Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct tense usage. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give one specific reason with a brief example. Use present tense for current preferences and linkers like ‘because’ or ‘so’.

예시: I prefer happy music because it boosts my mood and energy. For example, when I listen to upbeat songs in the morning, I feel more motivated to start my day and think positively.

제안: Reduce hesitation and irrelevant phrasing. Give a direct answer, then a specific supporting detail linked with words like ‘because’ or ‘for example’. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and use present tense for habitual reactions.

예시: Yes, absolutely — it often makes me excited because the rhythm and melody energize me. For example, when I hear an upbeat track I love, I often start dancing and lose track of time.

제안: Clarify timeline and tense, remove filler words, and give a short reason. Start with a clear negative, then explain briefly using past tense for childhood and present tense for current situation. Use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’.

예시: No, I haven't attended any music classes. As a child I wanted to, but I was enrolled in dance lessons instead, so I never had time for music lessons.

제안: Be concise and correct grammar: use present tense for current habits and past tense for past effects. State the habit clearly, give a brief reason with a specific example, and use connectors like ‘because’ or ‘so’.

예시: No, I usually don't because music distracts me. For example, when I have tried listening while working, I lost focus and started moving to the music, so I now prefer silence to concentrate better.

× I prefer happy music when I used to hear happy music, it motivates me and also instills positive thoughts more than negative thoughts which help me to boost myself.

✓ I prefer happy music because when I hear happy music it motivates me and instills more positive thoughts than negative ones, which helps me to feel better.

The speaker mixes past habitual 'used to' with a present preference 'I prefer', causing tense inconsistency (Present tense issue). Use the simple present 'hear' to match the general statement. Also correct subject-verb agreement 'which helps' for singular 'which' referring to the situation, and use 'positive ones' to avoid repetition. Suggestions: keep consistent present tense for general truths and ensure verbs agree with their subjects. Grammar_problem_type_id:6

× Yes, absolutely. I feel excited while hearing happy new music. Uh, when I used to hear uh, happy music, uh, which is close to my heart, I started to dance and I forgot the whole universe.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I feel excited when I hear new happy music. When I hear happy music that is close to my heart, I start to dance and forget about the whole world.

The original mixes past habitual 'used to' and past 'started/forgot' with a general present feeling (Present tense issue). For habitual or general reactions use the simple present 'hear', 'start', 'forget'. Also 'whole universe' is idiomaticly 'whole world'. Suggestions: use simple present for regular responses and remove filler sounds for clarity. Grammar_problem_type_id:6

× No, I have not uh, attended any music classes, although I like it. When I used to be a child, I usually prefer music classes, umm, but because of my dance class, uh, I don't have any. It's start time so I can't attend.

✓ No, I have not attended any music classes, although I like music. When I was a child I usually wanted music classes, but because of my dance class I did not have any. It is the start time now, so I could not attend.

Multiple tense problems: 'used to be a child' should be 'was a child' and mixing present 'prefer' with past context (Present tense issue & Past tense issue). 'I have not attended' is fine as present perfect. 'It's start time' is incorrect; use 'It is the start time' or better 'It is the start of my dance class' and adjust modal 'can't' to context (past inability use 'could not' if referring earlier). Suggestions: choose past tense for past situations and present perfect for experience; clarify timing. Grammar_problem_type_id:6

× No, usually I don't listen to music while doing other things. When I used to listen music while talking, I would forgot what I was doing and start dancing, so I become even more distracted. Now I prefer silence so I concentrate on my work better.

✓ No, usually I don't listen to music while doing other things. When I used to listen to music while talking, I would forget what I was doing and start dancing, so I became even more distracted. Now I prefer silence so I can concentrate on my work better.

Issues: 'listen music' requires the preposition 'to' (Incorrect use of prepositions) and 'would forgot' mixes modal 'would' with past participle instead of base form 'forget' or use past 'forgot' (Verb + -ing form and Past tense issue). 'I become' should be 'I became' for past narrative. Also add 'can' to express present ability. Suggestions: use correct verb forms after modals ('would' + base verb) and include 'to' after 'listen'. Ensure tense consistency between past habits and present preferences. Grammar_problem_type_id:8