Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and directly state who the teacher was and why you liked them with one clear topic sentence, then add one specific concrete example using a linking word. Avoid repetition and redundant phrases like "making it more interesting" twice.

예시: My favorite teacher was my university math lecturer because he explained problems using real-life examples. For instance, he showed how statistics apply to sports scoring, which made the concepts much clearer and sparked my curiosity.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence and avoid hesitations and filler words. Give one or two specific reasons why you want to teach accounting and connect them with a linking word (e.g., "because" or "for example"). Keep it within three sentences.

예시: Yes, I would like to teach accounting because I enjoy explaining how financial concepts work in real businesses. For example, I would use simple case studies to show students how to prepare budgets and solve common bookkeeping problems.

제안: Be specific: name one memorable teacher and give one clear technique they used. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid confusing sentence structure. Remove repetition and clarify the result of their method.

예시: I particularly remember my internal auditing lecturer because he made the subject engaging by using practical exercises. As a result, we understood the topics during class and rarely needed to study them at home.

제안: Answer directly and organize reasons with linking words (e.g., "because", "and", "therefore"). Remove unnecessary details and correct grammar (plural forms and past tense). Give one clear explanation about why contact was not kept.

예시: No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers because I moved schools frequently due to my father's job. Also, at that time it was uncommon to share contact details, so I lost touch with most of them.

제안: Give one clear example of the help and describe its effect using specific details. Avoid hesitations and vague language. Use a topic sentence then a follow-up sentence with a concrete example and result.

예시: She helped me by giving practical advice and mentoring during difficult times. For example, when I struggled with time management, she taught me a simple schedule system that improved my study habits and reduced my stress.

× My favorite teacher was my math teacher who was in my university.

✓ My favorite teacher was my math teacher at my university.

Use 'at' instead of 'in' to indicate institution. This is a preposition choice (fits preposition rules) and also more natural phrasing; no verb agreement error here but corrected for idiomatic usage.

× He actually used to deal with the maths question with real life example, making it more interesting and making us more curious and inquisitive about that thing.

✓ He used to explain math problems with real-life examples, making them more interesting and making us more curious and inquisitive about the subject.

Replace 'deal with' with 'explain' for correct collocation; 'maths question' -> 'math problems'; 'real life' -> 'real-life' (compound modifier); 'that thing' -> 'the subject' for clarity. Use plural 'them' to agree with 'problems'. These are corrections of word choice, count agreement and participle usage.

× Yes, I would like to be a teacher specially in accounting subject, because I want to teach people in an interesting way and tell them how interesting accounting is.

✓ Yes, I would like to be a teacher, especially in accounting, because I want to teach people in an interesting way and show them how interesting accounting is.

Change 'specially' to 'especially' (correct adverb) and 'in accounting subject' to 'in accounting' (natural phrasing). 'Tell them' -> 'show them' is stylistic but clearer. Fixes involve correct adverb choice and noun phrase form.

× And I actually other than no, other than teaching also I actually need to, you know, make them understand real life, how to deal with real life problems.

✓ Besides teaching, I also want to help them understand how to deal with real-life problems.

Original sentence is disfluent and ungrammatical. Simplify to a clear structure: 'Besides teaching' introduces additional purpose; 'want to help them understand' is correct verb structure; 'real-life problems' is the natural noun phrase. This fixes sentence structure and word order.

× Yes, there are many teacher that I have from past and I still remember them specially my internal auditing teacher.

✓ Yes, there are many teachers from my past that I still remember, especially my internal auditing teacher.

Use plural 'teachers' to match 'many'; reorder phrase to 'from my past' and add comma before 'especially'. This corrects singular/plural agreement and improves word order.

× What he used to do was that he was to although internal auditing is a very boring subject but he used to teach us in a way that we don't have to go to home and look over the topics because he used to teach it in a way that we we would learn those then.

✓ What he used to do was teach internal auditing in a way that made it interesting, so we did not have to go home and review the topics because we would already have learned them in class.

Simplify and correct verb forms: 'used to do was teach' is the correct structure; 'made it interesting' uses past tense consistent with 'used to'; 'don't have to go to home' -> 'did not have to go home'; 'look over the topics' -> 'review the topics'; 'we would learn those then' -> 'we would already have learned them in class'. Fixes include tense consistency and proper verb forms.

× No, I am not in touch with my primary school teacher because I actually travelled a lot around the world because of my father's job.

✓ No, I am not in touch with my primary school teachers because I traveled a lot around the world due to my father's job.

Use plural 'teachers' if referring to more than one; 'because of' -> 'due to' is optional but 'traveled' past tense matches context. This clarifies reference and keeps tense consistent.

× So there were various teachers in my primary school.

✓ So I had various teachers at primary school.

Change passive 'there were various teachers in my primary school' to the more natural 'I had various teachers at primary school'. Improves sentence structure and preposition choice.

× So I really don't have touch with them.

✓ So I really am not in touch with them.

Add missing preposition 'in' and correct auxiliary 'am not' for present state. Fixes pronoun phrase and verb phrase structure.

× And specially at those time, their phones were not common, contacts were not common.

✓ And especially at that time, phones and contacts were not common.

Use 'at that time' (not 'those time'); combine and simplify the noun phrases. Corrects preposition/ determiner usage and redundancy.

× Teacher, you were not allowed to give in context.

✓ Teachers were not allowed to share contact information.

Original is unclear and uses incorrect second-person 'you'. Rephrase to general passive 'Teachers were not allowed' and clarify 'give in context' -> 'share contact information'. Fixes pronoun and wording.

× My favorite teacher has helped me in many ways, especially the advises she used to give me.

✓ My favorite teacher has helped me in many ways, especially the advice she used to give me.

'Advises' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'advice' (uncountable). Also ensure tense: 'used to give' is past habitual and acceptable; keep 'has helped' if present relevance is intended. Fixes noun form (countability).

× So, uh, when I'm in, uh, actually difficult position or when I'm facing difficulty.

✓ So, when I'm in a difficult position or when I'm facing difficulties,

Add articles: 'a difficult position' and use plural 'difficulties' or singular for consistency. This corrects article usage and noun number for present tense contexts.

× So I think in a way that what would she do? So she have like actually, uh, trained me in a way or, umm, you know, explain.

✓ So I think, 'What would she do?' She had, in fact, trained me and explained things to me in a helpful way.

Replace incorrect 'she have' with 'she had' for past perfect/habitual meaning; 'explain' -> 'explained' to match past tense; restructure into clear sentences. Fixes subject-verb agreement and tense consistency.