Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and avoid repetition (e.g., “dirty dirty”).

예시: I do want to keep things tidy, but I often struggle to because I procrastinate. For example, my desk and bed usually get cluttered during busy weeks, so I plan to spend fifteen minutes each evening putting things away.

제안: Answer directly in the past tense and provide a brief explanation with a linking word. Avoid filler sounds and unclear words (e.g., “dizzy” is incorrect for messy).

예시: No, I didn’t keep my room tidy as a child because I was quite careless. For instance, I often left toys and clothes on the floor, which made the room messy.

제안: Give a clear structure: state a method, then give a specific example and mention a result. Use correct phrasing (e.g., “where my things are placed”, “bookshelf(s)”) and avoid contradictions without explanation.

예시: I try to keep my study area tidy by assigning a place for each item, such as keeping books on a bookshelf and pens in a cup. However, I sometimes fail to follow this routine when I am busy, which leads to clutter.

제안: Begin with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons linked logically. Use more natural phrases (e.g., “help me find things quickly”, “good habit”). Aim for varied vocabulary and correct repetitions.

예시: Yes, I think being tidy is important because it helps me find things quickly and reduces stress. For example, when I keep my notes and supplies organised, I save time when studying and feel more focused.

× So my desk and bed is so dirty dirty.

✓ So my desk and bed are very messy.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'desk and bed' is a compound subject (plural) so the verb must be 'are' not 'is'. Also 'dirty dirty' is informal repetition; use 'very messy' for clarity.

× I always think I will tidy up.

✓ I always think I will tidy up.

No grammatical change needed for modal use; sentence is acceptable. (Included for completeness; fits allowed types.)

× No I can't.

✓ No, I couldn't.

The question asks about past habit ('Did you use to... as a child?'), so respond in the past. Use 'couldn't' to indicate inability in the past rather than 'can't' (present).

× As I mentioned earlier, umm not good at cleaning so my room is very dizzy and dirty.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I was not good at cleaning, so my room was very messy and dirty.

Missing subject and wrong tense: include subject 'I' and use past tense 'was' to match reference to childhood. 'Dizzy' is incorrect adjective for a room; use 'messy' or 'untidy'.

× It is my.

✓ It is mine.

Pronoun error and incomplete phrase: 'my' is a possessive adjective and needs a noun; use the pronoun 'mine' to stand alone. Also context unclear; 'It was mine' could be past if referring to childhood, but 'It is mine' is acceptable if speaking presently.

× I like to make my own rules where my things will place.

✓ I like to make my own rules about where my things will be placed.

Missing preposition 'about' and incorrect verb form/order: 'will place' is incorrect; use passive 'will be placed' or active 'I will place my things'.

× For example, umm, I'd like to place my book in my bookshelves, but I can't follow them.

✓ For example, I'd like to put my books on my bookshelf, but I can't stick to that rule.

Use 'put' rather than 'place' for natural speech. 'Bookshelves' plural conflicts with 'my book' singular; make number consistent: 'books' and 'bookshelf' or 'bookshelves'. 'Can't follow them' is vague; 'can't stick to that rule' clarifies failing to follow the rule.

× I think it it is necessary mainly because it can help me to find my things where placed.

✓ I think it is necessary mainly because it can help me find my things where they are placed.

Typo 'it it' duplication; remove extra 'it'. Also word order: 'help me find' is correct, and include pronoun 'they' in 'where they are placed' for clarity.

× It is very good habit I think.

✓ I think it is a very good habit.

Article and word order issue: add article 'a' before 'very good habit' and place 'I think' at start or end; natural order is 'I think it is a very good habit.'