Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Jawaban cukup jelas tetapi tidak terstruktur rapi dan ada beberapa kesalahan tata bahasa serta pengulangan. Untuk meningkatkan: (1) Mulailah dengan kalimat topik langsung menjawab pertanyaan (e.g. “I prefer happy music.”). (2) Gunakan 1–2 kalimat pendukung yang spesifik dan singkat (mis. jelaskan alasan atau contoh). (3) Hindari pengulangan frasa dan perbaiki tata bahasa (mis. “saying a sad song” → “singing sad songs”).

예시: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and helps me stay motivated. For example, when I practice singing upbeat songs, I feel more energetic and confident on stage.

제안: Jawaban menunjukkan ide yang baik tetapi tidak jelas dan ada kalimat yang canggung serta pengulangan. Untuk memperbaiki: (1) Berikan satu kalimat topik langsung (Yes, it does) dan jelaskan alasan secara logis (mis. meningkatkan energi atau fokus). (2) Gunakan linking words singkat seperti “because” atau “for example”. (3) Perbaiki struktur kalimat dan hindari frasa tidak perlu (mis. “how can I say”).

예시: Yes, it definitely does because upbeat songs boost my energy and improve my focus. For example, I often play happy music before a rehearsal to feel more motivated and ready.

제안: Jawaban singkat dan relevan tetapi ada kesalahan tata bahasa dan bagian tambahan kurang terstruktur. Untuk memperbaiki: (1) Mulai dengan jawaban jelas (“No, I haven’t taken formal music classes.”). (2) Tambahkan satu kalimat penjelas yang spesifik tentang bagaimana Anda belajar (mis. praktik mandiri, les privat, pengalaman panggung). (3) Perbaiki tata bahasa (mis. “I also a singer” → “I’m a singer” atau “I learn while working”).

예시: No, I haven’t taken formal music classes because of my busy schedule. Instead, I’ve improved my singing through regular practice, online tutorials and performing at local events.

제안: Jawaban mencakup kegiatan yang spesifik tetapi ada kesalahan tata bahasa dan pengulangan. Untuk memperbaiki: (1) Mulai dengan kalimat topik singkat (“Yes, I do.”). (2) Gunakan daftar singkat dengan linking words seperti “for example” atau “such as” untuk memberi rincian. (3) Perbaiki tata bahasa: gunakan bentuk -ing atau infinitive dengan benar dan gabungkan kalimat terakhir dengan jelas (mis. “I don’t listen to music when I study or sleep because it distracts me”).

예시: Yes, I do. For example, I often listen to music while cleaning my room, cooking or gardening because it makes chores more enjoyable. However, I avoid music when I study or sleep because it distracts me.

× I'm actually a singer, I really love happy music, but unfortunately my friends say that I'm better when I'm saying a sad song.

✓ I'm actually a singer; I really love happy music, but unfortunately my friends say that I'm better when I sing a sad song.

The phrase 'when I'm saying a sad song' uses the present continuous incorrectly for a habitual or general ability. Use simple present 'sing' for general statements about ability/performance. Also replace the comma with a semicolon or period for clarity.

× So I don't know. But I really love happy music actually.

✓ So I don't know, but I really love happy music, actually.

This sentence has punctuation and emphasis issues rather than major grammar errors; adding a comma before 'actually' and combining clauses improves flow. No subject-verb change needed, but punctuation makes it grammatical and natural.

× Yes, because I do believe whatever we say, it will be happen.

✓ Yes, because I do believe whatever we say will happen.

'It will be happen' is incorrect word order and uses unnecessary passive construction. The correct future construction is 'will happen' after the clause 'whatever we say'.

× So I choose happy music for umm, how can I say it's like a motivation and also manifestation.

✓ So I choose happy music because it's like motivation and also a way to manifest my goals.

Use 'because' to explain reason, and 'manifestation' is a noun but needs an article and clearer wording. 'A way to manifest my goals' is more natural. Tense 'choose' is acceptable as present habitual.

× So I always choose happy music for making me excited and happy in everything that I work on it.

✓ So I always choose happy music to make me excited and happy in everything I work on.

Use 'to make' (infinitive) rather than 'for making' after 'choose'. Also remove redundant 'it' after 'work on'. The verb 'work on' already needs an object if specific, but here general 'work on' is fine.

× No, I haven't yet because I don't have time. But actually I also a singer, so I guess I learn when I work and I'm doing it.

✓ No, I haven't yet because I don't have time. But actually I'm also a singer, so I guess I learn as I work and do it.

Missing auxiliary 'am' in 'I also a singer' — should be 'I'm also a singer'. 'I guess I learn when I work and I'm doing it' is awkward; use 'as I work and do it' or 'while working' for natural expression.

× Yes, I listening the music while I'm cleaning my room, when I'm working something like cooking, uh, sweeping and also gardening.

✓ Yes, I listen to music while I'm cleaning my room, or doing things like cooking, sweeping, and gardening.

'I listening the music' is incorrect; use base verb 'listen' with 'to' (listen to music). Use '-ing' for gerunds after 'doing things like' and parallel verbs 'cooking, sweeping, gardening'.

× But when I learn, when I sleep, I can't listening to the music because it will be bothered my concentration.

✓ But when I study or sleep, I can't listen to music because it will bother my concentration.

Use base form 'listen' after 'can't'. 'When I learn' is better as 'when I study'. 'It will be bothered my concentration' is ungrammatical — correct is 'it will bother my concentration'.