Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and correct unnatural phrases (e.g., “minimize my possessions” not “positions”). Use one or two supporting reasons with linking words.

예시: Yes, I do. I prefer keeping my home tidy because I don’t want to spend a lot of time cleaning. For example, I minimize my possessions so I can maintain a simple but comfortable living space.

제안: Provide a complete, fluent response with correct verb forms and finish your thought. Use linking words to describe frequency and actions (e.g., “however,” “then”), and avoid fillers like “uh.” Give a short specific example of what you did.

예시: Yes, I did. I usually kept my room tidy, but sometimes toys piled up. When that happened, I would sort everything into boxes and put items back on the shelves, so my room was tidy again within an hour.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence about your method, then give specific steps and use linking words (e.g., “first,” “because,” “therefore”). Avoid repeating the same idea and use precise vocabulary (e.g., “declutter,” “maintain”).

예시: I keep my study space tidy by regularly decluttering. First, I limit what I keep on my desk to essentials like my laptop and a notebook; then I put everything away at the end of each day, so my workspace stays neat and ready.

제안: Give a clear, complete opinion with reasons and avoid unfinished sentences and fillers. Use linking words (e.g., “because,” “therefore”) and provide a brief example or result of being tidy.

예시: Yes, I think being tidy is necessary because it helps you work more efficiently. For example, when my desk is organized I can quickly find my keys or notebook, so I waste less time and feel less stressed.

× Obviously I hate to own so many things just because I don't want to spend too much time cleaning up or tidying up stuff.

✓ Obviously I hate owning so many things because I don't want to spend too much time cleaning or tidying up.

The verb 'hate' should be followed by a gerund when describing a general dislike of an action (hate + -ing), not an infinitive here; 'to own' is grammatically possible but 'hate owning' is more natural in this context. Also 'just because' is wordy; removing 'just' tightens the sentence. 'Cleaning up or tidying up stuff' is awkward: use 'cleaning or tidying up' and avoid 'stuff'. Suggestion: use gerund after 'hate' and simplify redundant words.

× I want to minimize my positions that I will have a simple but comfortable.

✓ I want to minimize my possessions so that I will have a simple but comfortable life.

The original has wrong word choice ('positions' instead of 'possessions') and incomplete sentence structure ('that I will have a simple but comfortable' lacks a noun). This is a sentence structure and vocabulary error. Correct by using 'possessions' and completing the clause with a noun (e.g., 'life') and a connecting phrase ('so that').

× Yes, I used to keep my room tidy when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I usually kept my room tidy when I was a child.

'Used to' is acceptable to express past habitual actions, but in spoken answers 'used to' is fine; however, to match simple past habitual more naturally use 'usually kept'. Either is grammatical; suggestion chooses 'usually kept' for clearer past-tense form. If keeping 'used to', ensure correct auxiliary: 'I used to keep my room tidy.' Both are acceptable; this correction clarifies tense.

× Sometimes things are piled up or uh, things flattered, but I reset by putting everything out, organized everything from scratch and eventually my room got.

✓ Sometimes things piled up or got scattered, but I reset the room by taking everything out, organizing everything from scratch, and eventually my room was tidy again.

Multiple issues: present tense 'are piled up' mixed with past narrative; 'flattered' is incorrect word choice (likely 'scattered'); 'reset by putting everything out' is awkward; sentence ends incomplete ('eventually my room got.'). Correct by making tense consistent, using correct verbs ('piled up', 'got scattered'), clearer phrasing ('taking everything out, organizing'), and completing final clause with 'was tidy again.'

× My mantra is if I cannot keep things organized or tidy, that means I own too many things.

✓ My mantra is: if I cannot keep things organized or tidy, it means I own too many things.

Using 'that means' after the conditional is awkward; 'it' is the appropriate dummy pronoun to refer to the situation. Also add a colon or comma for clarity. This fixes pronoun reference and improves naturalness.

× So the point is, I own fewer things compared to other people.

✓ So the point is, I own fewer things than other people.

When comparing quantities, use 'fewer... than', not 'compared to' in this context. 'Compared to' is not strictly wrong but 'fewer than' is the correct comparative structure for countable nouns.

× With that, I don't have to spend too much time on organizing or cleaning my desks and workspace.

✓ Because of that, I don't have to spend much time organizing or cleaning my desk and workspace.

'With that' is awkward; use 'Because of that'. 'Too much time on organizing' is non-idiomatic: say 'spend much time organizing'. 'Desks' should be singular 'desk' to match 'workspace' (likely single workspace). Also remove unnecessary 'on' before gerund.

× Yes, being tidy is uh, essential habit of being productive.

✓ Yes, being tidy is an essential habit for being productive.

The noun phrase needs an indefinite article 'an' before 'essential habit'. Also use 'for being productive' or 'to be productive' instead of 'of being productive'. This fixes article usage and preposition choice.

× I hate to spend too much time looking for items such as keys and notebooks, so it is very important for me to be.

✓ I hate spending too much time looking for items such as keys and notebooks, so being tidy is very important to me.

Again, use gerund after 'hate' ('hate spending'). The final clause is incomplete ('so it is very important for me to be'); supply the missing idea: 'being tidy is very important to me.' Also change 'for me to be' to 'to me' for natural phrasing.