Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but slightly repetitive and has a minor word choice/grammar issue (“on camp”). To improve, make your response more concise (max 4–5 sentences), correct small errors, and add a specific brief example to illustrate how tidiness improves focus. Use a linking word to connect the cause and effect (e.g., “so” or “therefore”).

예시: Yes, I like to keep things tidy because it helps me focus. For example, if my desk is organized, I can start studying right away without wasting time looking for materials. Therefore, I always tidy my workspace before I begin a task.

제안: This answer directly addresses the question and is natural, but you can add a brief reflection to enrich it and use a linking word for coherence (e.g., “so” or “therefore”). Also tighten phrasing (use “used to” correctly).

예시: Not really. As a child, I used to live in a one‑bedroom apartment with my parents, so my mother usually took care of the cleaning. As a result, I didn’t have many chores until I was older.

제안: Good specific answer with an example. To improve, vary vocabulary slightly, combine sentences with a linking word, and add one more detail about a routine (when or how often you tidy) to show habit and fluency.

예시: I keep my study space tidy by using organizers for different items. For example, I have a desktop organizer for pens and notebooks and a shelf for books, so I spend five minutes tidying up every evening to keep everything in order.

제안: The answer is logical and uses a clear example, but is slightly repetitive. Improve by tightening sentences, using a linking word (therefore, which means), and adding a brief consequence or personal opinion to deepen the response.

예시: Yes, I think being tidy is necessary because it saves time and reduces stress. When everything has a place, you can find items quickly; therefore, I’m less likely to be distracted or late for tasks.

× Whenever my surroundings are unclean or on camp, I always get distracted.

✓ Whenever my surroundings are unclean or I am at camp, I always get distracted.

The phrase 'on camp' is incorrect in this context; the correct prepositional phrase is 'at camp' or use 'I am at camp'. Also the original omitted the subject for the second clause; adding 'I am' clarifies meaning and maintains parallel structure.

× As a child, we lived in a one bedroom apartment which I shared with my parents.

✓ As a child, we lived in a one-bedroom apartment that I shared with my parents.

Compound modifier 'one-bedroom' should be hyphenated when modifying 'apartment'. Also 'which' is often used for non-restrictive clauses and requires a comma; 'that' is more appropriate for a restrictive clause here. This is primarily punctuation and modifier correctness related to singular/plural and noun phrase form.

× I didn't really have to clean the room because my mom always did that for us.

✓ I didn't really have to clean the room because my mom always did it for us.

Using 'that' to refer to 'clean the room' is less natural than the pronoun 'it' when referring to an action or object (the room). 'It' clearly refers back to 'the room' and reads more naturally in spoken English.

× For example, I use a desktop organizer where I can keep my pens, my notebooks, and my books together.

✓ For example, I use a desktop organizer to keep my pens, notebooks, and books together.

Using 'where' is acceptable but less concise; 'to keep' directly expresses purpose and is more natural. Also removing the extra 'my' before 'notebooks' makes the list parallel and concise.

× When things are in order, you know where each object is placed and you can easily find anything that you need.

✓ When things are in order, you know where each object is placed, and you can easily find anything you need.

No major verb agreement error, but the sentence benefits from removing unnecessary 'that' and adding a comma before 'and' for readability. This correction addresses phrasing rather than strict third-person singular error, improving naturalness.

× For example, if you are looking for a pen, then you would find it on the pen holder and not look around trying to find it.

✓ For example, if you are looking for a pen, you would find it in the pen holder and not have to look around for it.

Use 'in the pen holder' rather than 'on' for items placed inside a holder. Also replace 'then you would find' with 'you would find' for smoother flow, and change 'not look around trying to find it' to 'not have to look around for it' to avoid repetition and improve naturalness.