Music— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and direct, which is good. To improve, add one or two specific reasons or examples and use a linking phrase to connect ideas. Keep it natural and avoid redundancy. Aim for 2–3 concise sentences (no more than 5).

예시: I definitely prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and helps me concentrate. For example, upbeat pop songs make me feel energised when I’m studying or exercising.

제안: Your response shows agreement but is repetitive and a little inconsistent (you mention ‘classical music’ which is often calmer). To improve, state your opinion directly, give a specific reason, and avoid filler phrases like “you know” and repeated words. Use a linking word to connect your reason and example. Keep total length within 3 sentences.

예시: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more excited because the upbeat rhythm and positive lyrics boost my energy. For example, listening to an energetic orchestral piece or an upbeat pop track helps me feel more motivated before exercise.

× I really agree with this statement.

✓ I agree with this statement.

'Really agree' is not incorrect grammatically but 'really' is redundant here; use simple present 'I agree' to match natural response. Suggestion: remove 'really' for clarity and formality.

× It's happy music really makes people excited.

✓ Happy music really makes people excited.

The original uses an unnecessary existential 'It's' construction that is ungrammatical here. Remove 'It's' and use the simple declarative sentence 'Happy music really makes people excited.' Also move 'really' before the verb for natural adverb placement.

× For example, like when I listen to classical music that I prefer, you know, I always feel happier and more excited.

✓ For example, when I listen to the classical music I prefer, I always feel happier and more excited.

The original is wordy and contains filler 'like' and 'you know' which disrupt sentence structure. 'Classical music that I prefer' is awkward; use 'the classical music I prefer' for correct noun phrase structure. Remove fillers to make the sentence concise and grammatically correct.