Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, avoid repetition and filler words, and use clearer vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific reason with a linking word. Reduce pauses and repeated words (e.g., "I I", "my my"). Also replace casual contractions like "'cause" with more formal alternatives in the test. Aim for 2–3 sentences total.

예시: Yes, I do. I consider myself quite organized because I always arrange my desk and files before I begin work; this helps me focus and finish tasks more efficiently.

제안: Answer directly, avoid hesitations and repetition, and give a clear time reference with a specific example. Use a linking word to connect your general belief to your personal experience. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and correct grammar (e.g., "children" not repeated, "a teenager" or "my teenage years").

예시: Not really — I think children are naturally messy, so I didn't tidy much as a child. However, I started being more organised in my teenage years when I needed a tidy desk to study for exams.

× Actually I I am self-proclaimed OC because I like organizing things even before I start working.

✓ Actually I am self-proclaimed OCD because I like organizing things even before I start working.

The phrase 'self-proclaimed OC' is incorrect usage: 'OC' is not the usual adjective; the correct term is 'OCD' (obsessive-compulsive), or better 'self-proclaimed OCD' to describe a tendency. Also reduce the repeated 'I'. Suggestion: use 'I am self-proclaimed OCD' or 'I consider myself a bit obsessive about tidiness.'

× I like to keep my my space clean and very organized 'cause it helps me work better when umm the space around me is clean and organized.

✓ I like to keep my space clean and very organized because it helps me work better when the space around me is tidy and organized.

This sentence has repetitions ('my my', repeated idea 'clean and organized', filler words 'umm', and colloquial short form ''cause'). Remove duplicate words, avoid fillers, and use 'because' for formal speech. Also maintain parallel adjectives: 'tidy and organized.'

× I'm actually not sure if I started this habit of tidying up my space when I was a child 'cause I believe child children actually are are meant to be messy.

✓ I'm actually not sure if I started this habit of tidying up my space when I was a child because I believe children are meant to be messy.

Errors: repeated words ('child children', 'are are'), informal ''cause', and incorrect singular 'child' before 'children'. Remove repetitions and use plural 'children' with correct article usage. Use 'because' for clarity.

× So I think I just I just learned or started to be tidying things up when I became teenager.

✓ So I think I just learned or started tidying things up when I became a teenager.

Problems: repeated 'I just', incorrect verb form 'started to be tidying' (awkward), and missing article before 'teenager'. Use simple past 'became a teenager' and either 'started tidying' or 'started to tidy.' Repetition of 'I just' should be avoided.