Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and ensure logical flow: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "teaching methods" and "lessons" repeated). Pronoun references should be clear.

예시: My favorite teacher was my elementary Armenian teacher because she made lessons creative. For example, she used songs and storytelling to teach grammar and vocabulary, which helped me remember new words. As a result, her enthusiasm inspired me to pursue teaching.

제안: Answer directly and correct grammar; use a clear topic sentence and one supporting detail. Avoid vague phrases and unnecessary words. Use present simple for current facts and past for dreams.

예시: Yes, I am a teacher now, which fulfills my childhood dream. Teaching gives me daily satisfaction because I enjoy helping students learn and grow.

제안: Improve coherence and pronunciation: remove filler words (uh), fix grammar and finish thoughts. Begin with a clear statement, then give a specific example of how you keep in touch, using linking words.

예시: Yes, I still remember several past teachers and I'm friends with some of them on social media. For instance, one of my former teachers often messages me and I follow her posts, which helps us stay connected.

제안: Be more formal and avoid casual expressions inappropriate in IELTS (e.g., 'hugs, kisses'). Use linking words to contrast and give frequency details. Keep sentences concise and accurate.

예시: Not really; although we are connected on social media, we do not communicate regularly. Occasionally they send messages and I reply, but we do not keep in touch every day.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and two specific ways she helped, with correct grammar and smooth linking. Remove fillers and correct tense/agreement (lessons were engaging, she gave us chances).

예시: She helped me by making lessons engaging and student-centred, which increased my motivation. For example, she used interactive activities and extra practice opportunities, allowing me to improve my speaking and grammar.

제안: Clarify your reason with one clear opinion sentence and a specific supporting explanation. Remove fillers and organize the idea: compare emotional closeness and time spent. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

예시: Yes, I prefer my primary school teachers because they spent more time with us and created a family-like atmosphere. Because we were younger, the teachers paid more personal attention, which made the bond stronger.

× Luckily I'm a teacher now and being a teacher was my childhood dream.

✓ Luckily I'm a teacher now, and being a teacher was my childhood dream.

No grammar change needed; original sentence is grammatically acceptable. Maintain past tense 'was' for the childhood dream and present 'I'm' for current status. Suggestion: add a comma before 'and' to improve readability.

× I always want to do become an instructor in the life.

✓ I always wanted to become an instructor in my life.

The original mixes present tense 'want' with incorrect 'do become' and an unnecessary article 'the' before 'life'. The intended meaning refers to a past or ongoing desire, so use past 'wanted' or present 'have always wanted'. Use 'become' without 'do'. Replace 'the life' with 'my life' to indicate personal experience.

× Honesty yes, because some with some of them I'm friends on social media, I always follow their stories and they uh sometimes send me messages and say hi. I'm very lucky because till now I still get.

✓ Honestly, yes. I'm friends with some of them on social media. I always follow their stories, and sometimes they send me messages and say hi. I'm very lucky because I still hear from them.

Multiple issues: 'Honesty' should be 'Honestly' (adverb). Word order 'some with some of them' is incorrect; correct phrasing is 'I'm friends with some of them'. Sentence fragments and awkward clause 'I'm very lucky because till now I still get' lacks an object; likely 'hear from them' is intended. Split into shorter sentences for clarity and correct verb patterns.

× Honestly, I cannot say I'm still in touch because we don't speak too much.

✓ Honestly, I cannot say I'm still in touch because we don't speak very much.

'Too much' implies excessive amount; 'very much' is appropriate for frequency/degree with negative sentences. Keep the present tense 'don't speak' to match ongoing state.

× Sometimes they send me messages and hugs, kisses and I also say hi.

✓ Sometimes they send me messages and send hugs and kisses, and I also say hi.

List items need parallel structure. Add verb 'send' before 'hugs and kisses' for clarity and parallelism. Keep present tense consistent.

× As I said, my favorite teacher was an Armenian teacher. I like her lessons because it was engaging, more student oriented, and they always, she always gave us chance to, uh, study more.

✓ As I said, my favorite teacher was an Armenian teacher. I liked her lessons because they were engaging, more student-oriented, and she always gave us a chance to study more.

Tense inconsistency: 'I like' should match past context 'was' — use 'liked' or keep present if referring generally. 'It was engaging' is wrong because 'lessons' is plural; use 'they were engaging'. 'Student oriented' should be hyphenated as 'student-oriented'. Add article 'a' before 'chance'. Remove filler and correct word order.

× Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

✓ Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

The question sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Included for completeness.

× Honestly, yes, I like elementary school teachers more than high school teachers because, umm, I think age also plays a crucial role, uh, when you're more, umm, teenager and you, when you spend more time with elementary school teachers, you become like a family.

✓ Honestly, yes. I like elementary school teachers more than high school teachers because I think age plays a crucial role. When you are younger, and you spend more time with elementary school teachers, they become like family.

Multiple issues: 'when you're more, umm, teenager' is incorrect; use 'you are younger' or 'when you are a teenager' depending on intended meaning. Simplify and split into clearer sentences. Use 'they become like family' instead of 'you become like a family' to correctly refer to the teachers forming close bonds.