Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer communicates the main idea but has grammatical errors, redundancy and awkward phrasing. Make a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating words, and add one short supporting reason using a linking word. Also correct grammar (use present simple) and word order.

예시: Yes, I like to keep things tidy because a clean, neat room makes me feel comfortable. For example, when my desk is organised I can relax and focus better.

제안: Your answer is relevant but has tense and grammar errors and some unclear pronouns. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then give a specific reason using a linking word. Avoid fillers like 'uh' and be concise (max 5 sentences).

예시: Yes, I used to keep my room tidy when I was a child. For example, I always put away my toys and books because a tidy room helped me concentrate when I studied on the computer.

× Is I'd like to give the things tidy because of when a room is a clean, neat and clean, it will be happy for staying in the room.

✓ I'd like to keep things tidy because when a room is clean and neat, it is pleasant to stay in.

The original sentence uses incorrect pronoun 'Is' at the start and awkward phrasing 'give the things tidy'. Use 'I'd like to' to express preference. Remove redundant words ('clean' twice) and use 'keep things tidy'. Replace 'it will be happy for staying in the room' with 'it is pleasant to stay in' for correct subject reference and natural expression. Also ensure parallel adjectives 'clean and neat'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Yes, when I was child I like to tidy up because of when my room was tidy.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I liked to tidy up because when my room was tidy,

The phrase 'I was child' is missing the article 'a' (singular noun requires an article). Also tense consistency: the context is past, so 'like' should be 'liked'. Keep 'when my room was tidy' as past description. This fixes singular/plural and tense mismatch. Grammar problem type ID:1

× It will help us to more concentrate, uh, study on the computer.

✓ it helped me concentrate more when studying on the computer.

The sentence mixes future 'will' with past context and awkward word order 'to more concentrate'. Because the speaker refers to childhood, use past tense 'helped'. Use correct adverb placement 'concentrate more' and change 'study on the computer' to 'when studying on the computer' for a natural gerund phrase. This fixes tense and adverb placement. Grammar problem type ID:6