Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장 구조와 문법을 명확히 하세요. 현재 답변은 아이디어는 있으나 문법 오류(예: 'clean the my bedding')와 불필요한 중복('I wake up in the morning'은 질문에 직접 관련이 적음), 그리고 맺음말의 망설임('Ah')이 있습니다. 주제 문장으로 직접 답하고, 하나 또는 두 개의 구체적 행동을 연결어로 자연스럽게 덧붙이세요. 예문은 3문장 이내로 간결하게 유지하세요.

예시: Yes, I do. I usually make my bed and open the window every morning to freshen the room. Doing these small tasks helps me start the day feeling organized.

제안: 과거 습관을 묻는 질문에는 과거 시제를 정확히 사용하세요. 단문으로 직접 답한 뒤, 왜 그랬는지 구체적 이유나 한 예를 덧붙이세요. 현재 문장에는 문법 오류('I was a children I'), 어순 문제, 문장이 미완성된 부분이 있습니다. 연결어(for example, because)를 사용해 논리를 강화하세요.

예시: No, I didn't. When I was a child I was quite messy and left toys everywhere because I was more interested in playing than tidying up. For example, my room was often covered with books and clothes.

제안: 행동을 설명할 때는 구체적인 방법과 빈도(when/how often)를 포함하세요. 현재 답변은 반복과 어순 오류('I place I put in place')로 이해하기 어렵습니다. 연결어(so, then, after)를 사용해 절차를 명확히 하고, 2~3개의 간결한 문장으로 정리하세요.

예시: I usually organize my desk at the end of each day. I put books on the shelf and keep only my laptop and notebook on the desk so I can focus better the next morning.

제안: 의견을 제시할 때는 이유와 결과를 정확한 문장으로 연결하세요. 현재 문장에는 문법 오류('I think be tidy as necessary', 'if I can not tidy my room is very rude')와 모호한 표현('rude'가 부적절) 이 있습니다. 더 나은 단어 선택(untidy, disrespectful 등)과 결과 설명을 논리적으로 연결하세요.

예시: Yes, I do. I think being tidy is important because a messy room distracts me and makes me feel stressed. For example, when my desk is cluttered I find it hard to concentrate.

× Yes, I like to keep things tidy so I wake up in the morning, I clean the my bedding and open the window. Ah.

✓ Yes, I like to keep things tidy, so when I wake up in the morning I clean my bedding and open the window.

The definite article 'the' before 'my bedding' is incorrect because possessive pronouns (my) do not take an article; remove 'the'. Also the sentence was a comma splice and slightly awkward: add 'when' to link waking up to the actions and remove the extra comma to make a single coherent sentence. Suggestions: remove the extra article before possessive pronouns and use conjunctions like 'when' to join time clauses properly.

× Actually, no. I was a children I.

✓ Actually, no. I was a child.

'Children' is the plural form; the speaker refers to themselves as one person, so the singular 'child' is required. Also the extra 'I' is unnecessary and ungrammatical. Suggestion: use singular nouns when referring to one person and avoid redundant pronouns.

× I put things everywhere not tidy.

✓ I put things everywhere and it was not tidy.

The original sentence lacks a proper connector and verb agreement, making it ungrammatical. Adding 'and it was' creates a complete clause and clarifies that the state was untidy. Suggestion: connect ideas with conjunctions and include a verb to describe the state.

× My mom is very.

✓ My mom is very strict.

The sentence ends with an incomplete predication; 'very' must modify an adjective or adverb. Provide a suitable adjective (for example, 'strict' or 'neat') to complete the meaning. Suggestion: always follow 'very' with an adjective to complete the thought.

× I tend to keep things I place I put in place. At that time.

✓ I tend to keep things in their place.

The original contains redundant fragments ('I place I put in place') and an unrelated fragment 'At that time.' The corrected sentence is concise and grammatical. Suggestion: remove redundancy and fragments; use fixed expressions like 'in their place.' If 'At that time' is needed, specify the time reference clearly.

× Yes, I think be tidy as necessary because if I can not tidy my room is very rude.

✓ Yes, I think being tidy is necessary because if I cannot tidy my room it is very messy.

The verb 'be' after 'think' should be in the -ing form 'being' when used as a noun phrase ('think being tidy is necessary'). 'Can not' is normally written as 'cannot'. Also 'rude' is the wrong adjective for a room; 'messy' or 'untidy' fits better. Suggestion: use 'being' to turn verbs into noun phrases and choose appropriate adjectives.

× It is make me feel depressed.

✓ It makes me feel depressed.

Subject-verb agreement and verb form are incorrect: use the third-person singular present 'makes' with subject 'It'. 'Make' should be inflected to 'makes'. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with their subjects in number and person.