Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and natural but slightly wordy and repetitive (organize/organized/tidy). Make your response more concise, start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Vary vocabulary (e.g. arrange, neat) and avoid repeating the same idea.

예시: Yes, I like to keep things tidy. I usually spend an hour each weekend arranging my clothes and books so everything has a place; this helps me find things quickly and makes the house pleasant when guests visit.

제안: The response is understandable but has grammatical errors (tense and structure) and repeats the same idea. Use past tense for past habits, give a short topic sentence, then add a specific reason or brief example. Replace casual words like 'lazy' with a softer phrase and vary phrasing.

예시: Not really — I wasn't very tidy as a child. My mother usually tidied my room for me, so I got used to leaving things out rather than putting them away.

제안: Good specific actions, but the answer is short and could be improved by clearer sequencing and linking words. Start with a topic sentence, then use linking words (first, then, finally) to show steps and add a brief reason or result to enrich the answer.

예시: I keep my study space tidy by removing distractions first; for example, I put toys and unrelated items away before I start working. Then I wipe the desk and empty the trash once a week so the area stays clean and focused.

제안: Your answer communicates the main idea and gives a reason, but it is slightly repetitive and some phrasing is informal. Give a clear topic sentence, use linking words to present reasons, and add a brief example or consequence. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g. unhygienic, harbour pests).

예시: Yes, I think being tidy is important because it helps keep spaces hygienic. For instance, a messy kitchen can harbour pests and bacteria, so regular cleaning and tidying reduces health risks and makes the home more pleasant.

× I do keep my things tidy.

✓ I keep my things tidy.

Using 'do' for emphasis is unnecessary in a simple present statement and can sound awkward; use the simple present 'I keep' to state a habitual action.

× I often organize my things once a week to keep it organized because I don't like it to look messy.

✓ I often organize my things once a week to keep them organized because I don't like them to look messy.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'my things' (plural). Replace 'it' with the plural pronoun 'them' to match the noun in number.

× In case there are some friends or visitors coming to our house, it would be good for them to see.

✓ If some friends or visitors are coming to our house, it would be good for them to see it tidy.

'In case' is less appropriate here; 'if' expresses the conditional more naturally. Also clarify what 'see' refers to by adding 'it tidy' so the sentence is complete and clear.

× I don't keep my room tidy as a child because I'm too lazy to organize my things and keep them neat and usually my mom will do it for me so I don't keep my room tidy.

✓ I didn't keep my room tidy as a child because I was too lazy to organize my things and keep them neat, and usually my mom would do it for me.

The time frame is past ('as a child'), so use past tense verbs ('didn't keep', 'was', 'would do') instead of present tense. Also remove the repeated clause at the end to avoid redundancy.

× I organize away the toys in case I'm distracted and then I clean up the trash once a week.

✓ I put the toys away if I'm likely to be distracted, and then I clean up the trash once a week.

'Organize away' is not idiomatic; use 'put the toys away'. Also 'in case I'm distracted' can be more naturally expressed as 'if I'm likely to be distracted'. Maintain correct verb forms and clearer phrasing.

× I think it is necessary because it's not only about tidy, it's also about how clean it is.

✓ I think it is necessary because it's not only about being tidy; it's also about how clean the place is.

'About tidy' is incorrect; use the gerund 'being tidy'. Also clarify the noun referred to by 'it' by saying 'the place' and fix punctuation to separate the two related ideas.

× Because usually if it's messy it's not very clean.

✓ Usually, if a place is messy, it's not very clean.

Starting with 'Because' as a sentence fragment is informal and awkward. Make a full sentence and specify the noun 'a place' to clarify the subject.

× Like it's easy to have some bugs hiding in it, so it would also be clean and sanitized when you tidy it up.

✓ For example, it's easy for bugs to hide in a messy place, so it becomes cleaner and more sanitary when you tidy it up.

'Like' is colloquial; 'for example' or 'for instance' is more appropriate. 'Some bugs hiding in it' is awkward—use 'bugs to hide in a messy place'. 'Clean and sanitized' is improved to 'cleaner and more sanitary' to compare states properly and maintain parallel structure.