Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and natural, avoid self-diagnosis (e.g., "OCD") and redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct minor grammar and word order (e.g., "first" placement).

예시: Yes, I like to keep things tidy. For example, every morning I straighten my bedroom first, put away clothes and make the bed, and then I brush my teeth. This routine helps me feel calm and ready for the day.

제안: Answer directly, avoid fillers, and provide a specific reason and brief example. Use past tense consistently and a linking word to connect explanation.

예시: No, I didn't. When I was a child I didn't understand why tidiness mattered, so my mother usually cleaned my room for me. As a result, I only started tidying up regularly in my teens.

제안: Good structure and specific actions—improve coherence by using linking words and correct word choice ("calmly" → "calm"). Keep sentences concise and avoid repetition.

예시: Keeping my workspace tidy is a daily habit. I file loose papers into labeled folders and wipe the desk before I leave, so I can start the next day feeling focused and calm.

제안: State your opinion clearly, then give a specific reason and a concise example. Fix grammar and phrasing ("no one wants", "organize things") and avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes, I think it's necessary. For instance, I often host sleepovers, and I prefer a tidy room because guests are more comfortable. Therefore I organize things before visitors arrive so everyone can relax.

× To be honest I am an OCD person so if I am seeing something untidy I would be very frustrated and feel very uncomfortable about it.

✓ To be honest I am an OCD person so if I see something untidy I am very frustrated and feel very uncomfortable about it.

The clause 'if I am seeing something untidy' incorrectly uses the progressive form after if for a general conditional. For general or habitual conditions use the simple present 'if I see'. Also, use consistent tense in the result clause: 'I am very frustrated' fits the present. Suggestion: use simple present for real/habitual conditionals (if + simple present).

× And actually my daily routine before I wake up is to tidy all of my bedroom 1st and then I will go to brush my teeth after that.

✓ And actually my daily routine before I wake up is to tidy my whole bedroom first and then I brush my teeth.

Errors: 'all of my bedroom' is ungrammatical — use 'my whole bedroom' or 'the whole bedroom'; '1st' should be written as 'first'; 'I will go to brush my teeth' is awkward and mixes future with habitual routine. For habitual actions use simple present 'I brush my teeth'. Suggestion: use correct articles/quantifiers ('my whole bedroom') and simple present for routines.

× No, not really. So since I was a kid, I didn't realise the importance of keeping the room tidy so my mom would be a person who did that, uh, for me instead.

✓ No, not really. Since I was a kid, I didn't realise the importance of keeping my room tidy, so my mom did that for me instead.

Problems: 'since I was a kid' with past simple 'didn't realise' is fine; 'keeping the room tidy' is non-specific — use 'my room'; 'my mom would be a person who did that' is wordy and misuses conditional/modal 'would' when simple past 'did' describes past habitual action. Suggestion: use 'did' for past habitual facts and simplify phrasing.

× To be honest, keeping my workspace tidy is just a daily habit.

✓ To be honest, keeping my workspace tidy is just a daily habit.

This sentence is correct. 'Keeping' as a gerund correctly functions as the subject; no change needed. Included for completeness.

× I always clear any papers and put them in folders and quickly wipe my desk before I leave so I can start fresh the next day and stay more focused and calmly.

✓ I always clear any papers and put them in folders and quickly wipe my desk before I leave so I can start fresh the next day and stay more focused and calm.

Error: 'calmly' is an adverb, but after 'stay' we need an adjective describing a state: 'calm'. Using 'calmly' would describe how someone does an action, not their state. Suggestion: use adjectives after linking verbs like 'stay' (stay calm).

× Yes, I like to keep my room tidy because I often invite friends for a sleepover and no one's want to sleep in a messy place.

✓ Yes, I like to keep my room tidy because I often invite friends for a sleepover and no one wants to sleep in a messy place.

Error: 'no one's want' mixes contraction 'no one's' (no one is or no one has) with plural verb 'want'. The correct subject is 'no one' (singular) with verb 'wants'. Suggestion: use 'no one wants' for general statements about people.

× So it's really crucial for me to be tidy and organize everything in order so me and my friends can feel relaxed.

✓ So it's really crucial for me to be tidy and organize everything so my friends and I can feel relaxed.

Problems: 'in order' is redundant with 'organize everything' and sounds awkward; pronoun order and form 'me and my friends' is ungrammatical in subject position — use 'my friends and I'. Suggestion: remove redundancy and use correct subject pronoun order and form.