prefer listening to ...' or simply 'prefer happy music to sad music.'

× Happy music makes us enjoyable and energetic, and it also boosts our energy.

✓ Happy music makes us feel happy and energetic, and it also boosts our energy.

The adjective 'enjoyable' describes a thing, not a person’s feeling. Use 'feel enjoyable' is awkward; instead say 'feel happy' or 'feel enjoyment.' Also 'makes us enjoyable' is incorrect as music does not make people 'enjoyable.' Use 'makes us feel happy' to describe the emotional effect. Suggestion: Say 'makes us feel happy and energetic.'

× Yes, uh, happy music make me feel so excited and I always listen happy music to enjoy and it is uh so memory boosting and exercising for my body.

✓ Yes, uh, happy music makes me feel so excited and I always listen to happy music to enjoy myself; it is also very good for my memory and for exercising my body.

Subject-verb agreement: 'music' is singular so use 'makes' not 'make' (third person singular). Also 'listen' when followed by an object requires 'to' (listen to music). 'Enjoy' needs an object or reflexive pronoun: 'enjoy myself.' Phrases 'memory boosting' and 'exercising for my body' are awkward; use 'good for my memory' and 'good for exercising my body.' Suggestion: Ensure verbs agree with singular subjects and use 'listen to' plus proper objects like 'enjoy myself.'

× No, I never take any music class before.

✓ No, I have never taken any music class before.

The sentence describes an experience up to now, so the present perfect ('have never taken') is required rather than simple present ('take'). Also the past participle 'taken' must be used after 'have.' Suggestion: Use present perfect for life experiences: 'I have never taken a music class.'

× If I got the opportunity to join a music class in my future, I'll definitely join.

✓ If I get the opportunity to join a music class in the future, I'll definitely join.

In a first conditional about a real future possibility, use present simple ('get') in the if-clause, not past tense ('got'). 'In my future' is unnatural; use 'in the future.' Suggestion: Use 'If I get the opportunity' for likely future conditions.

× And it is good to join music class.

✓ And it is good to join a music class.

Countable singular nouns usually need an article. 'Music class' as a singular countable noun requires 'a' before it. Suggestion: Use 'join a music class' or 'join music classes.'

× And I always prefer to join music class.

✓ And I always prefer to join a music class.

Same issue: singular countable noun 'music class' needs the indefinite article 'a.' Suggestion: Say 'prefer to join a music class' or 'prefer joining music classes.'

× Yes, I listen music when doing something else at my home or going traveling, cooking, washing, cleaning and I always listen happy music, pop songs and all and all.

✓ Yes, I listen to music when I am doing other things at home or when I am traveling, cooking, washing, and cleaning, and I always listen to happy music and pop songs.

Use 'listen to music' not 'listen music.' When describing simultaneous actions, use progressive forms or 'when I am doing.' 'Going traveling' is incorrect—use 'traveling' or 'going traveling' but better 'when I am traveling.' Also add 'to' before 'happy music' and 'pop songs.' Remove redundant 'and all and all.' Suggestion: Use 'listen to music' and consistent verb forms: 'when I am doing other things' or 'while traveling.'

× I also try to sing with the music.

✓ I also try to sing along with the music.

The idiomatic expression is 'sing along with the music,' not 'sing with the music.' Use 'sing along' to indicate singing together with the song. Suggestion: Use phrases like 'sing along to the music' or 'sing along with the music.'