Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific reason and an example. Avoid filler words like 'so yeah' and repetitive adjectives. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I like to keep things tidy because it helps me find things quickly and reduces stress. For example, I always label my folders and put my keys in the same bowl so I don't waste time looking for them.

제안: Answer directly and correct grammar. Use past habits with 'used to' or 'when I was a child' and contrast with the present using a linking word like 'but' or 'however'. Add a brief specific detail to support your statement.

예시: I didn't really keep my room tidy when I was a child; I used to leave toys everywhere. However, now as a teenager I clean up every evening and put toys and books away.

제안: Use clear sequence and accurate vocabulary. Give a short topic sentence, then list 2–3 specific actions with linking words (first, then, finally). Correct word forms (make the bed, clean the carpet(s), equipment). Avoid repeating words.

예시: I keep my study space tidy by following a routine. First, I make my bed and tidy the carpet; then I organize my desk, putting pens and notebooks in drawers. Finally, I store textbooks on a shelf so my workspace stays clear.

제안: State a clear opinion and give two specific reasons with smooth linking. Avoid fillers (uh) and vague words like 'cheap' used incorrectly. Use more natural phrasing: tidy helps concentration and comfort. Provide a short example or result.

예시: Yes, I think being tidy is necessary because it improves concentration and creates a comfortable environment. For instance, when my desk is neat I can study for longer without distractions and finish tasks more quickly.

× Yes, I like to keep things tidy as it is very convenient and it makes me feel very relaxing, so yeah.

✓ Yes, I like to keep things tidy because it is very convenient and it makes me feel very relaxed.

The student used the adjective 'relaxing' to describe a feeling they experience. 'Relaxing' describes something that causes relaxation; the correct adjective to describe the person's state is 'relaxed'. Also 'as' in this context is better replaced by 'because' to show reason clearly.

× I don't remember if I had keep my room tidy when I was child, but today when I'm a young teenager I keep my room clean.

✓ I don't remember if I kept my room tidy when I was a child, but now as a young teenager I keep my room clean.

The phrase 'had keep' is an incorrect past perfect form; the simple past 'kept' is appropriate after 'I don't remember if'. Also 'when I was child' needs the article 'a'. 'Today when I'm a young teenager' is awkward; 'now as a young teenager' fits the present situation better.

× First of all I wake up in the morning and tight my bed and my mom comes and clean the carpets and I organize my study and workplace at the corner of my room so it will be more tidy and I I put the work or reading equipments in their proper places.

✓ First of all I wake up in the morning and make my bed, and my mom comes and cleans the carpets. I organize my study and set up my workplace in the corner of my room so it will be tidier, and I put my work and reading equipment in their proper places.

Multiple present-tense verb forms were incorrect: 'tight my bed' should be 'make my bed'; 'comes and clean' needs subject-verb agreement 'comes and cleans'; 'workplace at the corner' -> 'in the corner'; 'tidy' as comparative should be 'tidier' to compare; 'equipments' is noncount and should be 'equipment'; repeated 'I I' removed. These changes correct verb forms and noun usage for present tense narration.

× Yes, I do think that it is necessary to be tidy because being tidy doesn't mean you are being cheap.

✓ Yes, I do think that it is necessary to be tidy because being tidy doesn't mean you are untidy.

The original sentence used 'cheap' which is a word-choice error rather than subject-verb agreement; however the structure 'being tidy doesn't mean you are being cheap' is likely intended to contrast tidy with messy. To preserve grammar categories, a clearer correction replaces 'cheap' with 'untidy' or 'messy'. If the intended meaning was different, choose a more precise adjective. Subject-verb agreement in 'doesn't mean' is correct, so main issue was word choice.

× It means you are being uh, uh, concentrated, focused, uh, and relaxing and convenient, uh, at your own personal clean space.

✓ It means you are concentrated, focused, relaxed, and comfortable in your own clean personal space.

Several words were misused: 'concentrated' is acceptable but 'being concentrated' is less natural than 'concentrated'; 'relaxing' should be 'relaxed' to describe a state; 'convenient' is wrong for a person — 'comfortable' is appropriate. Word order 'clean personal space' is more natural than 'personal clean space'. Filler 'uh' removed for clarity.