Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は意図が伝わるが文法ミス、単語選択の誤り、語順の混乱が多く、流暢さと正確さを改善する必要があります。具体的には： 1) 主語と動詞の一致や時制を確認する（例："I like to keep things tidy."）。 2) 不適切な語やタイプミスを直す（"cream"→不要、"arrangement"→"organized"など）。 3) 文を簡潔にし、接続詞でつなげて自然な流れにする（例："However, when I'm tired I can't always clean up."）。 4) 最大5文に抑え、冗長な語を避ける。

예시: Yes, I like to keep things tidy. I always try to keep my room and office clean, but when I am tired I sometimes cannot clean up. As a result, my things can become disorganized. Still, I make an effort to tidy up regularly so I can feel more comfortable and focused.

제안: 回答は内容が分かるが、語順と冠詞、単語の繰り返しが目立ちます。改善点： 1) "when I was a child"のように冠詞を入れる。 2) 同じ意味の単語を繰り返さない（"momma, my mommy, my mother"は不自然）。"my mother"で十分です。 3) 理由をもう少し具体的に述べると良い（どんな点が母にとって散らかっているのか）。 4) 文を2〜3文にまとめ、接続詞でつなぐ。

예시: I tried to keep my room tidy when I was a child, but I didn't always succeed. My mother often complained because toys and clothes were left on the floor. Even though I made some effort, she still thought it was messy.

제안: 答えは意図が伝わりにくく、言い直しや不正確な動詞形が多いです。改善点： 1) 動詞を正しい形で使い、シンプルな語順にする（"I try to put my things away"）。 2) 具体的な方法（収納場所、定期的な掃除の頻度）を述べると説得力が増す。 3) 接続語で工程をつなぎ、文を論理的にする。

예시: I try to put my things away immediately after using them and keep my desk clear. I store papers in folders and use small boxes for stationery. I also vacuum and clean the area once a week to maintain a tidy workspace.

제안: 考えは伝わるが表現が不自然で冗長です。改善点： 1) 直接的なトピック文を使う（"Yes, I think being tidy is necessary."）。 2) 比喩や理由は簡潔に具体的に述べる（"a messy room distracts me and prevents concentration"）。 3) フィラー（uh, hiya）を避け、最大3文程度にまとめる。

예시: Yes, I think being tidy is necessary because a messy environment distracts me and makes it hard to concentrate. When my space is organized, I feel calmer and can work more effectively.

× Yes, I do like things tidy.

✓ Yes, I like to keep things tidy.

The original uses 'do like' unnecessarily; use simple present 'like' for habits. Also add 'to keep' to clarify the action. Suggestion: use 'I like to keep things tidy' for natural expression.

× I always try to keep cream my room on my office environment, but sometimes when I tired I cannot clean up.

✓ I always try to keep my room and my office environment clean, but sometimes when I am tired I cannot clean up.

Word order and prepositions are incorrect. 'Keep ... clean' is the correct collocation. 'Cream' is a typo for 'clean'. Use 'and' to join 'room' and 'office environment'. Use 'when I am tired' (present state) rather than 'when I tired'. Suggestion: practice collocations 'keep + object + adjective' and the correct form of 'be' with adjectives.

× Everything is not arrangement.

✓ Everything is not in order.

Incorrect noun phrase 'not arrangement' should be an idiomatic expression 'not in order' meaning not arranged. Use preposition 'in' with 'order'. Suggestion: learn common fixed expressions like 'in order' and 'in good condition'.

× I used to try to make my room tidy when I was child but I thought it was not enough because my momma, my mommy, my mother always complain about my room.

✓ I used to try to make my room tidy when I was a child, but I thought it was not enough because my mother always complained about my room.

Missing article 'a' before 'child'. 'Always complain' should be past 'complained' to match 'used to' and past context. Repetition of 'momma, my mommy, my mother' is unnecessary; use 'my mother'. Suggestion: match tense across clauses and include articles where required.

× It was messy to her.

✓ It was messy to her.

The sentence is grammatically acceptable but sounds unnatural; better: 'She thought it was messy' or 'It seemed messy to her'. Suggestion: rephrase perspective verbs for clarity. (No grammatical category from list strictly required besides style.)

× I put, I try to put my things, I went after, I used, I tried to replace the things and then I always use vacuum and clean up my room.

✓ I try to put my things away, I rearrange items when needed, and I always vacuum and clean my room.

The original is a run-on with incorrect verb forms ('went after', 'used') and word order. Use 'put ... away' for storing items, 'rearrange' for changing positions, and consistent present tense 'try' and 'always vacuum'. Suggestion: simplify sequences and use correct phrasal verbs.

× Yes, it's very important to make it tidy is necessary because uh, one is messy uh, in the room of my mind, I cannot be relaxed, I cannot be concentrated.

✓ Yes, it's very important to be tidy because when my room is messy, I cannot relax or concentrate.

Redundant phrases ('make it tidy is necessary') and awkward expressions ('room of my mind', 'cannot be concentrated'). Use 'be tidy' and 'relax'/'concentrate' as verbs. Also change 'one is messy' to 'when my room is messy' for clarity. Suggestion: avoid word-for-word translations and use natural English collocations.

× So that is important. Hiya.

✓ So that is important.

'Hiya' is an informal exclamation and inappropriate in this context; remove it. Suggestion: keep answers concise and relevant in a test situation.