Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は主題を述べているが、文法の誤りや性別の矛盾（he/she）などがあり、表現が不自然で冗長です。より簡潔で論理的な構成（トピック文＋具体例）を守り、代名詞の一貫性や適切な語彙（resources → resources / methods）を使ってください。例を示すときは接続詞（for example, for instance, moreover）を適切に使い、文は3〜4文にまとめましょう。

예시: Yes. My favourite teacher was my junior high school history teacher because he explained difficult events clearly and used a variety of resources. He also taught me effective study methods, such as how to take notes and cross-check sources, which helped me understand history better.

제안: 答えは否定だが意味が曖昧で文法的混乱（“No work cherry”, 語順、時制、単語選択）が多く、理由の説明が不明瞭です。まず明確な主題文で答え（No, I don't want to be a teacher.）を述べ、その後に具体的な過去経験を時制に気をつけて簡潔に補足してください。接続詞（because, for example, so）を正しく用い、不要な繰り返しを避けましょう。

예시: No, I don't want to be a teacher. When I was at university I taught part-time English classes, but I wasn't confident in my teaching because many students didn't improve their grades. That experience showed me that teaching is not the right career for me.

제안: 主旨は伝わるが、文法誤り（"is that a", "explained very humorously"→"explained things humorously"）、語の選択ミス（"crosses"不明）や冗長表現があります。具体例（どんなユーモアか、どの授業が印象的だったか）を付け加えると良いです。接続詞で文を自然につなぎ、語彙を明確に選んでください。

예시: Yes. I remember my junior high literature teacher because he was generous and taught with great humour. For example, he used funny stories to explain difficult poems, which made the lessons memorable and enjoyable.

제안: 理由は述べられているが、表現が不明瞭で語順や語選びのミス（"kept touch", "Try the graduation of high school"）があります。過去と現在の状況を明確に区別して述べ、未来の意図は短い文でまとめてください。自然なフレーズ（"in touch", "I regret not keeping in touch"）を使う練習をしましょう。

예시: No, I'm not. I moved to another city after primary school, so I lost contact with many teachers. I regret not keeping in touch, but I plan to try to reconnect with them after I graduate from high school.

제안: 意図は伝わるが、語彙誤り（"free the contents of the crosses", "running histories"）や文法ミスが目立ちます。具体的にどのような助け（個別指導、追加教材、学習法）を受けたかを明確に示し、因果関係を示す接続語（because, so, therefore）を適切に使ってください。簡潔な語彙で正確に表現することが重要です。

예시: When I was in junior high, my history teacher gave me extra lessons because I struggled with some topics. He provided additional handouts and study tips, and he explained events step by step, which helped me improve.

제안: 比較の意図はあるが、文法と表現の混乱（"I my favorite is high school teachers", 再び"crosses"の不明な使用）があり、理由説明が曖昧です。まず明確な比較文（I prefer high school teachers because...）を述べ、その後で具体的な理由（個性的、実践的な授業）を2つ程度挙げてください。接続詞（because, for example, such as）で論理をつなぎ、数は単数・複数に注意しましょう。

예시: I prefer my high school teachers. They had more unique personalities and often ran practical lessons, such as group projects and experiments, which made the classes more memorable and useful.

× Yes, I have our favorite teacher.

✓ Yes, I have a favorite teacher.

The pronoun 'our' is incorrect because the speaker is referring to their own favorite teacher, not a shared one. Use 'a' for stating that you have one among many. Suggestion: replace 'our' with 'a' to indicate singular possession.

× My favorite teacher is a history teacher in junior high school because he taught me very valuable knowledge about history.

✓ My favorite teacher was a history teacher at my junior high school because he taught me valuable knowledge about history.

Tense consistency: the student describes a past teacher, so 'is' should be 'was' and 'in junior high school' is better as 'at my junior high school'. Also remove 'very' before 'valuable' to be more natural. Suggestion: keep past tense when talking about past teachers and use 'at' for schools.

× In addition, he also told me an essential method of learning, for example.

✓ In addition, he taught me an essential method of learning, for example.

The verb 'told' is not wrong but 'taught' fits teaching context better. Also 'for example' should introduce an example, so place it before the example or remove it. Suggestion: use 'taught' for methods and place 'for example' appropriately.

× She told me many lessons about history, using much resources to collect the information.

✓ He taught me many lessons about history, using many resources to collect information.

Pronoun inconsistency: previously the teacher was referred to as 'he', so 'She' is wrong. Use 'he'. 'Lessons' taught fits better than 'told me many lessons about history' -> 'taught'. 'Much resources' is uncountable misuse; use 'many resources'. Also 'the information' can be simply 'information'. Suggestion: keep pronouns consistent and match countable/uncountable nouns.

× No work cherry because I'm not confident of teaching someone.

✓ No, not work as a teacher because I'm not confident teaching others.

The original phrase 'No work cherry' is nonsensical. Likely intended 'No, not working as a teacher' or 'No, I don't want to be a teacher'. Use 'teaching others' or 'teaching someone' -> 'teaching others'. Suggestion: use clear negative response structure: 'No, I don't want to be a teacher because...'.

× For example, I when I was a student at university I did a part time job in a crime school or English classes.

✓ For example, when I was a university student I had a part-time job at a cram school teaching English classes.

Word order and word choice errors: 'I when I was' should be 'when I was'. 'Part time' should be hyphenated as 'part-time'. 'Crime school' is likely 'cram school' (a tutoring school). Use 'at' for locations and specify 'teaching English classes'. Suggestion: keep correct word order and use correct vocabulary ('cram school').

× I had several classes to them to teach them but most.

✓ I taught several classes, but most of my students...

Unfinished and incorrect structure: 'I had several classes to them to teach them' is redundant and incorrect. Use 'I taught several classes' and continue the clause. Suggestion: use 'I taught several classes, but most of my students...' to complete the thought.

× Or my students couldn't get the enough score to enter high school.

✓ Many of my students couldn't get a high enough score to enter high school.

Article and word order errors: 'the enough score' should be 'a high enough score' or 'enough score'. Use 'many of my students' rather than 'Or'. Suggestion: use 'a high enough score' for clarity.

× Therefore I'm not confident or being a teacher so I don't know.

✓ Therefore I'm not confident about being a teacher, so I don't know.

Preposition and connector errors: 'confident or being' should be 'confident about being'. Add a comma before 'so'. Suggestion: use 'confident about' when referring to feelings about a role.

× Yes, one teacher I remember is that a literature teacher in my junior high school, he was very generous and he explained very humorously.

✓ Yes, one teacher I remember was a literature teacher in my junior high school; he was very generous and explained things very humorously.

Tense and connector errors: use past tense 'was' for past teacher. Remove 'is that a'. Combine clauses correctly with a semicolon or period. 'Explained very humorously' should be 'explained things very humorously' or 'had a humorous way of explaining'. Suggestion: simplify structure and keep past tense.

× So I remember his crosses and also I. Like his personality itself.

✓ So I remember his classes and I also liked his personality.

Typos and structure: 'crosses' should be 'classes'. 'Also I. Like' is broken; combine into 'I also liked'. Use past tense 'liked'. Suggestion: proofread for typos and keep sentence as one complete clause.

× So I still remember his classes and his personalities.

✓ So I still remember his classes and his personality.

Plural 'personalities' is incorrect when referring to one person's character; use singular 'personality'. Suggestion: match singular/plural appropriately.

× Actually no, because I have moved to another city from my primary school student days.

✓ Actually no, because I moved to another city after my primary school days.

Tense and preposition: 'have moved' suggests recent action; 'moved' is fine here. 'From my primary school student days' is awkward; use 'after my primary school days'. Suggestion: use simple past and clearer time expression.

× I regret not contacting primary school teachers because they kept touch with me.

✓ I regret not keeping in contact with my primary school teachers because they lost touch with me.

Incorrect verb choice and meaning: 'they kept touch with me' is incorrect. Likely intended 'I regret not keeping in contact because I lost touch with them' or 'they lost touch with me'. Suggestion: use 'keep in contact' and 'lose touch' idioms correctly.

× Try the graduation of high school.

✓ I will try after I graduate from high school.

Fragment and wrong phrase: 'Try the graduation of high school' is not grammatical. Use 'after I graduate from high school' and indicate intention: 'I will try to keep in touch after I graduate from high school.' Suggestion: use correct verb 'graduate from' and complete the sentence.

× So I think that in the future I will try to keep in touch again.

✓ So I think that in the future I will try to keep in touch again.

Sentence is acceptable but redundant 'again' can remain. No grammatical correction needed; maintain future intention. Suggestion: fine as is.

× Well, when I was in junior high school, my history teacher gave extra lessons for me because I couldn't understand free the contents of the crosses.

✓ Well, when I was in junior high school, my history teacher gave me extra lessons because I couldn't understand the contents of the classes.

Wrong word order and word choice: 'gave extra lessons for me' -> 'gave me extra lessons'. 'Couldn't understand free the contents' is garbled; use 'couldn't understand the contents'. 'Crosses' should be 'classes'. Suggestion: use correct object placement and correct vocabulary.

× He gave me some extra documents about tips for running histories.

✓ He gave me some extra materials with tips for studying history.

Word choice: 'documents about tips for running histories' is unnatural. Use 'materials' and 'studying history'. Suggestion: use collocations like 'tips for studying' and 'materials'.

× Well, yes, I like both high school teachers and primary school teachers, but I think that I my favorite is high school teachers because their personalities are very unique compared to the primary school teachers.

✓ Well, yes, I like both my high school and primary school teachers, but my favorites are my high school teachers because their personalities were more unique compared to my primary school teachers.

Agreement and comparison: 'I my favorite is high school teachers' is ungrammatical. Use plural 'favorites are my high school teachers' or 'my favorite teacher is...'. 'Unique' is absolute; avoid 'more unique' but usage is common; better to say 'more memorable' or 'had more unique personalities'. Ensure possessive 'my' before teachers. Suggestion: restructure sentence for agreement and clearer comparison.

× So I remember the crosses.

✓ So I remember the classes.

Typo: 'crosses' should be 'classes'. Suggestion: correct obvious typos.

× And I have a lot of memory about the classes.

✓ And I have a lot of memories about the classes.

Count noun: 'memory' should be plural 'memories' when referring to many recollections. Also 'about the classes' is acceptable. Suggestion: use plural for multiple recollections.

× For example, they conducted practical lessons for me, so I prefer high school teachers.

✓ For example, they conducted practical lessons, so I prefer my high school teachers.

Missing possessive 'my' before 'high school teachers' to indicate which teachers. 'For me' is unnecessary. Suggestion: include possessive and simplify sentence.