Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more natural and fluent by removing fragments and using one clear reason with a linking phrase. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid short sentence fragments. For example, combine ideas: state you like to keep things tidy, give one reason and a brief supporting detail using a linking word like “because” or “so”.

예시: Yes, I do. I always keep my room and my office desk tidy because a clear space helps me feel comfortable and less distracted. As a result, I can focus better when I study or work.

제안: Avoid grammar errors and sentence fragments. Use past tense consistently and correct word forms. Provide one concise reason and a short supporting detail using linking words like “because” or “so”.

예시: Yes, I did. My mother and I enjoyed cleaning together, so our house was always neat when I was a child. This routine taught me to be organized from an early age.

제안: This answer is clear and specific but can be improved by using linking words to show sequence and by using singular/plural consistently. Keep it concise and natural (avoid repetition).

예시: I tidy my room and office every day: I file documents and put books on the shelves, then I wipe the desk surface to remove dust. Doing this daily keeps my workspace organised and ready for work.

제안: Avoid sentence fragments and use natural collocations (e.g., “concentrate on” or “focus on”). Give one clear reason and a brief result using a linking word like “because” or “so”.

예시: Yes, I do. Being tidy is necessary for me because it makes me feel comfortable and helps me concentrate on studying and working. As a result, I am more productive and less stressed.

× Yes I do. I always clean my room and my office's desk because. Clear space makes me feel comfortable.

✓ Yes, I do. I always clean my room and my office desk because clear space makes me feel comfortable.

The original contains a sentence fragment 'because.' followed by 'Clear space...' which breaks sentence structure (ID 26). Remove the period after 'because' and combine into one sentence or rephrase. Also "office's desk" is awkward possessive; use 'office desk' for natural noun phrase. Add commas where needed for fluency.

× Yes I did because my mother and I like to clean so my ho house is always. Cleaned.

✓ Yes, I did because my mother and I liked to clean, so my house was always clean.

Multiple issues: sentence fragment 'Cleaned.' separated incorrectly (ID 26) and wrong tense/verb forms. Student used present 'like' with past 'did' (tense inconsistency - ID 5 and 6). Change 'like' to 'liked' to match past time. 'ho house' is a typo; use 'house'. 'was always clean' is correct adjective order instead of 'cleaned' (past participle used incorrectly as adjective, ID 9). Also add a comma before 'so' to join clauses.

× I put my documents and books into the shelves and I wipe my desks.

✓ I put my documents and books on the shelves and I wipe my desk.

Use 'on the shelves' not 'into the shelves' for placing items onto shelves (ID 11). 'desks' should be singular 'desk' to match 'my' (subject has one desk in context) and common collocation is 'wipe my desk' (ID 1/27). Also 'wipe' is fine but ensure subject-verb agreement; 'I wipe' is correct.

× Do you think that it is necessary to be tidy?

✓ Do you think that it is necessary to be tidy?

This sentence is correct; no change needed. It matches grammar and article usage (ID 17). Returning it to indicate no error.

× Yes, I do. It is necessary for me to be tidy because. I can feel comfortable and concentrate to study and work.

✓ Yes, I do. It is necessary for me to be tidy because I can feel comfortable and concentrate on studying and working.

The original has a sentence fragment 'because.' separated from the result clause (ID 26). Combine clauses properly. Also 'concentrate to study and work' is incorrect collocation; use 'concentrate on studying and working' (verb + -ing after 'concentrate on' — ID 8 and 10). This fixes preposition and verb form usage.