Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は意味を伝えようとしていますが、文法や語順が不自然で、語彙選択も不適切です。まず簡潔なトピック文を使い、続けて具体的な支援内容を理由や例で補足してください。接続詞（for example, and, also, because）を使って文をつなぎ、主語と動詞の一致や時制に注意しましょう。例文を声に出して何度も練習し、短く明確な文を保つ練習をしてください。

예시: Yes, I do. My favorite teacher was my high school literature teacher because she taught me not only about books but also about how to face challenges in life. For example, she encouraged me to keep a journal and reflect on my goals, which helped me stay focused during difficult times.

제안: 意図は伝わりますが、否定文の構造が誤っており、形容詞や句の使い方も不自然です。まず明確なトピック文（I don't want to be a teacher）を使い、その後に理由を簡潔に述べ、接続語（because, as, since）でつなぎましょう。具体的な理由を一つか二つに絞るとより自然です。

예시: No, I don't want to be a teacher. I think teaching involves a heavy workload and a lot of responsibility for children's learning, which would be stressful for me.

제안: 回答で誰のことを話しているか分かりますが、表現が曖昧で具体性に欠けます。まず誰かを特定する文（Yes, I remember one teacher well.）を述べ、その教師が何を教えたかを具体的に説明しましょう。例や具体的なフレーズ（for example, she taught me how to...）を加えてください。

예시: Yes, I remember one very impressive teacher from my past. She taught me calligraphy skills, but more importantly she taught me life lessons, such as staying patient and practicing every day to improve.

제안: 意味は伝わりますが、時制や語順が混乱しており、同じ語句の繰り返しが多いです。明確な現在の状況を述べ（No, I'm not in regular contact）、続けて理由（I want to share how I've changed and hear about them）を簡潔に述べ、接続詞でつなぎましょう。

예시: No, I'm not in regular contact with my primary school teachers. However, I would like to reconnect because I want to tell them how I've changed and hear about their lives too.

제안: ここは非常に不明瞭で意味が取りにくいです。まず具体的な支援内容を一文で明示し（He helped me by...）、続けて具体例や影響（for example, he advised me to... which helped me...）を述べてください。抽象的な表現は避け、簡潔な英語で練習しましょう。

예시: He helped me develop confidence and practical skills for dealing with people. For example, he taught me how to communicate calmly in difficult situations, which made it easier for me to handle complicated relationships at work.

× Yes, I have a very famous teacher, he told me.

✓ Yes, I have a very well-known teacher who taught me.

The original sentence misused the pronoun 'he' and the clause is not correctly connected. Use a relative pronoun 'who' to link the noun 'teacher' with the verb 'taught'. Also change 'very famous' to 'very well-known' for naturalness and 'told me' to 'taught me' to match the context.

× Not only simply Telegram, but also.

✓ Not only did he teach me basic things like handwriting, but he also taught me important life lessons.

The original fragment is ungrammatical and unclear. Use a complete comparative structure 'Not only... but also...' with a subject and verb. Replace 'Telegram' (likely incorrect word) with a plausible item that fits context and provide a clear second clause.

× He commands me how to survive this entire life.

✓ He taught me how to survive in life.

'Commands me how' is incorrect; we use verbs like 'teach' or 'show' for imparting knowledge. 'Survive this entire life' is awkward; 'survive in life' or 'get through life' is natural. Use past tense 'taught' to match past teaching.

× No, I don't teacher.

✓ No, I don't want to be a teacher.

The original omits necessary words. Use 'want to be a teacher' to express desire. Also include the indefinite article 'a' before 'teacher'.

× I think they are very, they have very huge burden and responsibility to children and they are very tight for hard work.

✓ I think they have a very heavy burden and great responsibility for children, and they have to work very hard.

Problems: unnecessary comma and repetition; 'very huge burden' is unnatural—use 'very heavy burden' or 'a huge burden' with article; 'responsibility to children' should be 'responsibility for children'; 'they are very tight for hard work' is incorrect—use 'they have to work very hard'.

× Yes, I used to talk about most impressive teacher.

✓ Yes, I used to talk about the most impressive teacher.

Missing article 'the' before 'most impressive teacher'. Also 'used to talk about' is odd without context but acceptable if meaning past habit. Insert 'the'.

× She told me not only the things that fit for calligraphy, but also she told me how to live and tell life and tip.

✓ She taught me not only things related to calligraphy, but also how to live and practical life lessons and tips.

Use 'taught me' instead of 'told me' for instruction. 'Fit for calligraphy' is incorrect—use 'related to calligraphy'. 'How to live and tell life and tip' is unclear; replace with 'how to live' and 'practical life lessons and tips'.

× Recently I've turned off so often contact with my past teacher, but I want to miss them and I miss them and because I want to report how I changed for now and I want to listen to her.

✓ Recently I've stopped contacting my former teacher often, but I miss her because I want to tell her how I have changed and I want to hear from her.

Multiple issues: 'turned off so often contact' is ungrammatical—use 'stopped contacting' or 'haven't been in contact with'. Use 'former teacher' or 'my past teacher'; match pronouns ('her' instead of 'them' if singular). 'I want to miss them' is wrong—'I miss her'. 'Report how I changed for now' should be 'tell her how I have changed' and 'listen to her' becomes 'hear from her'. Use present perfect 'have changed' for recent change.

× MMM he taught me the tape for the lip had survived this society to live.

✓ He taught me skills I needed to survive in society.

The original is ungrammatical and contains unclear metaphor 'tape for the lip'. Simplify to 'skills I needed to survive in society' which conveys the intended meaning.

× Society is very difficult because the human relationship is complicated but changes posture.

✓ Society is difficult because human relationships are complicated and constantly change.

'The human relationship' should be plural 'human relationships'. 'But changes posture' is unidiomatic; use 'constantly change' or 'can change'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and natural word choice.