Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid redundant phrases and incorrect word choices (e.g. 'needy environment', 'lend me feel', 'OK shows').

예시: Yes, I like to keep things tidy because a neat environment helps me feel relaxed and concentrate better. For example, at my desk I always arrange my notes and pens in boxes so I can find them quickly when I study.

제안: This answer is generally clear and relevant. Improve by correcting small grammar errors and adding a linking phrase to make it more coherent. Use past tense consistently and avoid informal segments like 'guests are coming'—say 'when guests came'.

예시: No, I wasn't tidy as a child. I often threw my toys on the floor and my parents usually cleaned up. I only tidied my room when guests came because I didn’t mind the mess otherwise.

제안: Make your answer specific and correct vocabulary/phrasing. Use present simple for habits and clear linking words. Replace unclear phrases ('your Pacific place', 'networking area') with concrete descriptions (e.g. 'shelves', 'desk drawers', 'common area'). Keep to two or three sentences max.

예시: I keep my study space tidy by storing books on a shelf and keeping pens in a drawer so I can find them easily. I also clear away any rubbish at the end of the day and wipe my desk so the area stays organized.

제안: Give a direct opinion sentence followed by one or two clear reasons with correct grammar. Avoid vague or incorrect words ('atoms'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' and correct verb forms.

예시: Yes, I think being tidy is necessary because an organized workplace makes it easier to find things and reduces stress. As a result, I can focus better and be more productive.

× Yes, I like to keep things tidy because a needy environment can lend me feel relaxed and focus, especially my workplace and study next for another.

✓ Yes, I like to keep things tidy because a neat environment helps me feel relaxed and focused, especially my workplace and study area.

The sentence uses incorrect adjectives and verbs: 'needy' is wrong choice for describing environment; 'lend me feel' is ungrammatical phrase; 'focus' should be the adjective 'focused' or verb form 'focus better'. Replace 'needy' with 'neat', use 'helps me feel' for correct verb construction, and use 'focused' to describe mental state. Also 'study next for another' is unclear; change to 'study area'. Suggestion: choose appropriate adjectives, use 'helps me + base verb' or 'makes me + adjective'. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Moreover, OK shows a good habits and will organize items can let me find things easier.

✓ Moreover, being organized shows good habits and helps me find things more easily.

Errors include incorrect phrase 'OK shows a good habits', wrong article and plural agreement, and incorrect verb structure 'will organize items can let me'. Use 'being organized' as a noun phrase, 'good habits' without extra article, and 'helps me find things more easily' for correct verb and adverb form. 'Easier' should be 'more easily' when modifying the verb 'find'. Grammar problem type ID:13

× No, I didn't keep my room tidy when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't keep my room tidy when I was a child.

This sentence is grammatically correct for past tense negative, so no change is needed. It correctly uses past simple negative 'didn't keep' to describe habitual past behavior. Grammar problem type ID:5

× I was quite messy and often threw my toys all over the floor.

✓ I was quite messy and often threw my toys all over the floor.

This sentence is correct: it uses past simple 'was' and 'threw' to describe past habitual actions. No correction necessary. Grammar problem type ID:5

× My parents usually helped me to clean them and I only bothered to pick things up when the guests are coming.

✓ My parents usually helped me clean them, and I only bothered to pick things up when guests were coming.

Problems: unnecessary 'to' after 'helped me' (in English we commonly use 'help someone do something'), and tense inconsistency 'are coming' should be past progressive 'were coming' to match past context. Also omit 'the' before 'guests' when speaking generally. Suggestion: use 'helped me clean' and past progressive 'were coming'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× I keep my study place tidy by putting my items in your Pacific place so that I can find them easily.

✓ I keep my study place tidy by putting my items in specific places so that I can find them easily.

Errors: 'your' is the wrong pronoun; it should refer to the speaker's own belongings, so 'my' or rewrite as 'specific places'. 'Pacific' is likely a misspelling of 'specific'. Use plural 'places' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use correct pronoun ('my') and correct word 'specific'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Moreover, I also cleaned away the rubbish after long days of hard work and to maintain the networking area.

✓ Moreover, I also clear away the rubbish after long days of hard work and maintain the working area.

Problems: tense inconsistency and incorrect infinitive 'and to maintain' following past 'cleaned'. For a habitual action use present simple 'clear away' and 'maintain'. 'Networking area' is likely wrong choice; use 'working area' or 'work area'. Suggestion: keep consistent tense for habitual routines and choose correct noun. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Yeah, it is essential to keep the place tidy, especially the workplace because they organize is is really easy to find the atoms and also led me to feel calmer and focus.

✓ Yes, it is essential to keep places tidy, especially the workplace, because being organized makes it really easy to find items and also helps me feel calmer and more focused.

Multiple issues: 'they organize is is' is garbled; use 'being organized' as a noun phrase. 'Atoms' is a wrong word; should be 'items'. 'Led me to feel calmer and focus' uses wrong tense and form; use 'helps me feel calmer and more focused'. Also use 'places' or 'the place' consistently. Suggestion: use clear subject ('being organized') and correct verbs 'makes' and 'helps', and use 'more focused' as adjective. Grammar problem type ID:6