Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear, use correct vocabulary, and produce a concise topic sentence followed by one or two specific reasons linked with connectors. Avoid unclear words (e.g., "kiss my room", "identity") and grammatical errors.

예시: Yes, I do. I like to keep my room and study area tidy because a clean space helps me focus and feel more comfortable. For example, when my desk is organized I can find my books quickly and concentrate on my work.

제안: Answer directly with past tense and give a specific reason and brief example. Use correct verbs and avoid unclear phrases (e.g., "pay swan"). Keep it to one topic sentence and one supporting detail with a linking word.

예시: Not really. When I was a child my room was often messy because I preferred playing to tidying up, so toys were usually left on the floor. For instance, I would spend hours building models and forget to put them away.

제안: Start with a clear present-tense topic sentence describing your routine, then add one or two specific actions with linking words. Use correct nouns and verbs (e.g., "books", "clean my desk") and avoid run-on phrases.

예시: I usually keep my study space tidy by arranging my books and clearing my desk every day. For example, I file important papers, recycle unwanted sheets, and wipe the surface each evening so I can start fresh the next morning.

제안: Give a direct opinion statement followed by two clear reasons connected with linking words (e.g., "because", "also"). Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "tidy", "save time", "reduce stress") and correct grammar.

예시: Yes, I do. Being tidy saves time because it's easier to find things when you need them, and it also reduces stress by creating a calm environment. For example, I rarely lose important papers when my files are organized.

× Yes I do, I like to kiss my room and study identity because it's a Korean environment. Help me focus better and feel more comfortable.

✓ Yes, I do. I like to keep my room and study area tidy because I study in a Korean environment. It helps me focus better and feel more comfortable.

The student used incorrect verbs and word choices: 'kiss my room' and 'study identity' are incorrect and unclear. This is a sentence structure error (26) and verb choice error related to present tense use (6). 'Keep' is the correct verb for maintaining tidiness; 'study area' is a clearer noun phrase. Also two independent thoughts need proper sentence separation and a subject for the second clause. Suggestion: use simple, common collocations (keep a room tidy, study area) and split into clear sentences. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I'm not really. When I was a child my room was often messy because I like to pay swan and didn't pay much attention to cleaning.

✓ Not really. When I was a child, my room was often messy because I liked to play and didn't pay much attention to cleaning.

The original uses 'I'm not really' which mismatches the question asking about past habit; 'Not really' or 'I didn't' is more appropriate. 'Like to pay swan' is incorrect word choice; intended meaning is 'liked to play'. Verb tense should be past ('liked') to match 'When I was a child.' This involves present tense misuse (6) and past tense issue (5) plus sentence structure (26). Suggestion: ensure verbs describing past habits use past tense and choose correct verbs ('play' not 'pay swan'). Grammar_problem_type_id:5

× I usually arrange my book and cleaning my leg every day so throw every away unnecessary paper to keep the early need.

✓ I usually arrange my books and clean my desk every day, so I throw away unnecessary papers to keep the area neat.

Multiple errors: 'arrange my book' needs plural 'books' (singular/plural issue 1), 'cleaning my leg' is incorrect body part and verb form—should be 'clean my desk' (verb form 8/10 and word choice), 'throw every away unnecessary paper' has wrong word order and articles—correct is 'throw away unnecessary papers', and 'to keep the early need' is unintelligible; intended 'to keep the area neat.' These are subject-verb and noun number errors (1,27), verb form errors (8/9/10), and preposition/article order issues (11,22). Suggestion: use simple subject-verb structures, correct pluralization, correct collocations (clean my desk; throw away papers; area neat). Grammar_problem_type_id:1

× Yes I do uh being pretty can save time because it easier to file thing that you want in that time and I think is can also reduce this.

✓ Yes, I do. Being tidy can save time because it is easier to find the things you want, and I think it can also reduce stress.

Errors include 'being pretty' which is wrong word choice; should be 'being tidy' (adjective misuse 13). Missing 'it' in 'because it easier' requires 'it is' (verb 'to be' issue 3/6). 'file thing' should be 'find the things' (word choice and article/number errors 22,1). 'I think is can also reduce this' has wrong word order and pronoun; correct 'I think it can also reduce stress' (pronoun 12 and sentence structure 26). Suggestion: choose correct adjectives, include necessary pronouns and auxiliary verbs, and specify the noun 'stress' rather than 'this'. Grammar_problem_type_id:13