Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with grammar, word choice and sentence clarity. Use correct past tense and plural forms (e.g., "challenging books", "essays"). Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences) and include a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, "because" or "which") to connect ideas and show cause-effect.

예시: My favourite teacher was my middle-school English teacher because she encouraged me to read challenging books and gave detailed feedback on my essays. As a result, my confidence and writing skills improved significantly, and I still remember how patient and supportive she was.

제안: Avoid informal contractions ("wanna") and unclear phrases; use standard vocabulary and clearer structure. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., "No, I don't want to be a teacher") and give a concise reason. Replace colloquial fragments with full sentences and add a brief specific reason why law suits you.

예시: No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future. I plan to become a lawyer because I prefer the legal profession and its structured career path, and I enjoy analytical thinking and arguing cases more than classroom teaching.

제안: This answer is confusing due to grammar and unclear phrases. Use a clear topic sentence and two specific details. Correct grammatical errors (e.g., "she was a kind woman", "always patient with students", "significant"). Avoid filler sounds like "UMM". Link ideas with words like "because" or "even though" correctly.

예시: Yes, I still remember my middle-school English teacher. She was a kind woman who was always patient with students, and even small things she did—like giving detailed feedback—had a significant positive influence on me.

제안: Clarify reasons and avoid unclear descriptions. Use correct grammar and give a specific example. Replace vague/incorrect phrases (e.g., "putting a student"; unclear example) with clear descriptions like "they scolded students publicly." Keep answer brief and coherent with linking phrase for reason.

예시: No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers. I felt they were quite authoritarian and sometimes scolded students publicly when we made big mistakes, which made me reluctant to keep contact.

제안: This answer is hard to follow—organize into a clear topic sentence and one specific example. Remove confusing metaphors ("turn lane") and correct grammar. Use linking words like "for example" or "as a result" to explain how the teacher helped your interpersonal skills.

예시: She helped me improve my interpersonal skills. For example, she taught me how to start conversations and listen actively, which made it easier for me to make friends and communicate confidently with others.

제안: This is a clear and relevant answer but fix small grammar issues (plural agreement, articles) and tighten sentences. Start with a direct topic sentence and use one linking phrase to support. Use precise vocabulary ("topics", "students").

예시: I prefer my high-school teachers because they were more patient with students. For example, they often offered extra help after class and explained difficult topics clearly, which made learning more comfortable and effective for me.

× She encouraged me to read more challenge books and give detailed feedback on my easys, which greatly improved my confidence and writing skills.

✓ She encouraged me to read more challenging books and to give detailed feedback on my essays, which greatly improved my confidence and writing skills.

The word 'challenge' should be the present participle 'challenging' to act as an adjective modifying 'books' (Grammar Problem Type 8). Also, 'give' should be in an infinitive parallel with 'to read' or use gerund forms consistently; here 'to give' matches 'to read'. 'Easys' is a misspelling and wrong plural form; correct is 'essays' (spelling and pluralization; relates to Grammar Problem Type 1). Use of 'which greatly improved...' is correct as a relative clause describing the feedback's effect.

× I still remember how patient and supportive she was, and that lesson influence made her my favorite.

✓ I still remember how patient and supportive she was, and that lesson's influence made her my favorite.

The noun phrase 'lesson influence' is incorrect; possessive form 'lesson's influence' or 'the influence of that lesson' is required to show the relationship (Grammar Problem Type 13). This corrects noun-modifier structure.

× Actually, in my future plans, I don't wanna be a teacher, I wanna be a lawyer 'cause I don't like the teachers work system.

✓ Actually, in my future plans, I don't want to be a teacher; I want to be a lawyer because I don't like the teachers' work system.

Use standard modal/auxiliary phrasing 'don't want' rather than informal 'don't wanna' (Grammar Problem Type 4). Also, possessive plural 'teachers' work system' needs an apostrophe after teachers to show possession: 'teachers' work system'.

× I like the law better than the teach something to others.

✓ I like the law better than teaching something to others.

After 'than' a gerund ('teaching') is required when comparing activities; 'the teach' is ungrammatical (Grammar Problem Type 8). Changing to 'teaching' correctly contrasts liking 'the law' with 'teaching'.

× Yes I do even I enter the high school as you remember my middle school English teacher, she needs a kindness woman and always have a patient to student UMM.

✓ Yes, I do. Even after I entered high school, as you remember, my middle school English teacher was a kind woman and always patient with her students.

Multiple issues: tense and sentence structure fixed by 'after I entered' (Grammar Problem Type 6), 'needs a kindness woman' is incorrect word choice; use adjective 'kind' modifying 'woman' (Grammar Problem Type 13), and 'have a patient to student' should be 'patient with her students' — correct preposition and agreement (Grammar Problem Type 11 and 27). Pronouns and plurality adjusted: 'students' plural and 'her' possessive pronoun.

× Even though she didn't do much, her positive influence on me was significance.

✓ Even though she didn't do much, her positive influence on me was significant.

Adjective/adverb error: 'significance' is a noun; the adjective 'significant' is required to modify 'influence' (Grammar Problem Type 5 and 13). The past tense 'didn't' is fine; keep 'was significant'.

× No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teacher. I don't keep in contact because I feel they were quite authoritarian and sometimes putting a student when we made a big mistake.

✓ No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers. I don't keep in contact because I felt they were quite authoritarian and sometimes punished students when we made a big mistake.

Pluralization: 'teacher' should be 'teachers' if referring to more than one (Grammar Problem Type 1). 'I don't keep in contact' is acceptable but 'I didn't keep in contact' or 'I don't stay in contact' is clearer depending on intended time; here past feeling uses 'felt' (Grammar Problem Type 6). 'Putting a student' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'punished students' — correct verb choice and plural noun (Grammar Problem Type 26 and 13).

× For example when we will policy certices public who gave wrong answer which made me come.

✓ For example, when we gave a wrong answer, we were publicly criticized, which embarrassed me.

The original is ungrammatical and unclear. Corrected version clarifies intended meaning: 'we gave a wrong answer' (past tense), 'were publicly criticized' (passive, past), and 'which embarrassed me' explains the effect (Grammar Problem Type 26 and 5 and 21).

× Most interpersonal relationships the turn lane in interpersonal relationships 'cause I don't know how to make friends, how to communicate away with others and that moment my teacher told me how to correctly to communicate with others and make friends.

✓ My most important change was in interpersonal relationships because I didn't know how to make friends or how to communicate with others, and at that moment my teacher taught me how to communicate correctly and make friends.

Original has serious sentence structure and word choice errors. 'Most interpersonal relationships the turn lane...' is meaningless; rewrite to express intended idea (Grammar Problem Type 14 and 26). Use past tense 'didn't know' and 'taught me' to match narrative (Grammar Problem Type 6). 'How to correctly to communicate' incorrect placement and extra 'to' — correct to 'how to communicate correctly' (Grammar Problem Type 20 and 8).

× Actually, I prefer my high school teachers because they were more patient with student.

✓ Actually, I prefer my high school teachers because they were more patient with students.

The noun 'student' should be plural 'students' to agree with 'they' referring to multiple teachers (Grammar Problem Type 27 and 1). The past tense 'were' is consistent with the context of recalling past behaviour; keep as is.

× For example, they often gave extra help after school class and explained difficult topic clearly, which made learning more comfortable and effective for me.

✓ For example, they often gave extra help after class and explained difficult topics clearly, which made learning more comfortable and effective for me.

'After school class' is redundant or awkward; 'after class' or 'after-school classes' are correct (Grammar Problem Type 13). 'Difficult topic' should be plural 'difficult topics' to match generality (Grammar Problem Type 1). Placement of 'clearly' is correct.