Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “I don’t have a single favourite teacher, but I admired my nursery teachers.”), avoid vague phrases and incomplete clauses, and add one specific detail about why you admired them using a linking word (e.g., “because” or “as”). Keep the reply under five sentences.

예시: I don’t have a single favourite teacher, but I admired my nursery teachers because they were very patient and encouraging. For example, one teacher always stayed after class to help us with reading, which boosted my confidence.

제안: Provide a direct statement and a clear reason. Remove fillers (“uh”, “I think you I”) and redundant words. Use a linking word (e.g., “because” or “so”) to connect your reason. If relevant, add a brief example of your teaching experience to support your claim.

예시: No, I don’t want to be a teacher because I find the job very stressful and demanding. Although I currently tutor some students part-time, I prefer a different career that offers more flexibility.

제안: Answer directly and give one clear, specific example. Use linking words like “for example” or “in particular” and avoid trailing, unclear endings. Mention one memorable characteristic and a brief reason or memory.

예시: Yes, I remember many teachers, but in particular my high school maths teacher, Mr Nibiranjan Kuho. He was extremely patient and explained difficult concepts with simple examples, which made maths much easier for me.

제안: Be more concise and avoid repeating the same point. Give one clear reason and, if possible, a brief elaboration using a linking word such as “because” or “so”. Avoid saying “you know” and replace vague phrases with specific ones.

예시: No, I’m not. Because people move on after secondary school and everyone is busy with work or study, I don’t have time to keep in touch with former teachers.

제안: If you can’t recall a specific event, say so briefly and then give a general but concrete example of how teachers helped you. Use cause-effect linking words (e.g., “so”, “therefore”) and avoid redundant filler words. Give one short example of help received.

예시: I can’t remember one exact incident, but my tutors often stayed after class to explain problems, so I improved in maths and English. For example, a tutor once worked through algebra problems step by step until I understood them.

제안: State your opinion clearly and give a specific reason. Replace vague phrases like “it’s an emotion” with concrete explanations (e.g., “they were more caring” or “they created memorable experiences”). Keep to one or two supporting sentences and use linking words like “because” or “so”.

예시: Yes, I prefer my primary school teachers because they were more caring and created a warm classroom environment. As a result, my early school years feel more memorable and enjoyable.

× To be specific, I don't have any favorite teacher, but I really admire my school teachers when I am in my nursery place days.

✓ To be specific, I don't have any favorite teacher, but I really admired my school teachers when I was in nursery.

The sentence mixes present tense ('admire') with a past time reference ('when I am in my nursery place days'). Use past tense 'admired' and 'was' to match the past time frame. Also simplify phrasing: 'in nursery' is a natural expression. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently for past events.

× They were really helpful and determined to their students, which is.

✓ They were really helpful and dedicated to their students.

The phrase 'determined to their students' is an incorrect use of preposition and word choice. 'Dedicated to' is the correct collocation meaning committed or helpful. The clause 'which is.' is incomplete and should be removed. Suggestion: use correct verb-preposition pairs such as 'dedicated to'.

× Actually, I don't want to build my career, uh, to be a teacher because I think it's a really stressful kind of job.

✓ Actually, I don't want to pursue a career as a teacher because I think it's a really stressful job.

'Build my career to be a teacher' is awkward; use 'pursue a career as a teacher' which correctly expresses future intention. The tense is present but refers to future plans; the corrected form maintains appropriate present-tense modal meaning. Also remove filler words and redundant phrases.

× I now I am teaching some students, but uh, not, uh, really, really good, good teacher.

✓ At the moment I am teaching some students, but I am not a very good teacher yet.

The original has repeated and disfluent elements and incorrect structure ('I now I am'). Recast to a clear structure: 'At the moment I am teaching some students' and contrast with 'but I am not a very good teacher yet.' This corrects word order and word choice and expresses the intended meaning.

× I think you I.

✓ (This fragment should be removed or completed; possible completion: 'I think you are right.')

'I think you I.' is an incomplete sentence fragment with missing verb and object. It should either be removed or completed with a clear clause such as 'I think you are right.' Ensure every sentence has a subject and a verb.

× Yes, a lot of teachers from my past, I still remember they were really good and patient.

✓ Yes, I still remember many teachers from my past; they were really good and patient.

Original word order is awkward and uses 'a lot of teachers from my past, I still remember' which breaks normal English word order. Move the subject 'I' before the verb 'still remember' and use 'many teachers' instead of 'a lot of teachers' for smoother formal speech. Also join clauses properly with a semicolon or conjunction.

× And one of our, uh, high school teacher whose name is Nibiranjan Kuho, he was a mathematics teacher and he's really extremely good still.

✓ One of our high school teachers, Nibiranjan Kuho, was a mathematics teacher and he was extremely good.

The clause uses redundant pronouns and wrong relative clause structure. Use 'one of our high school teachers' (plural 'teachers') and place the name in apposition. Avoid combining 'whose name is...' and 'he' together. Use past tense 'was' to match past reference and remove adverb redundancy ('really extremely').

× Now I see some.

✓ Now I still remember some of them.

'Now I see some.' is unclear and uses present progressive incorrectly. If the intended meaning is continued memory or occasional encounters, say 'I still remember some of them.' or 'I still see some of them.' Choose a verb that fits the intended meaning.

× No, I am not because, you know, everything from a secondary level changes like everyone is busy in their own works and I actually really don't have the time to contact every teacher because I am really stressful at this moment.

✓ No, I am not, because after secondary school everything changed: everyone is busy with their own work and I don't have time to contact every teacher because I am very stressed at the moment.

Tense and aspect need consistency: use 'after secondary school everything changed' or 'after secondary school, things changed'. 'Busy in their own works' is incorrect; use 'busy with their own work'. 'I am really stressful' is wrong; use 'I am very stressed' (stressed is an adjective describing the person). Remove filler words and ensure idiomatic expressions.

× To be very specific, I actually really don't remember, but uh, whenever I am struggling with maths or English, uh, I, my tutors are very, actually very helpful and they helped me with their everything possible, which is really.

✓ To be specific, I don't really remember, but whenever I struggled with maths or English, my tutors were very helpful and they helped me with everything possible.

The sentence mixes present and past. Since the speaker refers to past tutoring, use past tense 'struggled' and 'were' and 'helped'. 'Helped me with their everything possible' is ungrammatical; use 'helped me with everything possible.' Remove fillers and incomplete clause 'which is really.'

× Yes, absolutely. I really like our my primary school teachers more than my high school teachers because you know, it's an emotion.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I really like my primary school teachers more than my high school teachers because it's emotional.

The phrase 'our my' is redundant and incorrect; choose 'my'. 'It's an emotion' is unidiomatic; use 'it's emotional' or 'it's because of emotion.' Use concise phrasing.

× Primary school is something we really learn everything We it was the most memorable and beautiful time for our children life.

✓ Primary school is where we learn many things; it was the most memorable and beautiful time of our childhood.

The original sentence has multiple structural errors and run-on issues. 'Primary school is something we really learn everything' is ungrammatical — use 'where we learn many things.' 'Our children life' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'our childhood' or 'the lives of children.' Ensure proper noun phrases and prepositions: 'time of our childhood.'