Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical, concise and link ideas. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., because, so, for example). Avoid sentence fragments and informal contractions like "gonna."

예시: Yes. My favorite teacher is my chemistry teacher because he makes difficult concepts easy to understand. For example, he uses clear demonstrations and real-life examples, so I can see how reactions work instead of just reading about them.

제안: Give a direct answer, then support it with polite, specific reasons. Avoid overly emotional or negative language. Use linking words (because, although, so) and keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, I probably would not. Teaching requires a great deal of patience and long hours, and I don't think I have the temperament for managing young children calmly, especially when they are disruptive.

제안: Clarify the main point and correct grammar. Begin with a clear topic sentence saying you remember a primary teacher, then give specific examples of what they did and use linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like "science T-shirt" unless explained.

예시: Yes, I still remember my primary school science teacher. He explained physics laws very clearly and used simple demonstrations, so I developed an early interest in physics that influenced my later studies.

제안: Answer directly and use past vs present accurately. Use linking words (because, so, now) and correct verb forms. Keep it concise and avoid repetition.

예시: No, I'm not. When I was in primary school I didn't have a phone, so I didn't exchange contacts with my teachers. Now that I have a phone, I try to keep in touch with more recent teachers.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and give 1–2 specific examples of teaching methods. Use linking words (for example, by) and correct structures (e.g., "helped me by...").

예시: He helped me by using many experiments and visual examples. For example, he demonstrated reactions in front of the class, which helped me understand how they work in practice rather than just in theory.

× Yes I do, but sometime it depends on how he or her teach.

✓ Yes, I do, but sometimes it depends on how he or she teaches.

Errors: 'sometime' should be plural 'sometimes' (adverb of frequency). Pronoun 'he or her' should be 'he or she' (subjective case). Verb 'teach' needs third person singular 'teaches' to agree with 'he or she'. Suggestion: use 'sometimes' and ensure subject and verb agree: 'he or she teaches'.

× My favorite teacher is gonna be the chemistry teacher because I love chemistry and he teaches.

✓ My favorite teacher is going to be the chemistry teacher because I love chemistry and he teaches well.

Error: 'gonna' is informal; use 'going to' for future intention. The clause 'he teaches' is incomplete; add an adverb like 'well' or complete the idea. Suggestion: use 'is going to be' and complete the sentence: 'he teaches well'.

× Makes everything easy.

✓ He makes everything easy.

Fragment: missing subject. The pronoun 'He' is required to form a complete sentence. Suggestion: include the subject before the verb: 'He makes everything easy.'

× Probably no, because I think teacher is a very hardworking job and I think I don't really have that type of patience because sometimes the kids are just very annoying and I can't take it.

✓ Probably not, because I think teaching is a very demanding job and I don't really have that kind of patience because sometimes the kids are very annoying and I can't take it.

Use 'not' after 'probably' rather than 'no'. 'Teacher' (person) should be 'teaching' (the job). 'Hardworking job' is incorrect collocation; 'demanding job' is better. 'That type of patience' -> 'that kind of patience'. Suggestion: use correct negation, noun forms and collocations: 'Probably not... teaching is a very demanding job... that kind of patience.'

× Yes, in the primary I got a science T-shirt that teach me very perfectly it he explains every law of physics to me so smooth that I love physics in the letter of my education.

✓ Yes, in primary school I had a science teacher who taught me very well; he explained every law of physics to me so smoothly that I developed a love of physics throughout my education.

Multiple errors: 'the primary' -> 'primary school'. 'I got a science T-shirt' seems wrong; likely 'I got a science teacher'. 'that teach me' should be 'who taught me' (past tense and relative pronoun for person). 'it he explains' is confused; split into clauses. 'so smooth' -> adverb 'so smoothly'. 'I love physics in the letter of my education' -> 'I developed a love of physics throughout my education'. Suggestion: use correct past tense 'taught', correct relative pronoun 'who', adverb forms, and clearer phrasing.

× No, I don't anymore because when I was in primary school I didn't have the access to my phone so I didn't exchange my contacts with my teacher.

✓ No, I don't anymore because when I was in primary school I didn't have access to a phone so I didn't exchange contact details with my teachers.

'the access to my phone' is incorrect; use 'access to a phone' or 'a phone' and 'exchange my contacts' should be 'exchange contact details'. 'my teacher' -> 'my teachers' if plural. Suggestion: use 'access to a phone' and 'exchange contact details with my teachers.'

× But when I grow up, I have my cell phone and I change my contact with everyone that I know.

✓ But when I grew up, I had a cell phone and I exchanged contact details with everyone I knew.

Tense mismatch: 'when I grow up' should be past 'when I grew up' because speaker refers to past. Use past 'had' and 'exchanged'. 'change my contact' -> 'exchanged contact details'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent when referring to past events.

× He explained to me very clearly like he used a lot of experiments or example that make me visually know that how something is going and how it really works, not just in theory.

✓ He explained things to me very clearly; for example, he used a lot of experiments and demonstrations that helped me visually understand how something works, not just in theory.

Errors: 'like he used' -> better 'for example, he used'. 'example' -> plural 'examples' or 'demonstrations'. 'that make me visually know' should be 'that helped me visually understand' (past tense and correct verb 'understand'). Remove unnecessary 'that' before 'how' and avoid 'that how'. Suggestion: use 'helped me visually understand' and correct noun forms 'experiments and demonstrations'.