Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitation and repetition, give a clear topic sentence and two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, because and also) correctly and avoid filler words like “uh” and “umm.” Keep it within 3–4 sentences. Mention one concrete example of her teaching that helped you.

예시: Yes. My favorite teacher was my secondary school history teacher because she explained difficult events clearly and gave extra one-on-one help when I struggled. For example, she used timelines and stories to help me remember dates, which made me more confident in exams.

제안: Start with a direct answer, then give two concise and connected reasons using linking words like “because” and “for example.” Correct grammar (e.g., “I studied English and French” and “I taught first- and second-year students”). Avoid short fragmented sentences and keep total length under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I would like to be a teacher in the future because I studied English and French at university. For example, I taught first- and second-year students French while at university, and I enjoyed helping them improve their speaking skills.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence (yes/no + who) then one or two specific supporting details. Fix grammar and awkward phrasing (e.g., “there are many teachers I still remember; I keep in touch with them on social media”). Use linking words like “because” or “so” to explain why you stay in contact.

예시: Yes, I still remember many of my teachers. I keep in touch with most of them on social media because they live nearby, and we often message each other about work and life.

제안: Give a direct answer and a clear reason. Avoid unclear or incorrect phrases (e.g., “are the height” is unintelligible). Use one or two coherent sentences: state you are not in touch and explain why (moved away, retired, lost contact).

예시: No, I am not. My primary school teachers taught me over twelve years ago, and many of them have retired or moved away, so I have lost contact with most of them.

제안: Answer directly and give specific examples of help (academic, emotional, study methods). Avoid repetition and finish your sentence. Use linking words like “for example” and “because” to show cause and effect. Keep it to 2–3 clear sentences.

예시: She helped me by encouraging my interest in history and improving my study skills. For example, she suggested I create timelines and discuss historical events in groups, which strengthened my understanding and confidence.

제안: Give a concise direct answer, then provide one or two clear reasons using linking words like “because” and “but.” Avoid vague or confusing phrases (e.g., “uncomfortable child,” “first years in my place”)—be specific about feelings and experiences. Keep it under four sentences.

예시: No, I prefer my high school teachers because they challenged me more and understood my strengths. In high school I became more confident and performed better academically, so I connected better with those teachers.

× Umm, yes, my favorite teacher was my secondary school history teacher and she was very encouraging and made me believe I could do well, uh, by explaining things clearly and giving extra help, uh, when I need it. Also because umm, she has a unique way to umm, teaching.

✓ Umm, yes, my favorite teacher was my secondary school history teacher and she was very encouraging and made me believe I could do well by explaining things clearly and giving extra help when I needed it. Also, she had a unique way of teaching.

The student mixes past and present tenses. The context refers to past experiences, so verbs should be in the past tense: 'need' -> 'needed'. 'Has a unique way to teaching' is ungrammatical: use past 'had' and correct structure 'way of teaching'. Suggestion: keep verbs consistent in past when describing past events and use 'way of + noun' or 'way of + -ing'.

× Yes, I want to be a teacher in future.

✓ Yes, I want to be a teacher in the future.

Omitted definite article 'the' before 'future'. In English, when referring to a specific time period 'the future' is required. Suggestion: use 'in the future' or 'in future' in British informal speech is rare; prefer 'in the future'.

× Actually my studying at university was English and French languages.

✓ Actually, I studied English and French at university.

Awkward structure 'my studying at university was...' is incorrect. Use simple past 'I studied' to describe completed education. Place object 'English and French' after the verb and add 'at university' for correct word order. Add commas for clarity.

× So teaching is the best field to me.

✓ So teaching is the best field for me.

Incorrect preposition 'to' used with 'best field'. The correct collocation is 'for me' to indicate opinion. Suggestion: use 'for me' or 'as far as I'm concerned'.

× And also while I was in university and I was teaching the first and second students some French.

✓ Also, while I was at university I taught first- and second-year students some French.

Tense and word choice need correction. Use 'at university' not 'in university'. 'I was teaching' can be simplified to past simple 'I taught' for completed actions. 'The first and second students' is unclear; use 'first- and second-year students'.

× Yes, yes, of course there's a lot of teacher that I am.

✓ Yes, of course there are a lot of teachers whom I...

The original is ungrammatical and unclear. 'There's a lot of teacher' should be plural 'there are a lot of teachers'. 'That I am' is incomplete; likely intended 'that I know' or 'that I am in contact with'. Suggestion: complete the clause with the correct verb and plural agreement.

× I contact with them until now because actually most of them are around me in my area also during to the social media and I am in contact with them every day.

✓ I am in contact with them until now because most of them are around my area and also connected through social media, so I contact them every day.

Multiple preposition errors: 'contact with' should be 'in contact with' or 'contact them'. 'During to the social media' is wrong; use 'through social media' or 'on social media'. Tense 'I contact with them until now' better as 'I have been in contact with them until now' for continuous past to present. Suggestion: use 'in contact with' and 'through social media'.

× Actually no, my primary school teachers are from more than 12 years ago, so most of them unfortunately are the height because they're they were all teacher. So no actually.

✓ Actually no, my primary school teachers were from more than 12 years ago, so most of them are unfortunately retired because they were all teachers.

Tense and word choice errors: 'are from more than 12 years ago' should use past 'were' or 'attended more than 12 years ago'. 'Are the height' is gibberish; likely 'retired'. 'They're they were all teacher' mixes present and past and singular/plural. Use 'were all teachers'. Suggestion: clarify timeline and use correct vocabulary like 'retired'.

× So OK, my favorite teacher was the history teacher or the the teacher of the history subject. Actually, I am a person who have a lot of historical information.

✓ So OK, my favorite teacher was the history teacher. Actually, I am a person who has a lot of historical knowledge.

Subject-verb agreement: 'I am a person who have' should be 'who has' because 'who' refers to 'person' singular. 'Historical information' is acceptable but 'historical knowledge' is more natural. Also remove repetition 'the the' and simplify sentence.

× So when we were at the class, she encouraged me and they she improved my.

✓ So when we were in class, she encouraged me and helped me improve.

'At the class' should be 'in class'. 'They she improved my' is ungrammatical and incomplete; likely intended 'helped me improve'. Use 'helped me improve' or 'helped improve my skills'. Ensure the object follows the verb.

× And actually, no, I like my high school teachers more than my primary school 'cause when I was a child, I was a very uncomfortable child and I didn't feel that this is my place because this is my first years in my place right now. But in high school, I was the most intelligent student.

✓ Actually no, I like my high school teachers more than my primary school teachers because when I was a child I felt uncomfortable and didn't feel that I belonged. Those were my first years away from home. But in high school, I was one of the most intelligent students.

Multiple issues: missing plural 'teachers'. 'Uncomfortable child' is awkward; 'felt uncomfortable' or 'did not feel that I belonged' is clearer. 'This is my first years in my place right now' is unclear; likely 'those were my first years away from home' or 'in that place'. 'The most intelligent student' is exaggerated; safer 'one of the most intelligent students' unless certain. Suggestion: fix plural forms, clarify meaning, and use appropriate comparative/superlative structure.