Tidiness— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (e.g., “uh”) and generic phrases like “of our life.” Add one specific supporting reason or brief example using a linking word (e.g., “because,” “so”) to show relevance. Keep it to no more than 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I like to keep things tidy because it helps me stay organized and focused. For example, when my desk is clear I can find documents quickly, so I waste less time. This also reduces my stress and makes it easier to concentrate.

제안: Avoid repetition and grammatical mistakes. Begin with a direct answer, then give a brief specific example or reason using linking words (e.g., “because,” “so,” “for example”). Correct subject-verb agreement and pronoun use. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. Even as a child I usually tidied my room because I liked everything in its place; for example, I always put my toys back on the shelf so I could find them the next day and save time.

× Yes, I prefer to keep things neat and clean because it helps us to stay organized and uh, it also reduces stress of our life.

✓ Yes, I prefer to keep things neat and clean because it helps me stay organized and reduces the stress in my life.

The student used the pronoun 'us' and the phrase 'our life' when referring to themselves; this is inconsistent with 'I prefer'. Use 'me' and 'my life' for first-person singular. Also, 'helps me stay' is more natural than 'helps me to stay', and 'reduces the stress in my life' is clearer than 'reduces stress of our life'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Yes I did, whenever I was tired I always kept my room neat and clean because I am I am person who always like to keep things organised and it reduce our stress and time.

✓ Yes, I did. Whenever I was tired, I always kept my room neat and clean because I am a person who always likes to keep things organised and it reduces our stress and saves time.

Multiple tense and form errors: after saying 'I did' the rest refers to habitual past so 'Whenever I was tired, I always kept' is correct. The phrase 'I am I am person' has a duplication and misses an article; use 'I am a person'. 'Who always like' should be 'who always likes' to agree with singular subject (third person singular). 'It reduce' should be 'it reduces' for subject-verb agreement. Added 'saves time' to clarify 'and time'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Yes I did, whenever I was tired I always kept my room neat and clean because I am I am person who always like to keep things organised and it reduce our stress and time.

✓ Yes, I did. Whenever I was tired, I always kept my room neat and clean because I am a person who always likes to keep things organised, and it reduces stress and saves time.

The original run-on sentence lacks proper punctuation and contains repeated words. Splitting into two sentences and adding commas improves clarity. Removing duplication and fixing verb forms makes the sentence grammatically correct and easier to follow. Grammar problem type ID:26