Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答直接，但重复和用词不够自然；可用更自然的短句并补充简单原因或频率以丰富内容。尽量避免重复“mess”。建议将回答控制在3-4句内，并使用连接词如“because”或“so”。

예시: Not really. I'm quite untidy — my desk is often cluttered because I leave books and papers out. I usually only tidy up when I have to look for something.

제안: 内容具体但句子碎片化且重复“mess”。可以用一两个复合句整合细节，并用连词提升连贯性。增加反思或比较（例如现在的情况）会更好。

예시: No, I didn't. I often left toys and books scattered around, putting my basketball on the bed and piles of books on the floor, so my room was always messy. Now I try to put things away more often.

제안: 回答理由清楚但太冗长且口语化。建议用一到两句话给出观点，再补充简短原因并可提及偶尔做法（如整理频率或方法）。使用连接词如“because”或“however”。

예시: I don't usually make a special effort to tidy my study because I find it time-consuming and prefer to leave things where they are. However, I do a quick clear-up once a week when papers pile up.

제안: 回答结构清晰且有对比，但可以更自然地表达并加入具体后果或例子来支持观点。可用词汇替换如“shared workspace”或“affect colleagues”使表述更地道。

예시: I think it depends. In a personal office it's less important, but in a shared workspace you should keep things tidy because clutter can distract or inconvenience colleagues, for example by taking up shared desk space.

× No, I don't. Instead I always make a mess of my things.

✓ No, I don't. Instead, I always make a mess of my things.

句中缺少逗号以分隔转折语“Instead”与主句，属于标点影响句子流畅性，虽然不是严格的时态错误，但保持时态为现在一般时。建议在“Instead”后加逗号，使句子更自然。

× For example, my desk is always in a mess.

✓ For example, my desk is always a mess.

“in a mess” 在这里不如“a mess”常用，存在搭配问题。应使用“a mess”表示桌子总是凌乱。建议记住常见搭配：be a mess。

× No, I didn't. When I was a child, I often made a total mess of my room.

✓ No, I didn't. When I was a child, I often made a total mess of my room.

该句时态正确（过去时），不需改动。保留原句。

× For example, I threw my things everywhere.

✓ For example, I threw my things everywhere.

该句为过去时，与上下文一致，无需修改。

× I put my basketball on the bed.

✓ I put my basketball on the bed.

该句为过去时简单陈述，符合上下文，无需修改。

× I put my books on the floor.

✓ I put my books on the floor.

该句为过去时，与上下文一致，无需修改。

× Actually, I don't deliberately make an effort to keep my study or workspace tidy because I just want to leave things when they are and I also find that it is time consuming to tidy things.

✓ Actually, I don't make a deliberate effort to keep my study or workspace tidy because I just want to leave things as they are, and I also find that it is time-consuming to tidy things.

问题包括词序和固定搭配：应为“make a deliberate effort”（把副词放在名词前作定语），以及短语“leave things as they are”是正确用法。另“time consuming”作为复合形容词修饰名词时需连字符：time-consuming。建议把副词位置调整并使用固定搭配和连字符。

× Well, I think it depends.

✓ Well, I think it depends.

句子语法正确，无需修改。

× If you work alone in your own office, I don't think it's necessary because it belongs to your own space.

✓ If you work alone in your own office, I don't think it's necessary because it's your own space.

原句中“it belongs to your own space”结构不自然且人称指代混乱。用“it's your own space”更简洁，清晰地指代办公室属于你自己。建议使用简洁直接的主系表结构来表达所属关系。

× But if you work in a group or if you work with others, I think it's necessary because this may affect others.

✓ But if you work in a group or with others, I think it's necessary because that may affect others.

句中重复“if you work”冗余，可简化为“or with others”。此外“this may affect others”中指代不够明确，使用“that”更自然指代前面的情况。建议合并重复结构并用更合适的指示代词。