Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid vague endings. Also correct verb forms and pronouns (e.g., “helps me to be more productive” rather than “helps to make me become more”).

예시: Yes, I do. I tidy my bedroom every morning because a neat environment helps me feel more comfortable and focused. For example, having my books and stationery organized makes it quicker to start studying, so I waste less time searching for things.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and then a clear timeline with one specific detail. Fix tense and phrasing: use ‘I didn’t’ and ‘I became more aware’ and add a linking word (e.g., ‘However’ or ‘Later’). Keep it to two or three sentences.

예시: No, I didn’t keep my room tidy as a child. I wasn’t very aware of cleanliness then, but later in secondary school I learned good habits from my parents and began tidying regularly, especially before exam periods.

제안: Structure your answer with a clear list and linking words, and correct verb forms. Use present simple for routines (e.g., ‘I tidy,’ ‘I organize,’ ‘I throw away’). Be specific about categories and frequency to strengthen the response.

예시: I tidy my study space every morning. First, I put books and notes into labeled folders, and then I organize pens and chargers in a desk tray. If I find old papers or broken items, I throw them away to keep the area clutter-free.

제안: Answer directly and give one clear reason with an example. Correct grammar (e.g., ‘A tidy appearance makes you more approachable’). Avoid repetition and combine similar ideas into one sentence with linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’.

예시: Yes, I think being tidy is important because a neat appearance makes you more approachable and shows you care about personal hygiene. For instance, when I meet new classmates, a clean outfit and organized bag make a positive first impression.

× Yes I do. Every morning I always tidy up my bedroom and organize my things because I think that tidy environment helps you to feel more comfortable and also it helps to make me become more.

✓ Yes, I do. Every morning I tidy up my bedroom and organize my things because I think a tidy environment helps me feel more comfortable and also helps me become better.

Issues: unnecessary 'always' with 'every morning' is redundant; inconsistent pronoun 'you' vs 'me'; awkward phrase 'make me become more'. Use simple present for habitual actions and keep pronouns consistent. Suggested improvements: remove 'always', use 'a tidy environment', replace 'helps you to feel' with 'helps me feel', and change 'helps to make me become more' to 'helps me become better' or specify what 'more' refers to (e.g., more productive).

× No, I don't think so. At that time, I still did not have any awareness about keeping my room tied, keeping my room clean and tidy. But I think it changed when I was in my secondary school I started.

✓ No, I don't think so. At that time, I did not have any awareness about keeping my room tidy and clean. But I think it changed when I started secondary school.

Problems: wrong past tense construction 'I still did not have' is acceptable but word order and wording are awkward; 'tied' is incorrect word choice for 'tidy'; sentence 'when I was in my secondary school I started' is ungrammatical and redundant. Corrections: use 'tidy', combine 'tidy and clean', and reorder to 'when I started secondary school' for natural past reference. Use simple past 'did not have' and 'changed' appropriately.

× Well, first of all, every morning I would always tidy up things on my study space and also I I also organized my thing according to the right category and apart from that I throw away things that cannot be used.

✓ Well, first of all, every morning I tidy up my study space, and I also organize my things into the right categories; apart from that, I throw away things that cannot be used.

Issues: inconsistent tense (would always, organized, throw); duplicate 'I I also'; 'study space' phrasing and 'thing' singular instead of plural. Use consistent simple present for habitual actions: 'tidy up', 'organize', 'throw away'. Use plural 'things' and 'categories'. Remove duplicate words.

× Yes, I think so. Tidy appearance make you more approachable and also reflect on your cleanliness. And I think that by keeping a tidy appearance it is it is more nice to appear in front of other people.

✓ Yes, I think so. A tidy appearance makes you more approachable and also reflects your cleanliness. I also think that keeping a tidy appearance makes you look better in front of other people.

Errors: subject-verb agreement ('appearance make' should be 'appearance makes'); 'reflect on your cleanliness' is awkward—use 'reflects your cleanliness'; redundant phrase 'it is it is' and awkward 'more nice to appear' should be 'makes you look better'. Use 'makes' for third-person singular and streamline phrasing.