Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is natural, concise and directly addresses the question. To improve further, vary sentence openings and add one specific example of a tidy habit to make the response more vivid. Also avoid repeating similar ideas (relaxed and focused are close in meaning) to maximise efficiency.

예시: Yes, I enjoy keeping things tidy because clutter distracts me. For example, every evening I spend ten minutes putting books back on shelves and wiping surfaces so the living room looks bright and welcoming.

제안: The content is relevant but delivery is disfluent and has grammatical errors (e.g., 'shared them', repetition, tense inconsistency). Improve by forming a clear topic sentence, correcting pronouns and tense, and adding a brief specific detail about chores. Keep it to two to three well-linked sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was a child I shared a room with my sister, so we always kept it tidy by making the bed and putting away our toys each evening, which made the room pleasant to sleep in.

제안: Your answer gives useful detail but contains repetition ('labeled labeled'), grammar errors (subject-verb agreement) and awkward phrasing. Improve by correcting mistakes, using linking words, and giving one clear method with a short result statement.

예시: I keep my study area tidy by storing papers in clearly labeled folders and placing them in a filing cabinet beside my desk. As a result, I can quickly find any document and the desk stays clutter-free.

제안: Good clear opinion and reason. To improve, tighten the sentence structure (avoid redundancy like 'germs and illnesses' and 'health risks') and add a brief linking phrase to strengthen coherence. One concise supporting example would help.

예시: Yes, I believe tidiness is important, particularly in households with young children, because regular cleaning reduces the spread of germs and lowers the risk of illness. For instance, wiping toys and surfaces weekly helps keep children healthier.

× Yes, when I was young I shared them with my sister.

✓ Yes, when I was young I shared a room with my sister.

The original sentence uses the pronoun 'them' without a clear plural antecedent and the context refers to a single room. This is an incorrect use of pronouns (type 12). Replace 'them' with the explicit noun 'a room' to match meaning and ensure clarity.

× So we, I, I kept, we always kept it neat.

✓ So we always kept it neat.

The original contains disfluent repetitions and the pronoun 'we' requires the plural verb form 'kept', which is correct, but the extra 'I' inserts confusion. This is a subject-verb agreement/ sentence structure issue (type 27 and 26). Remove the repetitions so the sentence is clear and grammatically correct.

× Every day we cleaned up, made the bed and put our toys away, which makes it more comfortable and pleasant to sleep in.

✓ Every day we cleaned up, made the bed, and put our toys away, which made it more comfortable and pleasant to sleep in.

The main clause is in the past tense ('cleaned', 'made', 'put'), so the relative clause should also be in the past tense for consistency. Using present tense 'makes' is a tense mismatch (type 6 Present tense issue). Change 'makes' to 'made' to match the past context.

× I usually organize my books and documents on labeled labeled filing cabinets in my bookcase.

✓ I usually organize my books and documents in labeled filing cabinets in my bookcase.

The preposition 'on' is awkward with 'filing cabinets' and there is a duplicated word 'labeled labeled'. This is primarily an article/preposition and redundancy problem (type 11 and 22). Use 'in' for storage inside cabinets and remove the repeated word. The corrected sentence reads naturally and is grammatically correct.

× This make it easy to find a document and when I need and helps me study space tight and clutter free.

✓ This makes it easy to find a document when I need one and helps keep my study space tight and clutter-free.

The verb should agree with the singular subject 'This', so 'make' should be 'makes' (type 27). The original also has missing words and awkward phrasing ('when I need' needs an object; 'helps me study space tight' is ungrammatical). Add 'one' after 'need', change 'helps me study space tight' to 'helps keep my study space tight', and hyphenate 'clutter-free' for clarity. These changes fix subject-verb agreement, missing object, and word order issues.

× I think it is important to keep things tidy, especially in homes with young children, because a messy environment can encourage germs and illnesses, so regular cleaning can reduce the health risks and keeps children safer.

✓ I think it is important to keep things tidy, especially in homes with young children, because a messy environment can encourage germs and illnesses, so regular cleaning can reduce the health risks and keep children safer.

The clause 'regular cleaning can reduce the health risks and keeps children safer' mixes modal construction with a nonparallel verb form. After 'can', verbs should be in base form, so 'keeps' should be 'keep' (type 6/27: present tense and subject-verb agreement). Change 'keeps' to 'keep' to maintain parallel structure and correct verb form after the modal 'can'.