Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms and articles, and add a brief reason with a linking word. Keep it concise (no more than 4–5 sentences). For example, say “I prefer happy music” then give one specific reason and a short example.

예시: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and helps me relax. For example, I often play upbeat pop songs when I need energy for studying. Also, happy music sounds more positive than sad songs, so I usually avoid sad music.

제안: Provide a clear direct answer, correct grammar and tense, and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid filler sounds and unfinished sentences. Give one reason and a short personal example to support your claim, using present tense for general truths.

예시: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited and improves my mood. For instance, when I'm feeling down, upbeat songs cheer me up and motivate me to be active. Therefore, I often listen to lively music to boost my spirits.

× I prefer to listen happy music because I don't think I like the sad music.

✓ I prefer listening to happy music because I don't think I like sad music.

The verb 'prefer' is commonly followed by a gerund (verb+ing) or 'to' + infinitive; here 'listening to' is the natural structure. Also the preposition 'to' is required after 'listen' when followed by an object. Remove the unnecessary definite article before 'sad music' unless referring to a specific set of sad songs. Suggestion: use 'I prefer listening to happy music' or 'I prefer to listen to happy music.'

× Oh yeah, of course. Uh, happy music make me feel more excited and make me feel better when I.

✓ Oh yeah, of course. Uh, happy music makes me feel more excited and makes me feel better when I am sad.

The subject 'happy music' is singular, so verbs must take the third person singular form with an -s: 'makes.' Also the sentence ends abruptly with 'when I.' A complete clause is needed; likely 'when I am sad.' Use 'makes me feel more excited and makes me feel better when I am sad.'

× When I was sad, so happy music, it's comfortable for me to listen.

✓ When I am sad, happy music is comforting for me to listen to.

The original has mixed tense and an awkward structure. 'When I was sad' mixes past with present context; use present 'When I am sad' to match general preference. 'So happy music, it's comfortable for me to listen' is ungrammatical and needs rephrasing: use 'happy music is comforting' and include the preposition 'to' after 'listen.' 'Comforting' is a more natural adjective than 'comfortable' in this context. Suggestion: 'When I am sad, happy music is comforting for me to listen to.'