Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct basic grammar and pronoun use. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid small hesitations and unnecessary repetition.

예시: Yes. My favorite teacher was my mother, who taught me in middle school. She was kind but strict, for example she insisted I call her by her surname at school to keep professional boundaries. Because of her guidance I became more disciplined and focused on my studies.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and then one or two clear reasons with linking words. Correct repetition and use natural phrasing (e.g., 'I don't have the patience' or 'I lack the passion'). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: No, I don't plan to be a teacher. I feel I lack the patience and passion needed to work with children, and I prefer careers that better match my interests in technology and research.

제안: Avoid hesitations and finish your thought. Start with a clear statement, then give a specific memorable incident and explain its impact. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'because' to connect ideas and end with a result or feeling.

예시: Yes, I remember my middle-school math teacher very well. For example, she once corrected me harshly in class so I cried, but because of that I worked harder and my grades improved, so I am grateful for her strictness.

제안: Be specific about current contact and future plans. Use one clear topic sentence, then add details about how and when you will reconnect. Remove filler and correct grammar (e.g., 'when I have free time' or 'after I finish my studies').

예시: Not at the moment, but I would like to reconnect with them. For example, when I finish my studies and have free time, I plan to visit my primary school and bring small appreciation gifts to thank the teachers.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence describing the main ways the teacher helped, then support with specific examples and outcomes. Correct grammar (e.g., 'helped me by giving me motivation and advice') and avoid filler words.

예시: She helped me by giving motivation and practical advice. For instance, she encouraged me to attend school regularly and complete my homework, which improved my study habits and my grades.

제안: Provide a direct answer then explain briefly why with specific comparisons. Use linking words to structure the response and avoid repeating phrases. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: I can't choose between them; I appreciate both equally. Primary teachers helped build my foundation, while high school teachers prepared me for higher study, and together they inspired me to pursue studying abroad.

× She is very kind and thoughtful and she is my teacher in my middle school.

✓ She is very kind and thoughtful and she was my teacher in middle school.

The student uses present tense 'is' to describe a past role; pronoun use is not strictly wrong but the tense must match the situation. Change 'is' to 'was' to indicate that the teaching relationship occurred when the speaker was in middle school. Also remove the article 'my' before 'middle school' for natural phrasing.

× And I still remember how she was straight with me and I'm not supposed to call him mum at school.

✓ I still remember how she was strict with me and I was not supposed to call her 'mum' at school.

There are multiple issues: incorrect pronoun 'him' should be 'her' to match 'she'; 'straight' is the wrong adjective — 'strict' is correct; tense consistency requires 'was not supposed' rather than 'I'm not supposed' because the event is in the past. Quotation marks in speech are kept here as single quotes in JSON.

× But finally enough we talk about it and I agree with it.

✓ But finally we talked about it and I agreed with her.

The original sentence has awkward word order and tense mismatch. Use past tense 'talked' and 'agreed' to match past context. Replace 'agree with it' with 'agreed with her' to refer clearly to the mother and correct pronoun reference.

× Not really. I think because I personally think that I do not have the characteristic to be a teacher such as be being passion to children or even have the passion to teach others kids.

✓ Not really. I personally think that I do not have the characteristics to be a teacher, such as being passionate about children or having a passion for teaching other kids.

Problems: redundant 'I think because I personally think'; 'characteristic' should be plural 'characteristics'; incorrect verb forms 'be being passion' should be 'being passionate about' and 'have the passion to teach others kids' should be 'having a passion for teaching other kids'. Correct present-tense forms and smoother phrasing.

× And yeah, so I think that I'm not suitable to be a teacher in the future.

✓ So I think that I'm not suited to be a teacher in the future.

'Not suitable to be' is understandable but 'not suited to be' or 'not suitable to become' is more natural. Maintain future reference 'in the future' while using correct adjective form 'suited'.

× Yeah, of course there's this one teacher that teach me math in my middle school.

✓ Yeah, of course there's this one teacher who taught me math in middle school.

Subject-verb agreement and tense: 'teacher that teach' should be 'teacher who taught' because the teaching occurred in the past. Use 'who' for people and past tense 'taught' for a past event. Remove 'my' before 'middle school' for natural phrasing.

× She was very, uh, what do you call it? Very straight with me.

✓ She was, uh, very strict with me.

'Straight' is the wrong adjective; the correct word to describe a disciplinarian is 'strict'. Keep past tense 'was' to describe past behavior.

× But of course I know that it's for my own goods.

✓ But of course I knew that it was for my own good.

Tense inconsistency: the speaker refers to a past event, so use past tense 'knew' and 'was'. Also 'goods' is incorrect here; the correct phrase is 'for my own good'.

× For example, she was straight to actually make me cry in one class, but I still.

✓ For example, she was strict enough to actually make me cry in one class, but I still appreciated her.

The original fragment 'but I still.' lacks a main verb and is incomplete. Replace 'straight' with 'strict', add 'enough' for natural phrasing, and complete the sentence by stating 'I still appreciated her' to express the intended meaning.

× Not really, but I would love to be in touch with them.

✓ Not really, but I would love to keep in touch with them.

'Be in touch' is understandable but 'keep in touch' is more idiomatic when referring to maintaining contact. Modal 'would' is fine.

× And I also want to go back to my primary school to, uh, meet them and give them some appreciation gifts.

✓ I also want to go back to my primary school to meet them and give them some appreciation gifts.

Remove filler pauses for clarity. The sentence is otherwise fine; keep infinitive 'to meet' to express purpose.

× And also, for example, I think that I would go when I'm free and after I, I'm study after I.

✓ For example, I think I would go when I'm free and after I finish my studies.

Original is fragmented and repetitive. Replace 'after I, I'm study after I' with 'after I finish my studies' to create a complete, grammatical clause indicating time.

× Uh, my favorite teacher help help me by giving me some motivation and also advices on what to be in the future and what characteristic should I implement in my life to be a good student.

✓ My favorite teacher helped me by giving me motivation and also advice on what to do in the future and which characteristics I should develop to be a good student.

Multiple issues: double 'help', wrong verb tense ('help' -> 'helped' for past), uncountable noun 'advice' not 'advices', 'what to be in the future' should be 'what to do in the future', and question word order 'what characteristic should I implement' should be a statement 'which characteristics I should develop'. Use past tense consistently.

× And also, for example, that she will always advise me to go, uh, to school every day and do homework.

✓ For example, she would always advise me to go to school every day and do my homework.

Tense and modal: since speaker refers to past advice, 'would always advise' or 'always advised' is better than 'will'. Also add possessive 'my homework' for clarity.

× I don't really think about that but I think that I love both of my teachers especially.

✓ I don't really think about that, but I think that I especially love both my teachers.

Word order: placing 'especially' after 'love' or before 'love' is more natural. Also remove extraneous 'of' in 'both of my teachers' -> 'both my teachers' is acceptable; keep present tense as expressing current feelings.

× They actually help me to grow to who I am today and I appreciate them for that.

✓ They actually helped me to become who I am today, and I appreciate them for that.

Tense consistency: the formative influence occurred in the past, so use past tense 'helped' and 'become' instead of 'grow to who I am'. This provides clearer, grammatical wording.

× So I will not choose any because I think that they are both are very influential in my life that makes me who I am today and thank to them I'm here pursuing to study abroad.

✓ So I would not choose between them because I think they are both very influential in my life, and thanks to them I'm here pursuing studies abroad.

Multiple issues: 'I will not choose any' -> 'I would not choose between them' is more natural; remove duplicate 'are'; use 'thanks to them' (not 'thank to them'); 'pursuing to study abroad' -> 'pursuing studies abroad' or 'studying abroad'. Use conditional 'would' for preference and correct article and preposition usage.