Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 语言更自然并修正语法错误，答题要更直接并加一两个具体例子支撑。避免冗余表达（例如“very like self disciplined”应改为“very self-disciplined”）。答句不宜过长，应分为主题句加一到两句支持细节。

예시: Yes, I enjoy keeping things tidy. I’m very self-disciplined, so I clean and organise my belongings every weekend. For example, I always make my bed and put books back on the shelf to keep my room neat.

제안: 回答需更连贯并修正时态与语法错误，提供更具体时间或行为细节。可用连接词（however, when, so）使段落流畅；最后一句要明确时态（e.g. "I started" 而不是 "I start"）。

예시: No, I didn’t. When I was a child my parents usually tidied my room for me. However, as I got older I realised I had to take responsibility, so since my teens I have cleaned my room myself every weekend.

제안: 回答要更简洁且使用更准确的词汇和流程描述。避免口语填充词（如“So”）开头可直接给主题句，然后按步骤用连接词（first, then, finally）说明具体方法。

예시: I keep my study space tidy by following a simple routine. First, I sort out unnecessary items like old papers and worksheets. Then I put them into labelled boxes, and finally I store the boxes in a cupboard or storage room.

제안: 回答需修正逻辑衔接与语法（删除多余的连词如"because but"），并用更具体的理由或例子支持观点。可给出一两点清楚的好处，并用连接词（for example, because, so）组织句子。

예시: Yes, I think it is necessary to be tidy because it helps you stay organised and think more clearly. For example, when my desk is tidy I can find study materials quickly, which saves time and reduces stress.

× I'm a very like self disciplined person and I believe keeping things tidy is my own responsibility.

✓ I'm a very self-disciplined person and I believe keeping things tidy is my own responsibility.

句中“very like self disciplined”结构不正确。形容词“self-disciplined”前可用副词“very”修饰，但不能插入“like”。应去掉“like”，并在“self-disciplined”中间加连字符以符合书写习惯。建议：将“very like self disciplined”改为“very self-disciplined”。

× So that's why when I start to clean my room.

✓ So that's why I started to clean my room.

句子描述过去发生的动作，应使用一般过去时。原句用现在时“start”与前面“that's why”以及上下文的过去时不一致。建议将动词改为过去式“started”。

× So I'll keep my study place clean by collecting my things piece by piece that I don't need, such as some papers or worksheets, and I'll get a box from out my house and organize it and finally put them in my storage room.

✓ I'll keep my study place clean by collecting, piece by piece, the things I don't need, such as papers or worksheets. I'll get a box from my house, organize these items, and finally put them in my storage room.

原句存在时态与词序问题，以及冗长且不连贯的表达。应保持将来时“I'll”一致，并把定语从句“that I don't need”改为更自然的位置“the things I don't need”。短语“from out my house”不自然，应改为“from my house”。最后用复数代词“these items”与前文呼应。建议简化句子并调整词序使表达清晰。

× and I'll get a box from out my house and organize it and finally put them in my storage room.

✓ I'll get a box from my house, organize the items, and finally put them in my storage room.

短语“from out my house”是不地道的英语，正确用法为“from my house”或“out of my house”。此外，原句中先说“organize it”随后又用“put them”，代词指代不一致，应统一为复数或单数。建议使用“organize the items”并保持代词一致。

× When I was a child, my parents always helped me to tidy my room. But as I grew up I started to realize that I should have my own responsibility to make my room clean.

✓ When I was a child, my parents always helped me tidy my room. But as I grew up, I started to realize that I should take responsibility for keeping my room clean.

“helped me to tidy”在现代英语中常省略“to”为“helped me tidy”。另外“should have my own responsibility to make my room clean”措辞不自然，应使用固定搭配“take responsibility for doing sth”并用现在分词“keeping”表示持续状态。建议改为“take responsibility for keeping my room clean”。

× For me I think keeping things tidy is very necessary because but keeping things tidy can help you to practice your logic and then your responsibility and some self-reliance.

✓ For me, I think keeping things tidy is very necessary because it helps you practice logical thinking, develop responsibility, and build self-reliance.

句中同时出现“because but”逻辑混乱，应去掉一个连接词。原句并列结构混乱且用词不准确，“practice your logic”不自然，应改为“practice logical thinking”；“then your responsibility and some self-reliance”也需重构为并列的动词短语。建议去掉多余连词，调整为平行的并列结构。