Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give one specific example of how the teacher helped you. Use correct articles and past tense consistently.

예시: Yes. My favorite teacher was my English teacher at school. He was very kind and gave me extra practice sessions and individual feedback on my essays, which greatly improved my speaking and writing.

제안: Answer directly, reduce hesitation words, and organize reasons clearly. Use linking words (because, so) and one or two specific reasons why you feel that way.

예시: No, I don't want to be a teacher. I find managing many children stressful because I worry I wouldn't be able to give enough attention to each student, so I prefer a job with smaller teams.

제안: Correct vocabulary and reduce hesitations. Begin with a clear statement and give a concrete detail or memory to support it. Replace unclear words (teaser, reser) with correct ones (teacher, person).

예시: Yes, I remember my old math teacher. He was very strict and often gave difficult homework, which made me work harder and improved my problem-solving skills.

제안: Be concise and logical. Give a brief reason and, if possible, add a short comment about whether you would like to reconnect. Avoid repeating phrases.

예시: No, I'm not in touch with them. At the time I didn't have a mobile phone and I forgot to collect their contact numbers, so we lost contact. I would like to reconnect if I could find them online.

제안: Correct word choice and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples of help (extra lessons, feedback). Use past tense consistently.

예시: My favorite teacher helped me by giving extra lessons and practice exercises. He also gave detailed feedback on my essays, which improved my grammar and confidence when speaking.

제안: Give a direct answer and a concise reason. Use singular/plural correctly and avoid repetition. You can add a brief comparative point if relevant using linking words (because, so).

예시: No, I wouldn't compare them. I liked both equally because both sets of teachers treated me well and supported my learning when I worked hard.

× Yes, when I was outside, there was a English teacher who who was very helpful and kind to me.

✓ Yes, when I was outside, there was an English teacher who was very helpful and kind to me.

Use 'an' before a vowel sound; 'English' begins with a vowel sound so 'an' is required. Also remove duplicated 'who'. Suggestion: read aloud to hear vowel sounds and proofread for repeated words.

× He helped me a lot to improve my English language.

✓ He helped me a lot to improve my English.

'English language' is wordy; native usage is 'improve my English.' The verb 'helped' is correct past tense. Suggestion: use concise nouns like 'English' when referring to the subject.

× Well, I don't think I am able to be a teacher because umm, it's I find it really stressful when I move with many children because because it's kind of give me stress that I cannot be able to handle the child on my own.

✓ Well, I don't think I would be able to be a teacher because I find it really stressful to work with many children, and I don't think I could handle them on my own.

Problems: incorrect modal usage ('am able' should be 'would be able' for hypothetical future), awkward verb choices ('move with' -> 'work with'), double negatives and redundancy ('cannot be able' incorrect). Use modal 'would' for hypothetical future and 'could' for ability. Suggestion: simplify clauses, use 'work with' for managing groups, and avoid redundant modal combinations.

× Yes, uh, there is another a math teaser used to used to be very strict and rude to us and I remember him being a very strict reser.

✓ Yes, there was another math teacher who used to be very strict and rude to us, and I remember him being very strict.

Errors: wrong tense/form ('is' -> 'was' for past), extra 'a' and repeated 'used to', misspellings ('teaser' -> 'teacher', 'reser' unnecessary). Use 'used to' once and past tense 'was' for past teachers. Suggestion: keep past narrative consistent and proofread spelling.

× No, I am not, I'm not in touch with any of my primary teachers because, uh, on our, because at that time we didn't, uh, I did not have any mobile phone with me and later on I forgot to, umm, I forgot to ask for the phone numbers to my teachers.

✓ No, I'm not in touch with any of my primary teachers because at that time I did not have a mobile phone, and later I forgot to ask my teachers for their phone numbers.

Problems: redundant phrases and incorrect preposition order ('ask for the phone numbers to my teachers' -> 'ask my teachers for their phone numbers'). Use past simple consistently 'did not have' and concise structure. Suggestion: avoid repetition and follow 'ask someone for something' order.

× Well, my favorite dessert was English dessert.

✓ Well, my favorite subject was English.

'Dessert' is incorrect word choice for 'subject'; it's a vocabulary error. Use 'subject' when referring to school subjects. Suggestion: learn common collocations: 'favorite subject' not 'favorite dessert'.

× He would he used to give me an extra lessons and practices so I could be better in the English language.

✓ He used to give me extra lessons and practice so I could get better at English.

Issues: mixed modal forms ('would he used to' incorrect), article and count noun errors ('an extra lessons' -> 'extra lessons'), word form 'practices' -> 'practice', and phrase 'better in the English language' -> 'better at English.' Suggestion: choose one habitual marker ('used to' or 'would'), use plural without 'an', and use 'get better at' for improvement.

× He was very kind and helpful to others still to other children too.

✓ He was very kind and helpful to other children as well.

Redundant and awkward pronoun/adverb use: 'others still to other children too' repeats meaning. Use concise phrase 'other children as well.' Suggestion: avoid repeating synonyms in one sentence.

× Oh, I don't. I don't think I'd compare my primary teachers with my secondary teachers because they all treat me.

✓ Oh, I don't. I don't think I'd compare my primary teachers with my secondary teachers because they all treated me well.

Tense mismatch: speaking about past experience of being treated, so use past tense 'treated' not present 'treat.' Also 'treated me' needs an adverb 'well.' Suggestion: match tense to the time being discussed and add appropriate adverb.

× They all used to treat me good because I was a diligent children, children.

✓ They all used to treat me well because I was a diligent child.

Errors: 'treat me good' should be 'treat me well' (adverb), 'children' plural doesn't match 'I was' singular — should be 'child.' Remove duplicate 'children.' Suggestion: use adverbs with verbs and ensure subject/pronoun number agreement.