Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and clear. Start with a concise topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid filler words ("you know") and use correct verb forms and vocabulary (e.g., "I prefer listening to sad songs at midnight" not "I'm prefer to listening"). Keep answers under five sentences.

예시: I choose music depending on my mood. For example, I prefer sad songs at midnight because their slow tempo helps me reflect, while in the morning I usually listen to upbeat rap to energize me for the day.

제안: Answer directly and avoid hesitations. Use a clear topic sentence and one specific example or result. Replace fillers with precise language and correct verb agreement (e.g., "it makes me want to dance"). Use a linking word when adding a result (e.g., "As a result,").

예시: Yes, happy music definitely excites me. For instance, upbeat songs often make me want to dance, and as a result I feel joyful and more confident for the rest of the day.

제안: Give a clear timeline and specific facts. Start with a direct statement about past lessons, then add brief supporting details (age, instrument, teacher). Use correct past tense and simple sentences. Avoid unclear phrases like "run to play" and incorrect pronouns.

예시: Yes, I took piano lessons as a child. I started at about six years old with a teacher who was a friend of my mother, and more recently I have been learning to play the guitar because I want to expand my skills.

제안: Respond clearly and use linking words for different activities. Begin with a direct yes/no (or short affirmation) then explain with specific examples and purpose. Use appropriate vocabulary (e.g., "at the gym" not "hit the gym") and clearer verbs ("helps me focus").

예시: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things. For example, at the gym I play energetic rap to boost my motivation, whereas when I study I prefer instrumental tracks because they help me concentrate.

× Well, actually, it depends on my emotion right now.

✓ Well, actually, it depends on my mood right now.

Use 'mood' instead of 'emotion' in this context because native speakers say 'depends on my mood'. This is not strictly a preposition error but fits vocabulary choice; suggestion: use appropriate collocations (depends on my mood).

× Maybe, you know, in midnight, I'm prefer to listening to some sadly songs, you know, bring me a vibe of darkness.

✓ Maybe, you know, at midnight I prefer to listen to some sad songs that give me a dark vibe.

Errors: 'in midnight' should be 'at midnight' (preposition); 'I'm prefer' wrong verb form—use 'I prefer' (subject + simple present); 'to listening' should be 'to listen' (infinitive after 'prefer'); 'sadly songs' should be 'sad songs' (adjective, not adverb); 'bring me a vibe of darkness' is awkward—use 'give me a dark vibe'. Suggestions: learn preposition 'at' with times, use base form after 'prefer to', and use adjectives to modify nouns.

× And in the morning, of course, they're gonna play a rap touch songs.

✓ And in the morning, of course, I usually listen to songs with a rap touch.

Error: 'they're gonna play' wrongly implies others will play; student should say what they do—use 'I usually listen to'; 'rap touch songs' is awkward—rephrase as 'songs with a rap touch'. Suggestion: choose correct subject pronoun and natural noun phrase order.

× That's, you know, announce my new daily.

✓ That, you know, announces my new daily routine.

Errors: missing subject-verb agreement and incorrect noun choice. 'That's' (that is) requires a verb in third person singular: 'announces'. 'New daily' is ungrammatical—use 'new daily routine'. Suggestion: use correct subject-verb agreement and produce complete noun phrases.

× Well, of course, uh, more than that, when I'm listening to some music, I'm like, uh, you know, I'm gonna pull up and dancing with some, you know, silly, silly dance that's gonna make me feels, you know, uh, a day gonna be, you know, joyful and I feel like successful.

✓ Well, of course. More than that, when I listen to music, I feel like getting up and dancing a silly dance that makes my day joyful and makes me feel successful.

Errors: tense and verb forms. Use simple present 'when I listen' for habitual actions; 'I'm gonna pull up and dancing' mixes forms—use 'feel like getting up and dancing' or 'get up and dance'; 'make me feels' should be 'makes me feel' (subject-verb agreement and base form after 'make'); 'a day gonna be joyful' should be 'makes my day joyful'. Suggestions: use consistent tense for habits, correct verb patterns after 'feel like' and 'make'.

× Well, I used to if music, like running some new musical instruments.

✓ Well, I used to learn music, like trying out new musical instruments.

Errors: 'used to if music' is incorrect—use 'used to learn music' or 'used to take music lessons'; 'running some new musical instruments' is wrong verb and structure—use 'trying out' or 'learning' instruments. Suggestion: use 'used to' + base verb to talk about past habits and choose appropriate verbs for experimenting with instruments.

× I used to play a piano as a child.

✓ I used to play the piano as a child.

Error: article use with musical instruments: use 'the piano' when speaking generally; 'a piano' is possible but 'play the piano' is the common collocation. Suggestion: use 'play the piano' for general ability.

× Maybe I'm six years old, the teacher is my her mum's friends and now I'm run to play guitar to become more cool guys.

✓ Maybe I was six years old; the teacher was a friend of my mother's, and now I am learning to play the guitar to become cooler.

Multiple errors: tense should be past 'I was six years old'; 'the teacher is my her mum's friends' has pronoun and number errors—use 'a friend of my mother's' (singular possessive); 'now I'm run to play guitar' is wrong verb—use 'now I am learning to play the guitar'; 'to become more cool guys' is ungrammatical—use 'to become cooler' or 'to feel cooler'. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense, correct possessive forms, and use proper verb phrases for current activities.

× Well, absolute, you know, when I'm hit the gym, I need some, uh, type of rap music to boost my mood, to have me pull away.

✓ Well, absolutely. When I hit the gym, I need some rap music to boost my mood and help me power through.

Errors: 'Well, absolute' should be 'Well, absolutely' (adverb); 'when I'm hit the gym' incorrect auxiliary—use 'when I hit the gym' (simple present for habitual); 'type of rap music' can be simplified to 'some rap music'; 'to have me pull away' is awkward—use 'help me power through' or 'help me keep going'. Suggestion: use correct adverb forms, simple present for habits, and natural collocations.

× And moreover, when I'm studying, I'm used to listening to some kind of music, just playing sounds of instruments to make my mind, you know, stay in focus.

✓ Moreover, when I'm studying, I usually listen to instrumental music to help me stay focused.

Errors: 'I'm used to listening' is not wrong but 'I usually listen' is more natural for habit; 'some kind of music, just playing sounds of instruments' is wordy—use 'instrumental music'; 'to make my mind stay in focus' should be 'to help me stay focused' (adjective 'focused'). Suggestion: use concise phrasing and 'stay focused' collocation.