Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and give one specific supporting detail using linking words. Avoid unclear words (e.g., “love” or “*****”) and unnecessary repetition.

예시: Yes, I like to keep things tidy. For example, when my desk is organized I can concentrate better on my work, so I feel less stressed and more productive.

제안: Answer directly and clearly, use correct past-tense grammar and one or two specific supporting details linked with a connector (e.g., “but” or “however”). Avoid filler words and unclear nouns like “Teddy.”

예시: No, I didn't keep my room tidy as a child. It was usually messy, but I have learned to be more organized now because a tidy room helps me find things quickly and study more effectively.

제안: Give a structured answer: start with a topic sentence, then list specific methods using linking words (first, then, finally). Use correct nouns and avoid repetition. Be concise and specific about what you do and why.

예시: I keep my study space tidy by regularly clearing unnecessary papers, using a shelf and drawer organizers, and wiping the desk each week; this helps me stay focused and prevents clutter from building up.

제안: Give a clear opinion and explain it with one or two specific reasons using linking words (because, so). Fix vocabulary errors (use “tidy” not “teddy”) and remove hesitation sounds.

예시: I think being tidy is important because it helps me concentrate and reduces stress, so even if absolute neatness isn't necessary, keeping things reasonably organized improves my productivity.

× Yes, I like to keep things tidy and organize.

✓ Yes, I like to keep things tidy and organized.

The verb 'organize' is used as part of a coordinated phrase describing a state; it should be an adjective/participle 'organized' to match 'tidy'. Use the past participle/adjective form after 'keep' to describe the resulting state: 'keep things tidy and organized.' Suggestion: use parallel forms when listing adjectives or participles.

× For example if my desk is organized I can concentrate my work and also if my love is keeps ***** I'm very feel relaxed.

✓ For example, if my desk is organized I can concentrate on my work, and also if my room is kept tidy I feel very relaxed.

Multiple errors: 'concentrate my work' requires the preposition 'on' (preposition error, ID 11) and 'concentrate on my work' is correct. 'my love is keeps' has subject-verb agreement and word choice problems: 'love' is incorrect for the context; 'room' fits. 'keeps' should be passive 'is kept' or adjective 'is tidy.' 'I'm very feel relaxed' mixes 'I'm' and 'feel' incorrectly; correct is 'I feel very relaxed.' Suggestions: use 'concentrate on', use correct subject ('room'), ensure subject-verb agreement ('is kept' or 'is tidy'), and use either 'I feel' or 'I'm relaxed.'

× No, I didn't keep my room, Teddy.

✓ No, I didn't keep my room tidy, Teddy.

Missing adjective 'tidy' after 'keep my room' makes sentence awkward. The past tense auxiliary 'didn't' is correct, but include 'tidy' to complete meaning. Suggestion: add necessary complement words after 'keep' when describing state: 'keep my room tidy.'

× Even my room is very messy.

✓ Even then, my room was very messy.

The question asked about childhood (past). The student uses present tense 'is'; it should be past tense 'was' to match timeframe. Also 'Even my room' is better as 'Even then, my room' or 'My room was very messy too.' Suggestion: match verb tense to the time reference in the question.

× I didn't good at organizing room but now I realize uh keeping my room is tidy is important for my.

✓ I wasn't good at organizing my room, but now I realize that keeping my room tidy is important for me.

Several issues: 'I didn't good' is incorrect; use 'I wasn't good' (verb 'to be' with adjective). 'organizing room' needs determiner 'my room.' 'keeping my room is tidy' has wrong word order; correct is 'keeping my room tidy.' 'important for my' should be 'important for me.' Suggestion: use 'be' + adjective for ability ('wasn't good'), include possessive determiners, and use correct word order and object pronouns.

× I keep my desks desks my work and study space teddy because I eliminate many paper as much as possible and I have a shelf to organize and I feel important of.

✓ I keep my desk and my work and study space tidy because I get rid of as many papers as possible, and I have a shelf to organize things; that makes me feel important.

Multiple issues: 'desks desks' is repetitive and likely singular 'desk.' Use 'desk' not 'desks.' 'I eliminate many paper' has count noun/plural error: 'many papers' or 'much paper' and 'eliminate' is awkward — 'get rid of' or 'dispose of' is natural. 'as much as possible' should be 'as many as possible' for countable 'papers.' 'I have a shelf to organize' needs object: 'organize things' or 'organize them.' 'I feel important of' is ungrammatical; possible intended meaning is 'I feel it's important' or 'that makes me feel important/relaxed.' Suggestion: correct noun number, use natural verbs, add objects for 'organize', and fix final clause to convey intended feeling.

× Do you think that it is necessary to be tidy?

✓ Do you think that it is necessary to be tidy?

This question sentence is grammatically correct and matches present-time general question context. No correction needed.

× I don't think it is necessary to be tidy, but uh, to be ***** is important to concentrate, uh, work and study and also uh, being teddy make me relax.

✓ I don't think it is always necessary to be tidy, but being tidy is important for concentrating on work and study, and being tidy also helps me relax.

Multiple errors: 'to be *****' is unclear; replace with 'being tidy.' 'important to concentrate' needs 'for' or gerund: 'important for concentrating on...' or 'important to help me concentrate.' 'work and study' should be 'work and studying' or 'work and study' with 'concentrating on.' 'being teddy' typos: 'teddy' should be 'tidy.' 'make me relax' wrong verb form; use 'helps me relax' or 'makes me relaxed.' Suggestion: use gerunds for general habits ('being tidy'), correct spelling, use 'for' or 'to' appropriately, and use 'help' or 'make' with correct forms.