Teachers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: ปรับปรุงความถูกต้องของไวยากรณ์และความชัดเจนของประโยค โดยใช้ประโยคหัวข้อที่ชัดเจนแล้วตามด้วยรายละเอียดที่เชื่อมโยง เช่น ใช้ tense ให้ถูกต้อง เติม article และปรับคำที่สะกดผิด ให้คำตอบยาวไม่เกิน 4–5 ประโยค ตัวอย่างข้อผิดพลาดที่ควรแก้ ได้แก่ “one of my favorite teacher” → “one of my favorite teachers”, “She is English teacher” → “She was an English teacher”.

예시: Yes, I do. One of my favorite teachers from high school was my English teacher. She was kind and cheerful, which made every lesson enjoyable. Because of her, I started to like reading and speaking English more.

제안: แก้ tense และความสอดคล้องระหว่างประธานกับกริยา ใช้ linking words สั้นๆ เพื่อเชื่อมเหตุผล และย่อความให้อยู่ใน 3–4 ประโยค เช่น เปลี่ยน “when I was young” ใช้ past, “once I grow up my mind have changed” ควรเป็น past tense และสอดคล้องกัน นอกจากนี้ให้ระบุเหตุผลสั้นๆ ว่าทำไมเปลี่ยนใจ

예시: I wanted to be a teacher when I was a child, but my plans changed as I grew up. Now I prefer a career in business because I enjoy planning and working on projects. For that reason, I don't want to be a teacher anymore.

제안: แก้คำผิดและความหมายที่ไม่ชัดเจน (เช่น “English T-shirt” น่าจะเป็น “English teacher”) ปรับโครงสร้างให้ชัดเจน ใช้ประโยคหัวข้อแล้วตามด้วยรายละเอียดหรือเหตุผลสั้นๆ และหลีกเลี่ยงการซ้ำซ้อน เช่น ไม่ต้องพูดว่า “made me enjoy studying English and made me confident in English” สองครั้ง

예시: Yes, I do. As I mentioned, my English teacher stands out the most. She made learning English enjoyable and helped me become more confident when speaking the language.

제안: แก้คำผิดและใช้ tense ให้ถูกต้อง รวมทั้งใช้คำที่เหมาะสม (เช่น “teacher” ไม่ใช่ “T-shirt”) จัดประโยคให้สั้นลงและเป็นเหตุเป็นผล ใช้ linking word เช่น “because” หรือ “so” อย่างถูกต้อง ตัวอย่างปรับปรุงคือบอกเหตุผลสั้นๆ ว่าไม่ได้ติดต่อเพราะย้ายบ้านหรือไม่กลับไปโรงเรียน

예시: No, I'm not. I didn't keep in touch with my primary school teachers because my family moved and I rarely returned to my old schools. So I haven't had the chance to contact them.

제안: ปรับ tense ให้สม่ำเสมอและแก้าความผิดไวยากรณ์ เช่น “I have no confidence” → “I had no confidence”, “trust me” → “trusted me”, “make me more dare”→“made me more willing” ใช้ linking word เช่น “so” อย่างถูกต้อง และให้รายละเอียดเฉพาะว่าเธอใช้วิธีอะไรช่วย เช่น ให้คำชม ฝึกพูดเป็นคู่ เป็นต้น

예시: She encouraged me a lot when I was young. I had almost no confidence in speaking English, but she trusted me and praised my efforts. Because of her support and regular speaking practice in class, I became more willing to speak English.

× I remember one of my favorite teacher when I was in high school.

✓ I remember one of my favorite teachers when I was in high school.

The noun 'teacher' should be plural 'teachers' because 'one of my favorite' requires a plural noun after 'of'. Use plural nouns after 'one of' to indicate a member of a group.

× She is English teacher.

✓ She is an English teacher.

Before a singular countable noun we need an article. Use 'an' before a vowel sound; 'English teacher' is countable so 'an English teacher' is correct.

× She was very kind and cheerful so she made my English class very fun.

✓ She was very kind and cheerful, so she made my English class very fun.

This sentence mainly needs a comma before 'so' when connecting two independent clauses. Grammatically the article use is fine; keep punctuation to improve clarity.

× Personally, I wanted to be a teacher when I was young, but once I grow up my mind have changed.

✓ Personally, I wanted to be a teacher when I was young, but once I grew up my mind changed.

The sentence mixes past and present forms. Use past tense 'grew' and 'changed' to keep consistent past time reference. Also 'have changed' is present perfect, which is inappropriate with 'once I grew up'.

× I want to be a businesswoman instead, so I don't want to be a teacher anymore.

✓ I want to be a businesswoman instead, so I don't want to be a teacher anymore.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. Keep present tense for current desire.

× As I mentioned before, I remember my English T-shirt the most because she made me enjoy studying English and made me confident in English.

✓ As I mentioned before, I remember my English teacher the most because she made me enjoy studying English and feel confident in English.

'T-shirt' is incorrect word choice; context requires 'teacher'. Also parallel verbs need consistent form: use 'feel confident' rather than 'made me confident' to match 'made me enjoy' structure, or keep 'made me feel confident'.

× I would say no because when I was young I have no contact with my T-shirt at all and when I grow up I rarely go back to my primary or my middle school, so I have no chance to connect with them.

✓ I would say no because when I was young I had no contact with my teacher at all, and after I grew up I rarely went back to my primary or middle school, so I had no chance to connect with them.

Pronoun/noun 'T-shirt' is wrong; should be 'teacher'. Also verb tenses need past form: 'had', 'grew up', 'went', 'had' to maintain past-time consistency. 'Primary or my middle school' awkward; remove repeated 'my'. Also 'no contact with them' refers to plural teachers so keep 'them' but ensure consistency.

× She encouraged me a lot when I was young.

✓ She encouraged me a lot when I was young.

Sentence is correct; past tense 'encouraged' matches 'when I was young'.

× I have no confidence at all to speak English, but she was very cheerful and trust me that I can speak, so she make me more dare to speak in English.

✓ I had no confidence at all in speaking English, but she was very cheerful and trusted me that I could speak, so she made me more willing to speak in English.

Pronouns and verb forms are inconsistent. Use past tense 'had' and 'trusted' and 'made' to match past context. 'Confidence in speaking English' is the natural phrase. 'More dare to speak' is unnatural; use 'more willing to speak' or 'more confident to speak'. Also 'trust me that I can' should be 'trusted me that I could' to keep past perspective.