Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, avoid hesitations and grammar errors, and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence plus one brief supporting detail. Replace filler words (uh) and correct grammar ("one of my strongest ability" → "one of my strongest abilities"). You can mention a specific example or coping strategy to make the answer more vivid.

예시: Yes, I generally like things tidy, but keeping them that way is difficult for me because I have ADHD. For example, I often set a 15‑minute timer each evening to tidy up small areas, which helps me stay organized without feeling overwhelmed.

제안: Structure the response: start with a direct answer, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating information and unnecessary comments ("my mother didn't want me at all" is unclear). Use clearer vocabulary and correct tense. Provide a brief example or contrast to enrich the answer.

예시: No, I rarely kept my room tidy as a child. For instance, toys and clothes were often scattered on the floor, so it usually looked chaotic. Because my mother also struggled with tidiness, we never had a strict routine to keep the room organized.

× Yes, I like to keep things tidy but uh, it is not one of my strongest ability unfortunately because I have ADHD so keeping things tidy is really hard for me.

✓ Yes, I like to keep things tidy, but unfortunately it is not one of my strongest abilities because I have ADHD, so keeping things tidy is really hard for me.

The noun 'ability' should be plural 'abilities' when referring to one of several strengths (Grammar Problem Type ID 13). Also word order and punctuation were improved: move 'unfortunately' before 'it is' and add commas to separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: use plural forms when indicating one item among many (one of my strongest abilities) and place adverbs like 'unfortunately' near the verb they modify.

× No, I couldn't make my room tidy when I was a child.

✓ No, I couldn't keep my room tidy when I was a child.

The verb phrase 'make my room tidy' is awkward in this context; English commonly uses 'keep' with 'tidy' to express maintaining cleanliness (Grammar Problem Type ID 5). The past tense 'couldn't' is appropriate for ability in the past, so keep tense but use the natural collocation 'keep my room tidy'.

× Uh, my room was always a bit chaotic.

✓ My room was always a bit chaotic.

The original sentence is grammatically acceptable, but filler 'Uh' is unnecessary in a written response. This is a sentence structure/style improvement (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Suggestion: remove fillers for clearer spoken or written responses.

× Uh, as I told you, I have ADHD and my mom had that too.

✓ As I told you, I have ADHD, and my mom had it too.

Use the pronoun 'it' to refer back to the noun 'ADHD' (Grammar Problem Type ID 12). 'That' is less precise here. Also remove 'Uh' and add a comma for clarity. Suggestion: use 'it' when referring to a previously mentioned medical condition.

× So it's like a family tradition.

✓ So it's like a family trait.

While 'family tradition' is not strictly wrong, it suggests a deliberate cultural practice rather than an inherited condition; 'family trait' better fits the intended meaning (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Suggestion: choose vocabulary that accurately reflects intended meaning to avoid confusion.

× So I couldn't make it and my mother didn't want me at all.

✓ So I couldn't keep it tidy, and my mother didn't mind at all.

The phrase 'couldn't make it' is unclear; 'keep it tidy' clarifies the object (the room) and matches earlier usage. Also 'my mother didn't want me at all' is likely incorrect in meaning; context implies the mother didn't mind the mess, so 'didn't mind at all' is appropriate (Grammar Problem Type ID 5). Suggestion: ensure verbs clearly reference their objects and that statements reflect intended meaning; adjust tense and modality as needed.