Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more natural and grammatical by using complete sentences, a clear topic sentence, and one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes. My favorite teacher was Mr. Charles from secondary school because he was very passionate about teaching. For example, he often gave extra lessons after school to help struggling students, which improved my understanding and confidence.

제안: Correct grammar and streamline your explanation: use one clear reason and a concise supporting detail. Replace awkward phrases and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: No, I don't want to be a teacher because I plan to become a pharmacist. I am passionate about healthcare and helping people stay healthy, so a pharmacy career suits my interests better.

제안: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure: start with a concise topic sentence and give a specific example of what the teacher did to help you, using linking words for coherence.

예시: Yes, I still remember Mr. Charles from secondary school because he helped me improve academically. For instance, he gave clear explanations and extra practice tests, which helped me pass my exams.

제안: Make your answer grammatically correct and more concise. State the main point first, then give a specific reason and a brief future plan using linking words like 'because' and 'but'.

예시: No, I'm not currently in touch with my primary school teachers because I graduated many years ago. However, I have tried to contact them through social media and hope to visit or meet them in the future.

제안: Combine the fragmented sentences into a clear, fluent response. Give a specific method the teacher used and a concrete result, using linking words for flow.

예시: He helped me understand difficult subjects like chemistry and physics by explaining concepts simply and giving practical examples. As a result, I went from failing science tests to passing them confidently.

제안: Avoid fillers and correct vocabulary and grammar errors. State your preference clearly, give one or two specific reasons, and finish with a complete sentence. Replace unclear words (e.g., 'exiled') with the correct term ('excel').

예시: I prefer my secondary school teachers to my primary school teacher because they made extra effort to help us excel academically. For example, they offered after-class tutoring and frequent feedback, whereas my primary teacher had less time for individual support.

× Yes, I had the favorite teacher when I was in secondary school.

✓ Yes, I had a favorite teacher when I was in secondary school.

Use of the definite article 'the' before 'favorite teacher' is incorrect because the speaker is introducing one among many possible favorite teachers rather than a specific known one; use the indefinite article 'a'.

× Was very passionate about his teaching and would always take the students on extra lessons.

✓ He was very passionate about his teaching and would always take the students for extra lessons.

The sentence is missing the subject 'He' which makes it a sentence fragment; add the subject. Also, the preposition 'on' is less natural with 'take the students'; 'for extra lessons' or 'to extra lessons' is better.

× No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future because that's not the career I wish to practice by intend being.

✓ No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future because that's not the career I intend to pursue.

The original phrase 'wish to practice by intend being' is ungrammatical. Replace with 'intend to pursue' which correctly expresses future career intention. Also simplifies and corrects verb pattern.

× I intend becoming a pharmacist because I am passionate about the well-being of the people.

✓ I intend to become a pharmacist because I am passionate about people's well-being.

After 'intend' the correct structure is 'intend to' + base verb, not gerund. Also 'the people' is awkward; 'people's well-being' is more natural and concise.

× Yes, I have a teacher that I still remember till date and his name is Mr. Charles.

✓ Yes, I have a teacher whom I still remember to this day; his name is Mr. Charles.

Use 'whom' (object form) or restructure; 'till date' is nonstandard — 'to this day' is clearer. Also separate clauses with a semicolon or period for clarity.

× Mr. Charles was the one that made me to be very good in my studies.

✓ Mr. Charles was the one who made me very good at my studies.

Remove the unnecessary 'to' after 'made'. Use 'who' for people (relative pronoun) and 'good at' is the correct preposition for skill/subject competence.

× He ensured that I passed my exams.

✓ He ensured that I passed my exams.

The sentence is grammatically correct; 'ensured that I passed' correctly uses past tense to describe a past action, so no change is needed.

× No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers because it's been a long time I graduated from primary school.

✓ No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers because it's been a long time since I graduated from primary school.

The phrase 'a long time I graduated' is incorrect; use 'since I graduated' to indicate the time elapsed from a past event to now.

× Although I have been making an extra effort to get in touch with them, hopefully in the future I will get to see them.

✓ Although I have been making extra efforts to get in touch with them, hopefully I will be able to see them in the future.

'An extra effort' can be pluralized to 'extra efforts' or keep singular with clearer placement. 'Get to see' is informal; 'be able to see' is clearer. Move 'in the future' to the end for natural flow.

× My favorite teacher has helped me to understand. Math, science subjects, especially chemistry and physics.

✓ My favorite teacher has helped me to understand math and science subjects, especially chemistry and physics.

The original has an unnecessary period creating a fragment and awkward listing. Combine into one sentence and use parallel structure 'math and science subjects'.

× Before I had so much difficulties in passing my science exams, he made it very easy for me to understand.

✓ Before, I had so much difficulty passing my science exams; he made them very easy to understand.

Use 'difficulty' (uncountable) not 'difficulties' in this context. Also clarify pronoun reference: 'them' refers to the exams or the subjects, and use past tense consistently.

× Uh, like my secondary school teachers more than my primary school teacher because they made an extra effort to see that I exiled in my academics.

✓ I prefer my secondary school teachers to my primary school teacher because they made an extra effort to ensure I excelled academically.

'Like' as a filler should be removed; use 'prefer... to' for comparisons. 'See that I exiled' is incorrect — use 'ensure I excelled' and 'academically' is the correct adverb form.

× My primary school teacher barely had that time. To.

✓ My primary school teacher barely had the time to do that.

Original is fragmented and awkward. Combine into one sentence and use 'had the time to do that' to express lack of availability.