Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng, mạch lạc và ngắn gọn (tối đa 3–4 câu). Tránh lặp từ và tiếng ngập ngừng (uh, umm). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nêu 1–2 lý do cụ thể với liên từ phù hợp (because, so, therefore). Chú ý ngữ pháp (my bedroom chứ không phải my bedrooms nếu nói về phòng mình) và trật tự từ. Ví dụ, thay vì nói "make me feel more lighter" nên nói "make me feel lighter" hoặc "feel more comfortable".

예시: Yes, I do. I find a tidy room makes me feel lighter and more relaxed because it reduces stress and helps me focus. For example, when my bedroom is organized, I can study more efficiently and sleep better.

제안: Trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích ngắn gọn với lý do và ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh dùng cấu trúc không tự nhiên như "recognized myself as" — dùng "saw myself as" hoặc "was". Chú ý thì quá khứ khi kể về thói quen (I didn’t keep my room tidy / My room was messy). Sử dụng liên từ như "because" hoặc "so" để liên kết câu rõ ràng hơn.

예시: No, I didn’t. When I was a child I was quite careless about tidiness because I preferred playing to cleaning, so my room was often cluttered with toys and books.

× Yes, definitely Personally, I think keeping things tidy can make me feel more lighter and uh like more appealing.

✓ Yes, definitely. Personally, I think keeping things tidy can make me feel lighter and more confident.

The phrase 'more lighter' is incorrect because 'lighter' is already a comparative adjective; adding 'more' is redundant. Use either 'lighter' or 'more light' (the latter unusual). Also 'more appealing' describes objects, not the speaker's feelings; 'more confident' or 'more comfortable' better matches the intended meaning. Add punctuation and remove filler words for clarity. Suggestion: Use a single comparative form without 'more' when the adjective already has comparative inflection (e.g., lighter), and choose an adjective that fits the subject (e.g., confident, comfortable).

× For example, umm, my bedrooms if uh, it could be keep in TI keep tidy.

✓ For example, my bedroom could be kept tidy.

The original sentence has broken structure and incorrect verb form: 'it could be keep' is ungrammatical. The correct passive form is 'could be kept'. Also 'bedrooms' vs 'bedroom' should match the singular reference; context implies one room. Remove filler words and unclear fragments for coherence. Suggestion: Use modal + be + past participle for passive (could be kept), and keep subject number consistent with context.

× Uh, it can be more livable in my in my eyes.

✓ It can be more livable in my opinion.

'In my in my eyes' is redundant and ungrammatical. The idiomatic expression is 'in my opinion' or 'in my eyes'. Also 'livable' is acceptable but 'more livable' compared to what is implied; 'more pleasant' or 'more comfortable' might be clearer. Suggestion: Use a fixed expression like 'in my opinion' or 'in my eyes' (only once), and ensure the comparative is meaningful.

× Well, I would say no because when I was younger I recognized myself as a person who is really nonchalant and I rarely cared about my bedrooms.

✓ Well, I would say no because when I was younger I saw myself as a very nonchalant person and I rarely cared about my bedroom.

'Recognized myself as' is wordier and less natural than 'saw myself as'. 'Who is really nonchalant' mixes present tense with past context; use past tense 'was' or rephrase. 'My bedrooms' should be singular 'my bedroom' if referring to personal room. Use past tense consistently when describing childhood. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent (past) for past habits and use natural verbs like 'saw myself' or 'considered myself'.

× So umm, when I was a child my bathroom is quite messy.

✓ So, when I was a child my bedroom was quite messy.

The sentence mixes past time marker 'when I was a child' with present tense 'is'. Change 'is' to past 'was'. Also 'bathroom' likely incorrect given earlier 'bedroom'; use 'bedroom' for consistency. Remove filler 'umm' and add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use past tense for descriptions of past states (was), ensure consistent reference to the same room (bedroom), and remove disfluencies.