Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は意図が伝わるが、文法ミス、語彙選択の誤り、冗長さが目立ちます。まず主語と動詞の一致（"keeping tidiness help" → "keeping things tidy helps"）を直してください。理由を述べる際は短く明確な主張（topic sentence）を言い、その後に1つか2つの具体例で補強しましょう。また同じ語（consideration, consider）を繰り返さず、relax, focus, concentrateのような適切な語を使ってください。文は5文以内に収め、接続詞（so, because, therefore）を使って論理的につなげてください。

예시: Yes, I like to keep things tidy because it helps me focus on my work. For example, every morning I clear my desk and organize my notes so I can start tasks without distraction. As a result, I feel more relaxed and productive.

제안: 答えは過去習慣を伝えているが、表現に多くの文法と語彙の誤りがあります（"keep the tightness"は不自然、"pick pick up"の繰り返し、冗長表現）。正しい過去の表現（"used to"）は良いが、具体的な行動や一つの例を明確に述べましょう。接続詞で文を整理し、不要な語を省いて1〜2の文にまとめてください。

예시: Yes, I used to keep my room tidy when I was a child because my parents taught me good habits. For example, I always put toys back in boxes and took out the trash every evening.

제안: 意図は伝わるが文法の誤り（"where they belongs"→"where they belong"）、語順の問題、語彙選択の不自然さがある（"personal computers inside the desks which"）。具体的な習慣を一貫した流れで述べ、情報を簡潔に整理してください。可能なら整理方法や道具（shelves, drawers, trays）を挙げるとより説得力が増します。

예시: I keep my workspace tidy by putting items back where they belong after using them. For example, I store my laptop in a drawer and place stationery in a desk organizer at the end of each day.

제안: 主張は明確だが、表現が不自然で意味が不明瞭な箇所があります（"create their head"は意味不明）。理由を述べる際は簡潔で正確な語を使い、具体的な効果（reduce stress, improve efficiency）を挙げてください。また接続詞で文をつなぎ、冗長な繰り返し（work, tidiness）を避けてください。

예시: Yes, I think being tidy is important because it reduces stress and helps people work more efficiently. When your environment is organized, you can find things quickly and concentrate better.

× Yes, I want to keep things tidy because keeping the tidiness help me consider my work.

✓ Yes, I want to keep things tidy because keeping things tidy helps me concentrate on my work.

The sentence uses incorrect noun phrase 'keeping the tidiness' and the verb does not agree with the subject: 'keeping things tidy' is a gerund phrase (singular) so the verb should be 'helps'. Also 'consider my work' is unnatural; 'concentrate on my work' or 'focus on my work' is correct. Improve by using natural collocations and ensuring subject-verb agreement. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× When I was a child, I used to keep my room really tidy because my parents told me how my room keep the tightness.

✓ When I was a child, I used to keep my room really tidy because my parents told me how to keep my room tidy.

The phrase 'how my room keep the tightness' is grammatically incorrect. 'Keep' should be in the infinitive 'to keep' after 'told me how', and 'tightness' is the wrong noun; use 'tidy'. Also subject-verb agreement error in original. Improve by using 'told me how to keep my room tidy'. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× For example, I was told the way we pick pick up the trash and the effective way or clean up.

✓ For example, I was taught the proper way to pick up trash and the most effective way to clean up.

Original has repetition 'pick pick', incorrect structure 'I was told the way we...' and 'or clean up' is wrong. Use passive 'I was taught' or active 'my parents taught me', then infinitive constructions 'the way to pick up' and 'the way to clean up'. Improve by using clear verbs and correct infinitive forms. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× To keep my workspace tidy, I usually put things where they belongs after using them.

✓ To keep my workspace tidy, I usually put things where they belong after using them.

Subject-verb agreement: 'they' is plural so the verb should be 'belong' not 'belongs'. Improve by matching plural pronouns with base verb form. Grammar problem type ID: 27

× For example, when I finish my work on that day, I put my personal computers inside the desks which.

✓ For example, when I finish my work for the day, I put my personal computer inside the desk.

There are issues with number and relative clause. 'Personal computers' vs 'personal computer' depends on context; singular is more natural. 'On that day' should be 'for the day'. 'Inside the desks which' is an incomplete relative clause; remove it. Improve by using concise, correct noun number and prepositional phrase. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× They are belonging.

✓ They belong.

Using 'belonging' is incorrect here; the stative verb 'belong' is used in simple present: 'They belong.' If referring to multiple items storing in desks, 'They belong there' or 'They belong in the desk' would be appropriate. Improve by using simple present for state verbs. Grammar problem type ID: 2

× Yes, definitely. It is very essential to be tidy because if people keep the tidiness, they can create their head and they can efficiently work on their work.

✓ Yes, definitely. It is essential to be tidy because if people keep things tidy, they can clear their minds and work more efficiently.

Several issues: 'keep the tidiness' is unnatural; use 'keep things tidy'. 'Create their head' is incorrect idiom; 'clear their minds' is natural. Word order 'work more efficiently' is correct instead of 'efficiently work on their work'. Improve by choosing idiomatic expressions and correct adverb placement and collocations. Grammar problem type ID: 10