Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and directly addresses the question, but it is slightly repetitive and has minor grammatical issues. Make the response more natural by using one clear statement and then adding a brief reason or example. Use correct phrase order (e.g., “where they belong”) and avoid repeating the idea twice.

예시: Yes, I like to keep things tidy because a clean environment helps me focus. For example, I always put my books back on the shelf and keep surfaces free of clutter so I can find things quickly.

제안: Good content showing background, but grammar and coherence need improvement. Avoid filler phrases like “like” and correct word order (e.g., “on the floor”). Provide one clear topic sentence then a concise supporting detail with a linking word.

예시: Yes, I did. My parents taught me to tidy my room when I was young, so I always put books on the shelf and hang my clothes in the wardrobe. Because of that habit, my room usually stayed organized.

제안: The answer attempts to explain methods but is unclear and grammatically weak. Organize your response: give a topic sentence, then specific steps using linking words (first, then, because). Use correct nouns (e.g., wardrobe) and simplify sentences to avoid confusion.

예시: I keep my study space tidy by putting books on a shelf and keeping pens in a holder so my desk stays free for my laptop. For my room, I store clothes in the wardrobe and put away miscellaneous items in labeled boxes.

제안: You answer the question but repeat “positive impact” and use vague phrasing (“like don't know”). Give a clear reason and a specific effect or example. Use linking words such as “because” and “for example.”

예시: Yes, I think being tidy is important because it reduces stress and helps you start the day positively. For example, when I wake up to a tidy room I feel calmer and more motivated to work.

× Yes, I would like to keep things tidy, neat and clean and where it belongs to. That's my habit.

✓ Yes, I like to keep things tidy, neat and clean and where they belong.

The preposition 'to' after 'belongs' is unnecessary and unidiomatic. Also 'it' should be 'they' to match the plural 'things'. Use simple present 'I like' rather than 'I would like' to state a habitual preference. Suggestion: remove 'to', change 'it' to 'they', and use 'like' for habits.

× Yes, from childhood my parents taught me to keep my room tidy.

✓ Yes, since childhood my parents taught me to keep my room tidy.

'From childhood' is understandable but 'since childhood' is more natural when referring to a starting point continuing to the present. The past verb 'taught' is correct because teaching happened in the past. Suggestion: use 'since childhood' for natural phrasing.

× Like if some books or anything clothes are at down the floor, it's my duty to keep its own place.

✓ For example, if books or clothes are on the floor, it is my duty to put them in their proper place.

Multiple issues: 'at down the floor' is incorrect preposition and adverb order; 'anything clothes' is ungrammatical; 'its own place' should be 'their proper place' to match plural. Rephrase for clarity: use 'on the floor', 'books or clothes', and 'put them in their proper place'.

× Both things I keep tidy if I save my study space, I usually keep my books and my pen holder on my study space because study space require more space to use laptop and do another thing.

✓ I keep both areas tidy. For my study space, I usually keep my books and my pen holder on the desk because the study area needs room for a laptop and other activities.

Sentence structure is confusing and tense/number errors occur: 'study space require' should be 'study area needs' (singular subject-verb agreement). 'Save my study space' is incorrect; use 'for my study space' or 'in my study area'. 'Do another thing' is awkward; use 'other activities'. Break into two sentences for clarity.

× And my room as I said I always keep my clothes in almirah and other use one.

✓ As I said, I always keep my clothes in the almirah and use other storage for other items.

The original has unclear structure and pronoun/reference errors: 'other use one' is meaningless. Clarify by specifying 'use other storage for other items'. Add commas to improve flow.

× Yes, it is very necessary to be tidy because it gives you positive impact in your mind.

✓ Yes, it is very important to be tidy because it has a positive effect on your mind.

'Necessary' is acceptable but 'important' is more natural here. 'Gives you positive impact in your mind' is unidiomatic: use 'has a positive effect on your mind'. 'Impact' is a noun that needs an article or to be replaced by 'effect'.

× When you wake up and your room is tidy, it gives you positive impact like don't know.

✓ When you wake up to a tidy room, it gives you a positive feeling and motivation.

'Positive impact like don't know' is ungrammatical and unclear. Replace with a clear outcome: 'a positive feeling and motivation'. Use 'wake up to a tidy room' for natural phrasing.