Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, um), use correct grammar (e.g., 'it gives organization to my life' or 'it helps me stay organized'), and expand with one specific reason or brief example. Keep your answer to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I like to keep things tidy because it helps me stay organized in my daily life. For example, when my desk is neat I can find my notes quickly and work more efficiently.

제안: Give a direct, past-focused answer and avoid repeating phrases. Use correct past tense (e.g., 'I didn't keep it tidy when I was very young, but later I started to organize it'). Add one specific detail about when or how you changed to enrich the response.

예시: I don't really remember keeping my room tidy when I was very young, but when I was a teenager I began to organize my things regularly. For example, I started making my bed every morning and sorting toys into boxes.

제안: Use clearer vocabulary and sentence structure. Start with a topic sentence describing your method, then give one or two specific details (e.g., items or storage solutions). Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases like 'ID to organize'.

예시: I keep my study space tidy by using shelves and plastic organizers for stationery and documents. For instance, I store important papers in labeled folders and keep pens in a desk caddy so everything has a place.

제안: Provide a clear opinion and concise supporting reasons. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'it helps reduce the time you spend looking for things') and link ideas with words like 'because' and 'for example'. Limit to 2–3 sentences with a specific example or result.

예시: Yes, I think being tidy is important because it saves time and reduces stress. For example, when my clothes and documents are organized I can get ready faster and avoid last-minute searching.

× I do like to keep things tidy, uh, because uh, it's uh, gives organization of my uh. My life and yes.

✓ I do like to keep things tidy because it gives organization to my life.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'it's gives' combining 'it is' with the verb 'gives'; this is a third person singular subject issue and agreement with the verb. Use a single verb form: 'it gives'. Also remove filler words and add the preposition 'to' after 'organization' to make the phrase natural.

× As a child, I don't have any idea or I cannot remember that I I could have made my room tidy.

✓ As a child, I had no idea and I cannot remember whether I kept my room tidy.

The original mixes present and past ('don't have' with 'As a child') and uses an incorrect modal 'could have made' which changes meaning. Use past tense 'had' to match 'As a child' and use 'kept' (simple past) to describe habitual past action. Replace 'any idea' with 'no idea' for natural phrasing and change 'that I I could have made my room tidy' to 'whether I kept my room tidy.'

× But when I was growing up or when I was in my younger age or and that time I start using to to organize my room and.

✓ But when I was growing up, I started organizing my room.

The original has redundant phrases ('when I was growing up' and 'when I was in my younger age') and incorrect verb form 'I start using to to organize'. Use simple past 'started organizing' to describe a past habit. Remove redundant clauses to make the sentence concise and grammatically correct.

× I keep my study or workspace ID to organize and I have some organizer.

✓ I keep my study or workspace organized and I have some organizers.

'ID to organize' is unclear and likely a mistake; use the adjective 'organized' to describe the workspace. 'Some organizer' should be plural 'some organizers' or 'an organizer' depending on meaning. Adjust article/number accordingly.

× So there I organize my things and also have my file organize organizer.

✓ There I organize my things and also have a file organizer.

Original misuses 'file organize organizer' combining noun and verb forms awkwardly. Use the noun phrase 'file organizer' and include the article 'a' for singular countable noun.

× So I keep my files in this organized.

✓ So I keep my files organized there.

'In this organized' is ungrammatical. Use adjective 'organized' to describe the state of the files and place it after the object: 'keep my files organized.' Add 'there' if indicating location.

× So that's how I keep my organized.

✓ So that's how I stay organized.

The original 'keep my organized' lacks an object for 'my' and incorrect structure. Use the adjective 'organized' with 'stay' to express the state: 'stay organized.'

× It is very necessary to become a tidy person because it's helps to reduce the time consumption when you are finding something.

✓ It is very important to be a tidy person because it helps reduce the time spent looking for things.

'It's helps' incorrectly combines 'it is' with the verb; use 'it helps' (third person singular simple present). 'To become' and 'to be' both possible, but 'to be a tidy person' is more natural. 'Time consumption when you are finding something' is awkward; use 'time spent looking for things.' This fixes verb form and uses appropriate gerund/participle forms.

× If the, if you, uh, initially or from the beginning, if you organize your things, then it will be very helpful to find your things very easily.

✓ If you organize your things from the beginning, it will be much easier to find them.

Original is wordy and mixes tenses slightly but uses future correctly; simplify structure. Use 'it will be much easier to find them' to sound natural. Use pronoun 'them' to refer back to 'things.'

× So it is very important to being tidy in your life and organizing.

✓ So it is very important to be tidy and to keep things organized in your life.

'To being tidy' is incorrect; after 'important' use the infinitive 'to be.' Also clarify 'organizing' to 'keep things organized' for natural collocation.