Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (gender, tense, count), avoid irrelevant comments about appearance, and give a specific reason with an example. Use linking words to connect ideas. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes. My favorite teacher was my junior-high chemistry teacher. She was very patient and explained difficult concepts with clear examples, so I understood experiments better.

제안: Answer directly and finish your thought. Use correct grammar and concise reasons. Mention your main idea, give one or two supporting reasons, and finish the sentence. Avoid hesitations.

예시: No, I prefer to become an engineer because I am studying data science and I enjoy solving problems with computers. However, the job market is tough right now, so I am also keeping my options open.

제안: Be concise and coherent: state who the teacher was, give specific details (when you started, what she did) and use linking words. Fix grammar (tenses, subject-verb agreement) and avoid filler words.

예시: Yes. I still remember my childhood dance teacher. I started lessons at five and she often encouraged me when I fell behind, which helped me gain confidence and improve quickly.

제안: Give a clear direct answer then two concise reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (past tense, articles) and avoid repetition.

예시: No, I haven't stayed in touch. We lost their phone numbers when my family changed phones, and I also moved away from the city so it became difficult to contact them.

제안: This answer is clear and gives a specific example. Improve by tightening sentences, fixing small grammar errors, and adding a linking word to show result. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: She was very patient, so I often asked her questions after class. For example, when I couldn't attend school I would photograph the problems on my phone and send them to her, and she always replied with helpful explanations.

× He is a She is a very beautiful teacher and she always have many patients to teach me.

✓ She is a very beautiful teacher and she is always very patient when teaching me.

The sentence mixes pronouns 'He' and 'She' causing confusion; then 'have many patients' is incorrect: 'patient' should be an adjective describing the teacher, not 'patients' the noun. Also 'have' does not agree with singular 'she'. Correct to 'she is always very patient' to use the adjective and proper subject-verb agreement. Suggestion: Use consistent pronouns and the adjective 'patient' with the verb 'be' for describing qualities.

× she always have many patients to teach me.

✓ she is always very patient when teaching me.

'have' does not agree with singular subject 'she'; moreover 'many patients' changes meaning. Use 'is' + adjective 'patient' to describe the teacher. Suggestion: For character traits use 'be' + adjective (she is patient).

× I prefer to become an engineer because I'm majoring in data science in the university and I love solving problems with computer.

✓ I prefer to become an engineer because I'm majoring in data science at university and I love solving problems with computers.

Use preposition 'at university' (not 'in the university') in this context and plural 'computers' or 'using computers' sounds natural. Also 'solve problems with computer' is ungrammatical; use 'with computers' or 'using computers'.

× But you know, the job market is not, is very tough now, and so I may be considered to be a.

✓ But you know, the job market is very tough now, so I may be considered for other options.

The original is disfluent and ends incomplete ('considered to be a.'). Remove the redundant 'is not, is' and complete the thought. Use 'considered for' or rephrase to 'I may consider other options.' Suggestion: Keep sentences complete and avoid repeated fragments.

× I started to learn dancing when I was five years old, so I'm the youngest, uh, students in my class.

✓ I started learning to dance when I was five years old, so I was the youngest student in my class.

Mismatch of tenses and number: use past tense 'was' to match 'started' and singular 'student' to match 'I'. Also 'learn dancing' is less natural than 'learn to dance' or 'learning to dance'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and match singular/plural forms with the subject.

× The dance teacher often encourage me when I not, I can't, uh, follow others.

✓ The dance teacher often encouraged me when I couldn't follow the others.

Verb forms: with past context, 'encourage' should be 'encouraged' and 'can't' -> past 'couldn't'. Also 'when I not' is ungrammatical; use 'when I couldn't follow others' or 'when I couldn't keep up with the others.' Suggestion: Ensure verbs match past tense and use auxiliary 'couldn't' for inability.

× No, I haven't kept in touch with my primary teachers because my family change phones so I lost my I lost their phone numbers so I can't contact with them and I also left the city.

✓ No, I haven't kept in touch with my primary school teachers because my family changed phones and I lost their phone numbers, so I can't contact them, and I also left the city.

Multiple tense and structure problems: 'change phones' should be past 'changed phones'; 'I lost my I lost' is repetition; 'contact with them' should be 'contact them'. Use 'primary school teachers' for clarity. Suggestion: Use past tense for past actions and correct verb patterns (contact someone, not contact with someone). Keep sentence concise.

× My favorite teacher is very patient, so I often ask her some questions even after classes.

✓ My favorite teacher is very patient, so I often ask her questions even after class.

'Ask her some questions' is acceptable, but 'after classes' is less natural here; 'after class' or 'after class hours' is more common. Suggestion: Use 'after class' to refer to the lesson just finished; omit 'some' for conciseness.

× For example, if I'm not at school, I usually use my phones to take a picture for the questions and send it to her.

✓ For example, if I'm not at school, I usually use my phone to take a picture of the questions and send it to her.

Use singular 'phone' unless the student has multiple phones. 'Take a picture for the questions' should be 'take a picture of the questions'. Use 'send it to her' is fine. Suggestion: Use 'phone' singular and the preposition 'of' for photographing something.