Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer addresses the question and gives reasons, but there are grammar mistakes, awkward word choices and some redundancy. In English (Thailand): ใช้ประโยคหัวข้อชัดเจน เกลาไวยากรณ์คำศัพท์ที่ผิด เช่น 'persuade emotions' ➜ 'process my emotions', 'should' ➜ 'prefer' or 'listen to', และลดความซ้ำซ้อน ควรใช้เชื่อมโยงสั้นๆ เช่น 'because' หรือ 'so' เพื่อให้ลื่นไหล และไม่เกิน 3–4 ประโยค

예시: I prefer both sad and happy music depending on my mood. When I'm sad, I listen to slow sad songs because they help me process my emotions. When I'm happy, I usually choose upbeat tracks to keep my energy up.

제안: Good idea and example, but vocabulary and grammar are incorrect ('lithiums' irrelevant) and sentence structure is awkward. In English (Thailand): ใช้คำศัพท์ที่เกี่ยวข้อง เช่น 'rhythms' หรือ 'melodies' แทน 'lithiums', และปรับประโยคให้ชัดเจน เช่น 'major chords lift my mood' นอกจากนี้ใช้ลิงก์คำเชื่อมสั้นๆ เช่น 'because' หรือ 'so'

예시: Yes. Upbeat music makes me feel more excited because lively rhythms and major chords lift my mood. For example, I often play EDM when I need to boost my energy.

제안: Content is relevant and clear but watch tense and word choice mistakes. In English (Thailand): แก้คำศัพท์ที่ผิด เช่น 'soul' น่าจะเป็นชื่อเครื่องดนตรีจริงหรือ 'saw' or 'saw u' (saw u is Thai fiddle). ใช้ past tense consistently and say 'it has its own technique' or 'it had its own playing technique' หากไม่แน่ใจ ให้อธิบายสั้นๆ และใช้เชื่อม เช่น 'which' หรือ 'and'

예시: Yes. When I was a child I took music classes for several years. I learned to play a traditional Thai instrument called the saw u, which is similar to a violin and has its own playing technique.

제안: Good structure and specifics, but improve grammar and natural phrasing. In English (Thailand): เปลี่ยน 'more relaxing' เป็น 'more relaxed' หรือ 'relaxed' และใช้ 'enjoy the scenery' แทน 'view beside the road' ใช้เชื่อม 'so' หรือ 'and' เพื่อความลื่นไหล

예시: Yes. I often listen to music while walking to school or work because it helps me feel more relaxed and lets me enjoy the scenery along the way.

× When I'm sad, I listen to sad songs because they match my feelings and help me persuade emotions.

✓ When I'm sad, I listen to sad songs because they match my feelings and help me process emotions.

The student used 'persuade emotions', which is incorrect collocation. The correct verb is 'process' (or 'manage') with 'emotions'. Use verbs that commonly collocate with 'emotions'. Suggestion: learn common verb+noun collocations such as 'process emotions', 'manage emotions'.

× When I'm happy, I should upbeat music to live my.

✓ When I'm happy, I should listen to upbeat music to live my life.

The sentence is missing the main verb 'listen' after the modal 'should' and 'life' is incomplete. Modals require a base verb form after them. Also 'live my' is unfinished; the correct phrase is 'live my life'. Suggestion: after modals (should, could, would), use the base verb form: 'should listen'. Include complete noun phrases: 'my life'.

× Yes, of course, upbeat music definitely makes me feel more excited because lively lithiums and major chords tend to put my energy and mood.

✓ Yes, of course, upbeat music definitely makes me feel more excited because lively rhythms and major chords tend to lift my energy and mood.

The student used 'lithiums', which is incorrect; likely meant 'rhythms'. Also 'put my energy and mood' is ungrammatical; the correct verb is 'lift' or 'boost' with 'energy and mood'. Choose the correct noun and collocate verbs properly. Suggestion: check word choice ('rhythms' not 'lithiums') and use verbs like 'lift'/'boost' with 'energy and mood'.

× For example, I often play EDM music.

✓ For example, I often listen to EDM music.

The verb 'play' can be correct if the student performs EDM, but in the context of listening to music, 'listen to' is the appropriate collocation. The original might be acceptable if the student is a DJ, but based on context 'listen to' fits. Suggestion: use 'listen to EDM music' when referring to hearing music; use 'play' only when performing or playing an instrument.

× Yes. When I was a child, I took music classes for a few years. I learned to play a traditional Thai instrument called the soul, which is similar to a violin, but it's had its own technique.

✓ Yes. When I was a child, I took music classes for a few years. I learned to play a traditional Thai instrument called the saw, which is similar to a violin, but it has its own technique.

The original had 'soul' (wrong noun) and 'it's had its own technique' mixes present contraction and past participle incorrectly. Use the correct instrument name 'saw' (likely 'saw' as in 'saw u'/'saw duang') and present simple 'it has its own technique' to state a general fact. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary for instrument names and use 'it has' for present possession or characteristics.

× Yes, of course I listen to music while doing other things, especially when I walk to school or walk to work.

✓ Yes, of course I listen to music while doing other things, especially when I walk to school or to work.

Repeating 'walk to' is not wrong, but adding 'to' before 'work' makes the sentence parallel and smoother: 'walk to school or to work'. Suggestion: keep prepositional phrases parallel when listing similar actions.

× It makes me feel more relaxing and I can enjoy the view beside the road.

✓ It makes me feel more relaxed and I can enjoy the view beside the road.

Use the adjective 'relaxed' to describe a person’s feeling, not the present participle 'relaxing' which describes something that causes relaxation. 'Beside the road' is acceptable though 'along the road' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'relaxed' for feelings; consider using 'along the road' for more natural phrasing.