Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and clear: open with a direct topic sentence naming the teacher and why she was your favorite, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Keep answers under five sentences. Correct tense and word choice (e.g. cared for me, encouraging, made the classroom bright) and avoid fragmented phrases.

예시: Yes. My favorite teacher was my primary school class teacher because she always encouraged me and cared for my progress. For example, she noticed when I was struggling with reading and gave me extra practice after class. As a result, I became more confident and enjoyed learning.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and connect reasons smoothly using linking words. Combine short fragments into complete sentences and use correct collocations (e.g. 'a challenging job that requires patience'). Provide one specific reason and a brief example if possible.

예시: No, I don't want to be a teacher. Teaching is a challenging job that requires a lot of patience, and I don't think I have enough patience for that role. For instance, I would find it difficult to repeat explanations many times to help slow learners.

제안: Avoid vague or incorrect phrases. Start with a direct statement, then give a specific memory or example showing why you remember them. Use linking words ('for example', 'because') and correct sentence structure. Remove unrelated fragments like 'Happy birthday' unless relevant.

예시: Yes, I still remember my primary school teacher because she always encouraged me to try my best. For example, she wrote encouraging notes on my homework and praised small improvements, which motivated me to study harder.

제안: Answer directly and explain briefly with coherent grammar. Use correct expressions for losing contact (e.g. 'I have lost contact' or 'I haven't kept in touch') and provide a reason. Keep it to one or two sentences.

예시: No, I haven't kept in touch with my primary school teachers. I graduated almost 30 years ago and we lost contact as we moved to different cities.

제안: Provide one clear topic sentence describing how she helped, then add a specific example and result using linking words. Correct word choice: 'I became more ambitious' or 'she encouraged my ambition'. Avoid short fragments.

예시: She encouraged me by praising my efforts and giving extra help when I struggled, which made me more ambitious. As a result, I joined the school reading club and improved my grades.

제안: Make a clear comparison using connective phrases (e.g. 'I prefer... because...'). Explain specific differences and give one example. Avoid fragments and repeat words; use complete sentences with correct grammar.

예시: Yes, I prefer my primary school teachers because they were caring and created a fun learning environment. In contrast, my high school teachers were stricter and focused mainly on exams, which made learning feel more stressful.

× When I was a primary school student, there was a teacher who was much cared of me and inclusive increased of me, and she always.

✓ When I was a primary school student, there was a teacher who cared for me a lot and encouraged me, and she always made the classroom bright.

Original sentence uses incorrect verb forms and prepositions: 'was much cared of me' should be active 'cared for me'; 'inclusive increased of me' is ungrammatical—likely intended 'encouraged me' or 'helped me improve'. Also sentence fragment 'and she always.' lacked a verb and object; corrected to 'she always made the classroom bright.' Suggestion: use active verbs and correct prepositions ('care for', 'encourage'), and complete clauses with a verb and object. Note: This error falls under verb in the present participle form because incorrect verb forms and participles were used; the fix uses correct present/past verb forms and constructions.

× May made classroom bright.

✓ She always made the classroom bright.

Original 'May made classroom bright.' is missing subject agreement and the definite article 'the'. 'May' seems incorrect as a subject; likely intended 'she'. Also missing 'the' before 'classroom' and the adverb position. Suggestion: ensure correct subject and include articles where needed. This is categorized as sentence structure error because the sentence lacks proper subject and article, producing an incomplete or unclear sentence.

× I believe teaching someone is a really challenging job required.

✓ I believe teaching someone is a really challenging job that requires patience.

Original misuses 'required' and omits the object that 'requires'. Use a relative clause 'that requires' plus the noun 'patience' to complete the idea. Modal/verb usage here is incorrect; provide the full clause to show what the job requires.

× Patience.

✓ It requires patience.

Single-word reply 'Patience.' is a sentence fragment. To be grammatical, attach it to the previous sentence or expand it: 'It requires patience.' Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments; use full clauses.

× So I think it's not it would've, it wouldn't fit that well.

✓ So I think it wouldn't suit me very well.

Original uses confusing pronouns and incorrect conditional/modal constructions ('it's not it would've'). Use a simple conditional: 'wouldn't suit me' or 'wouldn't fit me'. Suggest choosing a clear subject ('it') and correct verb phrase ('wouldn't suit me'). This matches incorrect pronoun and sentence structure issues.

× And she always made classroom. Happy birthday.

✓ And she always made the classroom a happy place.

Fragmented and mispunctuated: 'made classroom.' and 'Happy birthday.' seem unrelated and incomplete. Likely intended that she made the classroom cheerful. Combine into one complete clause and use article 'the' and an appropriate noun ('place'). Avoid inserting unrelated phrases like 'Happy birthday.' without context.

× No, unfortunately it's been almost 30 years when I graduated so I haven't lost. The contact.

✓ No, unfortunately it has been almost 30 years since I graduated, so I have lost contact.

Original mixes tenses and has sentence fragments ('I haven't lost. The contact.'). Use 'since' with 'graduated' to indicate time and correct verb phrase 'have lost contact' to show the result. Suggest combining fragments into a single coherent sentence.

× She always encouraged me, so I get the ambitious.

✓ She always encouraged me, so I became ambitious.

'I get the ambitious' is incorrect: 'ambitious' is an adjective and needs a verb that links a state change ('became ambitious') or use a noun 'ambition'. Also 'get' is present; past 'became' matches the past context. Suggest using correct verb and adjective pairing.

× I feel happy, I really appreciate her.

✓ I feel happy, and I really appreciate her.

Run-on or comma splice with two independent clauses joined only by a comma. Insert a conjunction ('and') or use a semicolon. Suggest linking clauses properly to avoid comma splices.

× Because primary, Primary teacher. Fierce. Always. Come and feel happy in high school, teacher. They focus on studying and examination so I feel.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I prefer my primary school teachers because primary school teachers were caring and made me feel happy. High school teachers focus more on studying and examinations, so I felt less happy with them.

Original is fragmented with many sentence fragments and unclear references. Reconstruct into full sentences: explain reason ('because primary school teachers were caring...'), contrast with high school teachers, and maintain tense consistency ('were', 'focus'). Suggestions: avoid short fragments; use complete sentences with explicit subjects and verbs, and keep tense consistent when describing past experiences.