Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, correct grammar, and use clear vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence (who and why), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unclear words (e.g., 'circumcised') and repeated phrases.

예시: Yes. My favourite teacher at school was Mr. Khan because his teaching was very practical. For example, he used everyday examples and hands-on activities, which helped me understand difficult topics clearly and think more critically.

제안: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Use a clear reason linked to future plans and provide one specific detail about your career interests. Keep sentences short and grammatically correct.

예시: No, I don't want to be a teacher. I am studying computer science and I am passionate about coding and Python development, so I plan to pursue a career in software development instead.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence naming the teacher, then give one or two specific examples of what made them memorable. Use correct verb forms and pronouns, and avoid filler words like 'uh'.

예시: Yes. I still remember my teacher, Mr. Ramzan Khan, because his lessons were very practical. For instance, he related topics to real-life problems and gave clear examples that helped me solve exercises and remove all my doubts.

제안: Give a direct answer and one supporting detail explaining how you stay in touch and why. Avoid repeating the same idea and correct possessive and article errors.

예시: Yes, I am still in touch with some of my primary school teachers. For example, Mr. Sarindraan Khan, who taught computer basics, advises me on my university projects and we communicate by phone and email.

제안: Start with a clear statement of the main ways the teacher helped you, then give specific examples. Use correct tense and pronouns, and connect ideas with linking words like 'for example' or 'also'.

예시: My favourite teacher helped me in several ways. For example, he always explained solutions when I was stuck with a problem, and he also provided career advice when I applied to university, which helped me choose the right course.

제안: Give a clear comparison and one specific reason. Avoid incorrect terms (e.g., 'Prime Minister') and fix grammar. Use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore' and keep to two or three sentences.

예시: Yes, I prefer primary school teachers because they build strong foundations. For instance, they focus on basic language and study habits, which makes it easier to learn advanced subjects later.

× Yes, I have favorite teacher at my school time and that favorite teacher is circumcised and the method of the teacher is very well.

✓ Yes, I had a favorite teacher during my time at school, and that teacher was kind and taught very well.

Incorrect or missing articles ('a favorite teacher', 'my school time' should be 'during my time at school'). 'Circumcised' is incorrect word choice—likely meant 'kind' or 'caring'. Verb tense: 'have' should be past 'had' to match 'my time at school'. Also 'the method of the teacher is very well' is ungrammatical; use 'taught very well' or 'had a very effective teaching method'. Suggest using precise vocabulary and correct articles and past tense for past experience.

× We understood each and every point clearly.

✓ We understood every point clearly.

Sentence is grammatical but can be simplified. 'Each and every' is redundant. Keep past tense 'understood' to describe past learning. Suggest concise phrasing: 'understood every point clearly'.

× He gives the practical.

✓ He gave practical examples.

Wrong tense and article. Context is past, so use past tense 'gave'. 'the practical' is incomplete; use 'practical examples' or 'practical demonstrations'. Suggest using plural when generalizing examples.

× He gave us the practical example that clear our concept about the topic and enhance our learning and improve our thinking.

✓ He gave us practical examples that clarified our understanding of the topic, enhanced our learning, and improved our thinking.

Mix of tenses and incorrect verb forms: 'clear' should be past 'clarified' to match 'gave'; 'enhance' and 'improve' should be past 'enhanced' and 'improved'. Also use plural 'examples' and correct noun phrase 'clarified our understanding'. Maintain parallel past-tense verbs and parallel structure for clarity.

× No, I do not want to be teacher in the future because I am a computer science student and I have interested in coding, graphic designing and Python development and more things in that field.

✓ No, I do not want to be a teacher in the future because I am a computer science student and I am interested in coding, graphic design, Python development, and other areas in that field.

Missing article 'a teacher'. Incorrect verb form 'I have interested' should be 'I am interested'. Use noun 'graphic design' rather than 'graphic designing'. Use commas for list and 'other areas' for clarity. Maintain future intention with 'in the future' while describing current interests in present tense.

× So I don't know I have to not interest.

✓ So I don't know; I am just not interested in teaching.

Unclear word order and incorrect verbs. 'I have to not interest' is ungrammatical. Use 'I am not interested' to express lack of interest. Add punctuation to separate clauses.

× I have do not have personal interest in the teaching so I do not think I would want to become doctor, teacher or teacher.

✓ I do not have a personal interest in teaching, so I do not think I would want to become a doctor or a teacher.

Incorrect pronoun/auxiliary order 'I have do not have' should be 'I do not have'. Article missing before roles: 'a doctor' and 'a teacher'. Repetition 'or teacher' duplicated—remove duplication. Use 'personal interest in teaching' (no 'the'). Ensure parallel structure for 'become a doctor or a teacher'.

× Yes, I am a teacher in my past and my school life which I can still remember.

✓ Yes, I had a teacher in my past school life whom I can still remember.

Incorrect structure: 'I am a teacher in my past' should be 'I had a teacher'. Use 'whom' to refer to the teacher and place 'in my past school life' correctly. Use past tense for past events.

× Uh, the teacher is served Ramzan Khan.

✓ The teacher was Mr Ramzan Khan.

'Is served' is incorrect verb usage. Use simple past 'was' to introduce who the teacher was. Include title 'Mr' if appropriate and correct name placement. Keep tense consistent.

× The method of their teaching is very amazing.

✓ His teaching method was excellent.

Pronoun agreement: earlier singular 'teacher' requires singular pronoun 'his' (or 'her'). Use past tense 'was' for past teacher. Replace vague 'very amazing' with 'excellent' for natural expression.

× They give us practical example and related to real life that solve the problem very easily and clear our all concepts and doubts.

✓ He gave us practical examples related to real life that solved problems easily and cleared all our concepts and doubts.

Pronoun consistency: switch to 'he' if singular. Tense should be past: 'gave', 'solved', 'cleared'. Use plural 'examples'. Correct word order: 'cleared all our concepts and doubts' or better 'cleared up all our doubts and concepts'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and consistent tense.

× This is method of teaching is.

✓ This was his method of teaching.

Redundant 'is' and wrong word order. Use past tense 'was' and correct noun phrase 'method of teaching' with possessive 'his'.

× Yes, I am still in touch with the primary school teacher.

✓ Yes, I am still in touch with my primary school teacher.

Missing possessive pronoun 'my' before 'primary school teacher'. Use 'my' to show personal relationship.

× I am computer science student and Sarindraan Khan is also a computer science teacher so they help me a lot in my the computer science degree.

✓ I am a computer science student and Sarindraan Khan is also a computer science teacher, so he has helped me a lot in my computer science degree.

Missing article 'a computer science student'. Use singular pronoun 'he' to refer to Sarindraan Khan. Remove extra 'the' before 'computer science degree'. Use present perfect 'has helped' to show ongoing assistance up to now.

× So I am currently living in touch with the my primary school teacher and I am personal strong relationship with lab teachers.

✓ So I am currently in touch with my primary school teacher, and I have a strong personal relationship with the lab teachers.

Incorrect phrase 'living in touch' should be 'in touch'. Remove extra 'the'. Use 'I have a strong personal relationship' for natural English. Keep consistent present tense for current situation.

× You're my favorite teacher helped me in many ways.

✓ My favorite teacher helped me in many ways.

Incorrect use of 'You're' (you are) at sentence start; should be simple subject 'My favorite teacher'. Keep past tense 'helped' to describe past actions.

× When I got stuck in the some problem, they helped me and tell me how to solve that problem and they also helped me in my career counseling when I was taking admission at the university.

✓ When I got stuck on a problem, he helped me and told me how to solve it, and he also helped me with career counselling when I was applying to university.

Use preposition 'stuck on a problem'. Use article 'a problem'. Pronoun consistency: use 'he' if singular. Verb tenses: 'told' past, 'helped' past. 'Taking admission at the university' should be 'applying to university' or 'when I was admitted to university'. 'Career counselling' spelling adjusted. Use 'it' to avoid repetition.

× They also guided me how that I achieved graduation.

✓ He also guided me so that I could graduate.

Awkward phrasing 'guided me how that I achieved graduation'. Use 'guided me so that I could graduate' or 'guided me through the process of graduating'. Keep past tense and clear purpose clause.

× Yes, I like the Prime Minister more than high school teacher because the primary school teacher make the pace of the student and if you're this strong, you will perform better in the future.

✓ Yes, I like primary school teachers more than high school teachers because primary school teachers set the pace for students, and if you become strong in basics, you will perform better in the future.

'Prime Minister' is incorrect word—should be 'primary school teachers'. Use plural for generalization. Verb agreement: 'teacher make' -> 'teachers make' or 'set the pace'. 'you're this strong' unclear; replace with 'if you become strong in basics'. Maintain parallel structure and correct nouns.

× So I think primary school teacher are more better than the school teacher.

✓ So I think primary school teachers are better than high school teachers.

Incorrect comparative 'more better' redundant; use 'better'. Use plural 'teachers' for general statement. Clarify comparison: 'high school teachers' instead of 'the school teacher'.

× Primary school teacher if you are source of language is good at the primary school then you can survive anywhere in the world if you have.

✓ If primary school teachers teach you well in language at an early age, then you can succeed anywhere in the world.

Original is ungrammatical and fragmented. Reorder to conditional structure: 'If primary school teachers teach you well in language at an early age, then you can succeed anywhere in the world.' Remove trailing incomplete clause and use clear verb 'succeed' instead of 'survive'.