Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp (thì động từ, số ít/như số nhiều), cách dùng từ và tính mạch lạc. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng thì phù hợp (past for past events), tránh lặp từ, và thêm chi tiết cụ thể hỗ trợ (ví dụ phương pháp dạy, một tình huống cụ thể). Hơn nữa hãy dùng liên từ để nối ý (for example, because, so) và giữ độ dài không quá 4-5 câu.

예시: My favorite teacher was my secondary school English teacher because she was very patient and made lessons interesting. For example, she used role-plays and group discussions to help us practise speaking. Because of her regular feedback and encouragement, I became much more confident when speaking English.

제안: Cần sửa cấu trúc câu và từ vựng (want to, main career/job, part-time). Trình bày rõ ý chính đầu tiên, sau đó giải thích lý do cụ thể và kết luận ngắn gọn. Tránh lỗi từ vựng sai (draft, bus, park time).

예시: I don't want to be a teacher as my main career because I prefer working in technology. The tech industry offers a faster pace and more flexible hours. However, I would like to teach part-time occasionally because I enjoy helping students learn.

제안: Cần dùng thì đúng (past), sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (was, asking me to realise?), và hoàn thiện ý ví dụ cụ thể. Hãy nêu một hoạt động cụ thể mà giáo viên làm (vd: asked me to speak in front of class) và kết hợp liên từ để mạch lạc hơn.

예시: Yes, I still remember my high school English teacher. She was very patient and encouraging and helped me build my speaking confidence. For example, she often asked me to give short presentations in front of the class, which improved my fluency and confidence.

제안: Cần sửa ngữ pháp và trật tự từ (I am not still in touch → I am not still in touch with most of my primary school teachers), dùng thì phù hợp (moved). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về lý do và tình trạng liên lạc (ví dụ: only keep contact with one teacher on social media).

예시: No, I'm not still in touch with most of my primary school teachers because I moved to a different city and became busy with university and work. I only keep in contact with one teacher via social media.

제안: Cần viết câu rõ ràng, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (was, helped me by encouraging me), loại bỏ cụm từ không rõ nghĩa (extreme practice, friendly Facebook). Nên nêu các hành động cụ thể giáo viên làm (encouraged speaking, provided exercises, gave feedback) và kết quả rõ ràng.

예시: My favourite teacher was my secondary school English teacher. She helped me by encouraging me to speak more in class and giving me regular speaking exercises and feedback. As a result, I became more confident and my speaking improved significantly.

제안: Cần sửa chủ-động (I prefer my primary school teachers), ngữ pháp (were → were/made), chính tả (patient), và diễn đạt cụ thể hơn về phương pháp dạy (games and songs). Tránh câu lặp và cung cấp ví dụ hoàn chỉnh, mạch lạc.

예시: I prefer my primary school teachers because they were more patient and made lessons fun. For example, they used games and songs to teach reading, which made it easier and more enjoyable to learn.

× Yes, I have a favorite teacher, my secondary school English teacher. I like her because she were very patient and she make lessons interesting and she helped me improve my speaking for example.

✓ Yes, I have a favorite teacher, my secondary school English teacher. I like her because she was very patient, she made lessons interesting, and she helped me improve my speaking, for example.

Errors: 'were' should be 'was' for singular past (Subject-verb agreement / past tense) and 'make' should be 'made' to match past tense. Use commas and conjunctions to join clauses. Suggestion: Use past simple for completed actions in the past and ensure subject-verb agreement (she + was/made/helped).

× I don't think want to be a teacher as my main draft.

✓ I don't think I want to be a teacher as my main career.

Missing subject 'I' after 'think' and incorrect noun 'draft' should be 'career'. Use 'I don't think I want' for the present opinion. Suggestion: Include necessary subjects and choose correct vocabulary for meaning.

× I prefer working in technology because the pace is better and is more flexible at bus.

✓ I prefer working in technology because the pace is better and it is more flexible by bus.

Missing subject 'it' and wrong preposition 'at bus'. Also the meaning likely needs 'by bus' to indicate mode of transportation. Suggestion: Ensure sentences have subjects for verbs and use correct prepositions ('by bus').

× I would like to take park time sometime because I enjoy helping students learn.

✓ I would like to take part-time work sometime because I enjoy helping students learn.

Wrong word 'park' should be 'part-time'; missing noun to follow 'take' (take part-time work or take a part-time job). Suggestion: Use correct compound adjective 'part-time' and include the noun 'job' or 'work'.

× MMM yes, I still remember my high school teacher, English teacher. She were very patient and inquiring and she helped me improve my speaking confidence.

✓ Yes, I still remember my high school English teacher. She was very patient and inquisitive, and she helped me improve my speaking confidence.

Use 'was' for singular past (subject-verb agreement/past tense). 'Inquiring' is awkward; 'inquisitive' or 'curious' fits better. Suggestion: Use correct past tense and choose appropriate adjective forms.

× For example. She often asked me to realise.

✓ For example, she often asked me to realize my mistakes and correct them.

Sentence fragment 'For example.' should attach to following clause. 'Asked me to realise' is unclear — likely 'realize my mistakes' or 'speak more'. Suggestion: Combine into one complete sentence and provide the object of 'realize'.

× Yes I but I not still in touch with more of primary school teacher because I am moved to a different city and I got busy with university and work.

✓ Yes, but I am not still in touch with most of my primary school teachers because I moved to a different city and got busy with university and work.

Incorrect word order and pronouns: 'I but I not still' should be 'but I am not still' or better 'but I am not in touch'. 'more of primary school teacher' should be 'most of my primary school teachers'. Tense: 'am moved' incorrect — use 'moved'. Suggestion: Use correct subject-verb order, pluralize 'teachers', and use simple past for completed move.

× My favorite English were my secondary school English teacher and she helped me my encouragement to me to speak more in class examples, gave me extreme practice and friendly Facebook, and that made me feel more confident and improve my speaking.

✓ My favorite English teacher was my secondary school English teacher; she encouraged me to speak more in class, gave me extensive practice and friendly feedback, and that made me feel more confident and improved my speaking.

Multiple errors: 'were' should be 'was' (subject-verb agreement/past tense). 'helped me my encouragement to me' is ungrammatical — use 'encouraged me'. 'extreme practice' likely 'extensive practice'. 'friendly Facebook' should be 'friendly feedback'. Parallel structure: 'made me feel more confident and improved my speaking' uses correct verb forms. Suggestion: Use correct verbs, appropriate vocabulary, and parallel sentence structure.

× Hmm I prefer my primary school teacher because they are they were more patent patient and they make lessons so I enjoy learning.

✓ I prefer my primary school teachers because they were more patient and they made lessons enjoyable, so I enjoyed learning.

Mixed tenses 'are they were' — choose past 'were' to match context. 'patent' misspelling should be 'patient'. 'make lessons so I enjoy learning' awkward — better 'made lessons enjoyable, so I enjoyed learning.' Suggestion: Keep consistent tense, correct spelling, and rephrase for naturalness.

× For example 1 digit use game and song to take reading.

✓ For example, they used games and songs to teach reading.

Incorrect word order and word choice: '1 digit use game' is unclear — likely 'they used games' and 'to take reading' should be 'to teach reading'. Suggestion: Use correct verbs and plural nouns when referring to habitual past actions ('used games and songs').